2010 retrospective - part 2 · the marking schemes used during the marking operation and included...

Retrospective2010 Queensland Core Skills Test Short Response (SR) (Part 2 of 5)

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Short Response (SR)CommentaryThis year’s SR subtest comprised 18 items across eight units. As students worked through each unit, they interacted with challenging and engaging stimulus material. Test developers paid careful attention to framing each item in a way that made it accessible to most students. The SR testpaper comprised units with stimulus material selected from fields as diverse as mathematics, logic, astronomy, literature, physical and social sciences and visual arts.

This year’s paper was again varied in its content, covering a broad range of CCEs. The different tasks included showing how to fold a simple envelope by drawing a diagram and composing step-by-step instructions, writing a formal apology, following an intricate mathematical method accurately, ruling lines on a map, determining percentages, drawing a page imitating an alphabet book, drawing a line graph, crafting a description. These tasks aimed to interest students and impart knowledge while assessing student achievement.

Model responses and commentaries on student performanceWhat follows is an item-by-item discussion that includes model responses and marking schemes, tables and graphs of the distributions of grades and commentaries that discuss how students handled the tasks and that give suggestions which might help. At times, references to specific student responses are included to exemplify observations. As much as possible model responses are actual student responses. Model responses are those that demonstrate a high level of performance and would have been awarded the highest grade, A.

For some items, especially the more open-ended items, responses were extremely varied. For these it is not possible to provide examples of the many ways in which students responded. The detailed, item-specific marking schemes indicate the scope of acceptable responses for different grades. Even for the more closed items the marking schemes demonstrate that different ways of perceiving “the solution” were able to gain credit.

Marking schemesThe marking schemes used during the marking operation and included in this section of the Retrospective are not designed to be read in isolation. They are but one element of the marking prescription. During the marking operation markers undergo rigorous training in how to apply the marking schemes to student responses of one marking unit. The training involves careful consideration and application of the material presented by immersers.

For organisational purposes during the marking operation, the testpaper units were grouped into five marking units. In 2010, Marking Unit 1 contained testpaper units One and Eight, Marking Unit 2 contained testpaper units Two and Five, Marking Unit 3 contained testpaper units Three and Four, Marking Unit 6 contained testpaper unit Six and Marking Unit 7 contained testpaper unit Seven.

Since all short response items are double marked, this means that a student’s response booklet was marked by at least 10 different independent markers — more, if any response(s) required referee marking.

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SR 2010 summary

Note: CCEs specific to an item are listed on the item’s marking scheme.The baskets into which CCEs are grouped are shown in Appendix 2.

Unit Item Basket Common Curriculum Elements

OneAlex & Tom

1 28 Empathising31 Interrelating ideas/themes/issues33 Reaching a conclusion which is consistent with a given set of

assumptions38 Generalising from information

2

TwoSleeve

3 26 Explaining to others44 Synthesising50 Visualising

ThreeStyle Guide

4 2 Finding material in an indexed collection4 Interpreting the meaning of words …10 Using vocabulary appropriate to a context26 Explaining to others31 Interrelating ideas/themes/issues44 Synthesising

5

FourLarge Numbers

6 7 Translating from one form to another16 Calculating with or without calculators37 Applying a progression of steps to achieve the required answer44 Synthesising7

FiveTordesillas

8 6 Interpreting the meaning of … maps …16 Calculating with or without calculators17 Estimating numerical magnitude50 Visualising57 Manipulating/operating/using equipment9

SixAlphabet Books

10 4 Interpreting the meaning of words …9 Using correct spelling, punctuation, grammar10 Using vocabulary appropriate to a context29 Comparing, contrasting31 Interrelating ideas/themes/issues34 Inserting an intermediate between members of a series43 Analysing46 Creating/composing/devising48 Justifying49 Perceiving patterns

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12

SevenIce-cream

13 6 Interpreting the meaning of … graphs15 Graphing19 Substituting in formulae22 Structuring/organising a mathematical argument16 Calculating with or without calculators37 Applying a progression of steps to achieve the required answer48 Justifying

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15

16

EightThunderbird Inn

17 4 Interpreting the meaning of words or other symbols10 Using vocabulary appropriate to a context26 Explaining to others31 Interrelating ideas/themes/issues43 Analysing46 Creating/composing/devising

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Unit One

This unit was based on a short extract from James Patterson’s detective novel Jack and Jill. The extract records the meeting between President Thomas Byrne and Alex Cross.

The following table shows the percentage of responses awarded the various grades for the items in this unit.

Item 1

Model response

CommentaryItem 1 is a two-star item which tested achievement in CCEs 28 Empathising, and 31 Interrelating ideas/themes/issues.

In the extract Alex Cross is deciding how he will introduce himself to the President. Students were asked to describe a likely train of thought that led to his decision. Alex’s train of thought had four elements. He rejected the use of the title “Detective” (this was to be inferred as it was not articulated in the text). He perceived the use of the title “Doctor” would indicate some status, reputation or formality so he rejected this title. He decided that he wanted to be addressed by his given name. Students had to ensure that their response was consistent with

the text. A creditable reason for Alex choosing to be addressed by his given name had to go beyond mere personal preference.

Responses that were awarded an A-grade covered the four elements by clearly articulating a plausible train of thought which provided a reason for rejecting the use of “Detective”, indicating the perceived status/

A B C D E N O

Item 1 6.2 41.5 33.8 15.7 2.9

Item 2 15.2 21.7 48.7 11.7 2.7

A shaded box indicates that the grade was not available for that item.

In the first half of the extract, Alex Cross goes through a process of deciding how he wants to

be addressed by the President.

Describe a likely train of thought that led him to his decision.

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Alex has a choice of using Doctor or Detective. He’s quite aware that many at the

White House would attach a certain status to anyone called ‘Doctor’—but Alex is not

after status. If he used ‘Detective’, the President may become very wary of what he

says (‘What you say may be used in evidence against you’). He wants to create an

atmosphere without pretensions or defensiveness—one of open communication. So,

he rejects both titles, and chooses to be addressed as Alex, because it’s more friendly.

A B C N O

100%


reputation/formality of the title “Doctor”, providing a reason for rejecting the use of the title “Doctor” and providing a reason for Alex choosing to be addressed by his given name.

Many students had difficulty identifying all four elements. Some failed to indicate why Alex rejected the use of the title “Detective” or, while some recognised the status/reputation/formality associated with the title “Doctor”, they failed to provide a clear reason for rejecting it.

One way a response could be awarded a B-grade was to provide a reason for Alex Cross rejecting the use of the title “Detective” and showing (or, by default, indicating) that he chose to be addressed by his given name. Defaulting meant that the student made it clear that they were addressing the two elements together by providing clear grammatical signals such as the comparative (e.g. “less intrusive”, “more approachable”) or a connector like “on the other hand” or “on second thought”. A second way was to focus on the title “Doctor” or to consider the two titles together as professional titles. The student needed to indicate the perceived status/reputation/formality of the title “Doctor” or the professional title and then provide a reason for rejecting that title. As well, the response needed to show (or, by default, indicate) that Alex Cross chose to be addressed by his given name. It was also acceptable for students to reverse this defaulting process; that is, provide a reason for Alex Cross choosing to be addressed by his given name and show (or, by default, indicate) that Alex rejected being addressed as “Doctor” or using a professional title. This latter category of the B-grade response was very common.

Students need to be attentive to the wording of stems. The stem required students to consider Alex’s “train of thought” and to articulate each step of his thought process not to answer the question why he chose to be addressed by his given name. Responses that ignored this instruction and merely provided a creditable reason for Alex choosing to be addressed by his given name/rejecting the other titles could, at best, be given a C-grade. Stems are carefully constructed and need to be carefully considered when devising a high quality response.


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as

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x,

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se i

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more

fri

end

ly.


Item 2

Model response 1

Model response 2

CommentaryItem 2 is a two-star item which tested achievement in the CCEs 33 Reaching a conclusion which is consistent with a given set of assumptions and 38 Generalising from information.

Students were asked what the extract suggested about Alex Cross’s impression of the President just after he had met him. The cue indicated that the students had to give reasons to support their conclusions regarding Alex’s impression of the President. Two model responses are provided on the marking scheme as students may have interpreted the extract in two different but equally valid ways. One

interpretation was that the President presented himself in a friendly, helpful way because that was part of his character. Another interpretation was that the President was a studied politician who used his charming manner as a political “bag of tricks” to befriend Alex and therefore Alex could not trust him.

An A-grade response provided a credible and specific impression by describing one or more characteristics of the President and giving clear reason(s) linked to the characteristic(s) and based on the extract for forming this impression. This characteristic might have been described with one or two adjectives, as in “friendly and genuine” or with a phrase or clause. It was important that the reasons were clearly matched to the

What does the extract suggest about Alex Cross’s impression of the President just after

he has met him?

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Give reasons to

support your

conclusion.

1. Alex thinks that the President is a man who is not bound by

formalities—this can be seen from the President asking Alex to call him by

his first name, Tom, resulting in them ‘shaking off their surnames’. Further, he sees the

President as honest, with strength of character because of his firm handshake.

What does the extract suggest about Alex Cross’s impression of the President just after

he has met him?

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Give reasons to

support your

conclusion.

2. He thinks that the President is a practised performer, a chameleon. He

gives Alex a practised ‘broad smile’ designed to appeal to the public because

it is charming. He also repeats the actual words of Alex by introducing himself with ‘And I

prefer Tom’. He is reflecting what people want to hear and see.

A B C N O

100%


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characteristic(s) given. A mismatch between these two was a common error, e.g. “He is genuine because he had a ‘charismatic’ smile.”

Some responses detailed Alex going through an intricate thought process, perhaps a reflection of Item 1. As long as students came to a definite conclusion about an impression or why, the response could be awarded an A-grade. The reasons proffered had to match the steps in Alex’s thinking.

The marking scheme specifies two important notes when determining a grade. The first note says that the impression must be formed by Alex Cross and that it must be an impression of the President. Some students gave their impression of Alex’s emotions and reactions on meeting the President instead of focusing on Alex's impression of the President. Others gave The President’s impression of Alex. Such responses gained no credit.

Students should read the stem (and any cues) carefully and respond to what is asked of them, not a variation.

The second note demanded that the response demonstrated that the student understood the meaning of “charismatic” (a word in the stimulus material) if it was used or was the supporting evidence for a reason. Simply saying that the President was “charismatic” was not sufficient to be creditable. It had to be clear from the response that the meaning of “charismatic” was understood.

To be awarded a B-grade, the response provided a credible and specific impression by describing a characteristic of the President and a reason, linked to the characteristic and based on the extract, for forming this impression. Many responses fell into this category because one of the pieces of evidence matched the characteristic but a second piece of evidence was either absent, mismatched or simply cited “charismatic”.

There were two ways for a response to be awarded a C-grade. The first way was to identify one characteristic of the President that can be inferred from the text, e.g. “He is casual and laid-back.” The second was to provide evidence from the text to support either a broadly positive or negative impression of the President.

Students did this in different ways. If they used broad general descriptors such as he is average, OK, a good bloke, a real person, they were awarded a C-grade as long as they provided evidence from the text. The requirement for “evidence” rather than “reasons” allowed for responses that simply provided positive or negative observations about the encounter, e.g. “His impression of the President was very positive because they seemed to like each other and they used their first names.”

The cue instructs students to give reasons (plural).


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esp

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se:

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Ale

x t

hin

ks

that

the

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sid

ent

is a

man

wh

o i

s n

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bou

nd

by f

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ties

—th

is c

an

be

seen

fro

m t

he

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sid

ent

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lex t

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all

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by

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am

e, T

om

, re

sult

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in

th

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kin

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ff t

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r su

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mes

’. F

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her

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es t

he

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nes

t, w

ith

str

eng

th o

f

chara

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au

se o

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irm

han

dsh

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2.

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ks

that

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pra

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ham

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s:

1.

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pre

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s th

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pre

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ed b

y A

lex

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ss.

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spon

se m

ust

sh

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th

at

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can

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kn

ow

s th

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ean

ing o

f “ch

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or

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to

be

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as

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to g

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Unit Two

The item in this unit was based on the folding of a decorative paper sleeve (a simple envelope). The stimulus material was a photograph showing two different views of such a design. Students were told that the sleeve was folded from a single square sheet of paper that had not been cut or torn.

The following table shows the percentage of responses awarded the various grades for the item in this unit.

Item 3

Model response

A B C D E N O

Item 3 7.8 24.3 31.1 15.7 10.0 8.9 2.2

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Show only the crease

lines. Do not include

labels or other

markings.

Present written instructions that are not supplemented with any diagrams and do not rely on reference to the

square above for clarity.

1. Fold the paper into equal thirds from top to bottom.

2. Unfold.

3. Fold the top right hand corner down until the right hand edge of the top

third lies along the top fold line.

4. repeat step 3. for the bottom right hand corner.

5. Fold the bottom third of the paper up to cover the middle third.

6. Fold the top third down to cover the other two thirds.

7. Fold in half from left to right.


CommentaryItem 3 is a three-star item which tested achievement in CCEs 50 Visualising, 44 Synthesising and 26 Explaining to others.

Students were asked to show how to fold the pictured decorative sleeve by ruling lines of dashes within the square provided to show the crease lines. They were also asked to write step-by-step instructions to explain how to fold the sleeve. The response area included the square and a lined area for the written instructions. One cue directed students to show only the crease lines within the square and not to include labels or other markings. The other cue asked them to present written

instructions that were not supplemented by any diagrams and that did not rely on reference to the square for clarity.

To be awarded an A-grade, the response had to show the three sets of crease lines (the thirds, the half and the triangles) ruled and correctly positioned within the square. No incorrect information was to be shown or given. The written instructions had to be clear, stand-alone instructions (as defined in the notes on the marking scheme).

Grades other than an A-grade hinged on how many ambiguities (as classified in note 9, on the marking scheme), omissions or incorrect instructions were made throughout the response. The most common ambiguities were related to: the orientation of the square (which could alter where the corners would be folded or how the thirds and half were aligned); how to fold the corners (if the instruction was simply to fold to the crease line, the fold may not have been in the correct position); and the omission of an instruction to unfold (which indicated that the corners were folded while the paper was still folded in thirds).

It is worth noting that a large number of students confused the definitions of basic concepts such as halves, quarters, thirds, triangles, squares.

This item highlights the importance of presenting to do the QCS Test with all the essential equipment as listed on the front of the testpaper. Some crease lines appeared to have been drawn without using a ruler.

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O

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50

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4

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C

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ion

s th

at,

wh

en

clari

fied

by t

he

dia

gra

m i

f

nec

essa

ry, w

ou

ld f

orm

th

e

slee

ve.

A

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e re

spo

nse

pro

vid

es

•cl

ear

stan

d-a

lon

e

inst

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ion

s th

at

wou

ld

form

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slee

ve

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e sq

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wit

h t

he

thre

e

sets

of

crea

se lin

es r

ule

d a

nd

all

corr

ectl

y p

osi

tion

ed.

Th

e sq

uare

does

not

incl

ud

e

lab

els

or

oth

er m

ark

ing

s.

No i

nco

rrect

in

form

ati

on

is

sho

wn

or

giv

en.

B

Th

e re

spo

nse

pro

vid

es

•st

an

d-a

lon

e in

stru

ctio

ns

that,

exce

pt

for

no m

ore

than

on

e am

big

uit

y, w

ou

ld

form

the

slee

ve

•th

e sq

uare

wit

h t

he

thre

e

sets

of

crea

se lin

es

ru

led

an

d

reaso

nab

ly p

osi

tion

ed.

D

Th

e re

spo

nse

pro

vid

es

inst

ruct

ion

s th

at,

wh

en

cla

rifi

ed b

y t

he

dia

gra

m i

f

nec

essa

ry, w

ou

ld f

orm

a

slee

ve.

Th

e re

spo

nse

pro

vid

es t

he

squ

are

wit

h t

he

thre

e se

ts o

f

crea

se l

ines

rea

son

ab

ly

posi

tion

ed.

OR

E

Th

e re

spo

nse

pro

vid

es

inst

ruct

ion

s th

at,

wh

en

clari

fied

by t

he

dia

gra

m i

f

nec

essa

ry, w

ou

ld f

orm

tw

o s

ets

of

crea

se l

ines

rea

son

ab

ly

posi

tion

ed.

Th

e re

spo

nse

pro

vid

es t

he

squ

are

wit

h t

wo s

ets

of

crea

se

lin

es r

easo

nab

ly p

osi

tion

ed.

OR

No

tes:

1.

“C

lear”

in

stru

ctio

ns

are

in

stru

ctio

ns

that

can

be

per

form

ed i

n o

nly

on

e w

ay.

2.

“S

tan

d-a

lon

e” i

nst

ruct

ion

s d

o n

ot

rely

on

an

y d

iagra

m,

lab

el o

rre

fere

nce

to t

he

squ

are

.

3.

“a

sle

eve”

has

fold

ed-d

ow

n c

orn

ers,

fold

ed-i

n s

ides

an

d i

sfo

lded

in

half

to f

orm

a p

ock

et.

Th

e sl

eev

e is

a s

leev

e th

at

if u

nfo

lded

wou

ld p

rod

uce

th

e th

ree

sets

of

crea

se l

ines

rea

son

ab

ly p

osi

tion

ed.

4.

Th

e se

ts o

f cr

ease

lin

es a

re:

the

“th

ird

s”, th

e “h

alf

” a

nd

th

e “tr

ian

gle

s”.

5.

Corr

ectl

y p

osi

tion

ed t

ria

ngle

cre

ase

lin

es j

oin

th

e en

d o

f th

e th

ird

s cr

ease

lin

e to

a p

oin

t tw

o-t

hir

ds

of

the

dis

tan

ce b

etw

een

th

e co

rner

an

d t

he

half

cre

ase

lin

e.

6.

Rea

son

ab

ly p

osi

tion

ed t

rian

gle

cre

ase

lin

es j

oin

th

e en

d o

f th

e th

ird

s cr

ease

lin

e to

a p

oin

t th

at

lies

bet

wee

n o

ne

sixth

an

d a

lmost

a h

alf

way d

ow

n t

he

sid

e of

the

squ

are

.

7.

Un

less

oth

erw

ise

state

d,

ass

um

e th

e co

rner

s are

fold

ed i

n t

he

sam

e d

irect

ion

an

d t

he

fin

al

fold

-in

-half

in

stru

ctio

n i

s acr

oss

, n

ot

alo

ng, th

e re

ctan

gle

an

d p

lace

s th

e tr

ian

gle

on

th

e in

sid

e.

8.

Th

e sl

eeve

can

have

the

“th

ird

s” f

old

ed i

n e

ith

er o

rder

, i.

e. l

eft

over

rig

ht

or

righ

t over

lef

t.

9.

An

am

big

uit

y i

s:

•a

n i

nst

ruct

ion

th

at

can

be

per

form

ed i

n m

ore

th

an

on

e w

ay,

on

e of

wh

ich

wil

l fo

rm t

he

slee

ve

•a

n u

nst

ate

d b

ut

imp

lied

in

stru

ctio

n (

such

as

un

fold

ing).

10.

If t

he

inst

ruct

ion

to u

nfo

ld i

s m

issi

ng i

t m

ay b

e ass

um

ed f

or

C-,

D-

or

E-

gra

des

.


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IN

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E

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it 2

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3

Mod

el R

esp

on

se:

1.

Fold

th

e p

ap

er i

nto

eq

ual

thir

ds

from

top

to b

ott

om

.

2.

Un

fold

.

3.

Fold

th

e to

p r

igh

t h

an

d c

orn

er d

ow

n u

nti

l th

e ri

gh

t h

an

d e

dge

of

the

top

th

ird

lie

s alo

ng t

he

top

fold

lin

e.

4.

rep

eat

step

3. fo

r th

e b

ott

om

rig

ht

ha

nd

corn

er.

5.

Fold

th

e b

ott

om

th

ird

of

the

pap

er u

p t

o c

over

th

e m

idd

le t

hir

d.

6.

Fold

th

e to

p t

hir

d d

ow

n t

o c

over

th

e oth

er t

wo t

hir

ds.

7.

Fold

in

ha

lf f

rom

lef

t to

rig

ht.


20

Unit Three

The two items in this unit were based on an adapted extract from a style guide. Students were told the purpose of a style guide is to make document writing clear, correct and unambiguous.


Item 4

Model response

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Item 4 0.5 25.5 34.0 28.3 10.6 1.2

Item 5 18.1 22.8 26.2 26.7 2.9 3.4


Due to all the reminders about mutual respect, we are now better able to co-operate.

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Its a shame the amount of unforced errors he makes effects how well the team does.

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The gift she gave me was a rather unique acknowledgement of all my efforts on her behalf.

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Neither of them were happy that the true facts about the crime had been misused in the trial.

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Owing cooperate

It’s number affects

rather acknowledgment

was true


CommentaryItem 4 is a three-star item which tested achievement in CCEs 2 Finding material in an indexed collection and 4 Interpreting the meaning of words or other symbols.

Students were required to find and then to correct errors in the four given sentences, based on the conventions listed in a style guide extract. In the stem they were told that each sentence had more than one error. Corrections required in this item included replacing words, deleting words or correcting the spelling of words. Only the nine errors and corrections shown in the model response were allowed and markers were instructed not to credit other corrections. The cue

instructed students to make corrections based on the style guide information only. The purpose of a style guide is to ensure all users adopt the same language conventions, especially where common usage may allow different uses of a word.

The errors in the sentences were:

for sentence one,• according to the style guide, “due to” is not to be used to start a sentence. Therefore it is incorrect as

given and the appropriate correction would be to change it to “owing to”.• “co-operate” should not have a hyphen. The word should be spelled “cooperate”.

for sentence two,• “Its” is incorrect and should be written as “It's” or as “It is”.• “amount” refers to a quantity of something that cannot be counted. Therefore in this context, it needs to

be replaced with “number”.• “effects” is identified as a noun in the style guide, so in this context needs to be replaced with the verb

“affects”.

for sentence three,• the style guide indicates the word “unique” cannot be modified, so “rather” must be deleted.• “acknowledgement” is misspelled according to the style guide. The corrected word does not contain the

second “e”.

for sentence four,• the subject/verb agreement is incorrect. “Neither” is singular; therefore, it requires a singular verb. The

word “were” should be changed to “was”. This is deemed to be the only acceptable correction for this error because any other correction would have to be based on information not specified in the extract of the style guide.

• the style guide indicates that the word “facts” cannot be modified by the word “true” or “false” so “true” needs to be deleted.

The A-grade response had to indicate only the nine errors and make the appropriate corrections for each.

Students found this item very accessible with omits accounting for just slightly more than 1% of responses. The number of A-grade responses was not high. The correction that presented the most challenge for students was correcting the subject/verb agreement in the last sentence. Students also did not always adhere to the direction: “according to information in the style guide extract”.

The stimulus for this item could be considered quite lengthy if it had to be read in its entirety. The instruction to “Read the words in bold…. Return to the extract as needed” is important to follow to make the most efficient use of time.

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e a

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corr

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s

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most

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un

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ak

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he

9 a

pp

rop

riate

corr

ecti

on

s.

B

Th

e re

spon

se

•in

dic

ate

s at

least

7 o

f th

e er

rors

•m

ak

es a

t le

ast

7 o

f th

e ap

pro

pri

ate

corr

ecti

on

s

•m

ay

incl

ud

e a

t m

ost

tw

o u

nn

eces

sary

corr

ecti

on

s.

D

Th

e re

spon

se

•in

dic

ate

s a

t le

ast

3 o

f th

e er

rors

•m

ak

es a

t le

ast

3 o

f th

e a

pp

rop

ria

te

corr

ecti

on

s.

Note

s:

1.

Th

e m

eth

od

of

ind

icati

ng a

nd

corr

ecti

ng m

ust

be

clea

rly s

how

n a

nd

un

am

big

uou

s.

2.

An

“u

nn

eces

sary

corr

ecti

on

” o

ccu

rs w

hen

a c

orr

ecti

on

is

mad

e to

som

eth

ing t

hat

is n

ot

on

e of

the

9 e

rro

rs.

3.

No p

enalt

y f

or

low

er c

ase

“o” f

or

Ow

ing n

or

“i”

for

It’s

is

to b

e ap

pli

ed.

4.

Sp

elli

ng t

hro

ugh

ou

t th

e re

spon

se m

ust

be

con

sist

ent

wit

h t

he

style

gu

ide.

Mod

el R

esp

on

se:

Th

eg

ift

she

gav

em

ew

asa

rath

eru

niq

ue

ack

no

wle

dg

emen

to

fal

lm

yef

fort

so

nh

erb

ehal

f.

Nei

ther

of

them

wer

eh

app

yth

atth

etr

ue

fact

sab

ou

tth

ecr

ime

had

bee

nm

isu

sed

inth

etr

ial.

rather

ackn

owled

gment

was

true

Its

ash

ame

the

amo

un

to

fu

nfo

rced

erro

rsh

em

akes

effe

cts

ho

ww

ell

the

team

do

es.

It’s

number

affec

ts

Du

eto

all

the

rem

ind

ers

abo

ut

mu

tual

resp

ect,

we

are

no

wb

ette

rab

leto

co-o

per

ate.

Owing

coopera

te


Item 5

Model response

CommentaryItem 5 is a three-star item which tested achievement in CCEs 26 Explaining to others, 10 Using vocabulary appropriate to a context, 44 Synthesising and 31 Interrelating ideas/themes/issues.

Students were required to choose one disruption from one of a list of three possible disruptions to public transport. They were instructed to write a formal apology related to their choice, to structure the apology to include a reason for the disruption and provide an undertaking that steps were being taken to overcome any problems associated with the disruption. They were also told their apology would be posted on public notice boards and on relevant websites. Finally,

students were asked to include three (from a list of nine) seed words. These words, together with their meanings, were included in the style guide extract. The first cue reminded students to give a plausible explanation for the disruption and to use an appropriate tone. The second cue asked them to underline their three chosen words.

To be awarded an A-grade, responses needed to: appropriately use three of the seed words as they were given; include an apology; “fully attend to” an explanation for the disruption and an undertaking to fix the problem or a reassurance that some action was being taken; have an apt tone for a public notice. Of special note is the requirement to use the seed words appropriately.

Many responses fell short of meeting these requirements. Most commonly students either did not use the seed words as given, or appropriately, or in sufficient number. Explanations that were implausible or unconvincing were credited as only “referencing” (rather than “fully attending to”), as was an undertaking that was inadequate. Some responses failed to give an explanation for the disruption and/or to give any undertaking. Very few responses did not maintain an apt tone.

Students should check to make sure all instructions in the stem and the cues have been followed to have the best opportunity of attaining the highest grade.

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Use an

appropriate

tone and give

a plausible

explanation for

the disruption.

Underline your

three chosen

words.

Queensland Rail wishes to apologise for the delayed Ipswich service.

Trains are delayed until further notice due to a track fault. We

you this kind of disruption is rare and unpredictable. Qld Rail will

the problem will be cleared up in the next hour. As an , buses

will be provided at all affected stations.

assure

ensure

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at

least

tw

o o

f th

e

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wo

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or

thei

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ari

an

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des

an

ap

olo

gy

•fu

lly

att

end

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on

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sen

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emen

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Th

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pro

pri

ate

ly u

ses

at

least

tw

o s

eed

word

s o

r th

eir

va

ria

nts

•in

clu

des

an

ap

olo

gy

•in

clu

des

ref

eren

ce t

o t

he

two

esse

nti

al

elem

ents

.

OR

A

Th

e re

spo

nse

•ap

pro

pri

ate

ly u

ses

thre

e se

ed w

ord

s,

as

giv

en

•in

clu

des

an

ap

olo

gy

•fu

lly a

tten

ds

to t

he

esse

nti

al el

emen

ts

•h

as

an

ap

t to

ne.

B

Th

e re

spon

se

•ap

pro

pri

ate

ly u

ses

thre

e se

ed w

ord

s

or

thei

r vari

an

ts

•in

clu

des

an

ap

olo

gy

•fu

lly a

tten

ds

to o

ne

esse

nti

al

elem

ent

•in

clu

des

ref

eren

ce t

o t

he

oth

er

esse

nti

al

elem

ent.

Th

e re

spon

se

•ap

pro

pri

ate

ly u

ses

at

least

tw

o s

eed

word

s or

thei

r vari

an

ts

•in

clu

des

an

ap

olo

gy

•fu

lly a

tten

ds

to t

he

two e

ssen

tial

elem

ents

.

OR

D

Th

e re

spon

se

•ap

pro

pri

ate

ly u

ses

at

least

on

e se

ed

word

s or

its

vari

an

t

•in

clu

des

an

ap

olo

gy

•in

clu

des

ref

eren

ce t

o o

ne

esse

nti

al

elem

en

t.

Th

e re

spon

se

•fu

lly a

tten

ds

to o

ne

esse

nti

al ele

men

t

•in

clu

des

ref

eren

ce t

o t

he

oth

er

esse

nti

al

elem

ent.OR

Note

s:

1.

An

ap

olo

gy i

s a s

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Unit Four

The two items in this unit were based on the Conway-Wechsler system naming exceedingly large numbers. The stimulus material outlined the method for doing this. The mathematics involved was basic arithmetic.


Item 6

Model response

Commentary

Item 6 is a two-star item which tested achievement in CCEs 37 Applying a progression of steps to achieve the required answer and 7 Translating from one form to another.

Students were required to translate 102272 into words using the Conway-Wechsler system and show all steps.

Following the method, students had to subtract three from 2272 and then divide the result by three, giving the answer 756 remainder one. The translation process began with conversion of the remainder into the word “ten” as directed by the stimulus. The quotient digits then needed to be

A B C D E N O

Item 6 6.4 15.1 22.1 26.0 19.6 10.7

Item 7 13.7 13.1 15.6 35.9 8.3 13.4


Name 10 to the power of 2272 (102272) using the Conway-Wechsler system.

............................................................................................................

Show all steps.

Translate carefully.

Write the name here.

2272

2272 – 3 = 2269

2269 ÷ 3 = 756 remainder 1, so use ten in front

6 = se(sx)

5 = (ns)quinquaginta

7 = (n)septingenti

ten sesquinquagintaseptingentillion

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translated from the table — the units digit 6 gave “se”, then the tens digit 5 translated to “quinquaginta” and the hundreds digit 7 became “septingenti”.

The name had to be assembled from these components with the “ten” standing alone as the first word of the name. The three name segments then had to be strung together in the order units, tens, hundreds using the connective letters stipulated by the stimulus. This meant an “s” was added after the “se” to form “sesquinquagintaseptingenti”. The final step was to remove the last “i” of “septingenti” and add “illion” to complete the second word as, “sesquinquagintaseptingentillion”.

A response which showed the correct answer “ten sesquinquagintaseptingentillion” with evidence of the application of the method shown was awarded an A-grade.

A B-grade was awarded to responses that evidenced all three stages of the method but made a minor error. An error was defined as minor if the student made an arithmetic mistake in the calculations stage, a transcription error in the translation stage or if the connective letter between “se” and “quinquaginta” was other than “s” and/or if an “n” was unnecessarily added after “quinquaginta”. The resulting answer needed to be consequentially correct for the B-grade to be awarded.

C-grade responses made at most three errors with at most one of them being a major error. Major errors involved: leaving out steps like subtracting the three; not assembling the name-segments in the right order to form the second word; mistranslating the remainder into a first word other than “ten” and not completing the second word by adding “illion”. The name again needed to be consequentially correct to be awarded a C-grade. One of the more frequently observed answers awarded a C-grade was “ten septenquinquagintasescentillion”. This answer showed the student had forgotten to reverse the quotient digits before translating them. Other students struggled to convert the .3333… shown on their calculator after the division into a remainder of one and translate it successfully into “ten” at the start of the name.


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Item 7

Model response

CommentaryItem 7 is a three-star item which tested achievement in CCEs 44 Synthesising and 16 Calculating with or without calculators.

Students were given the name of a very large number: “one hundred novemvigintioctingentillion”. The item required them to use the Conway-Wechsler system in reverse to determine the power of ten for this number. As shown in the marking scheme, there were six stages that students needed to go through to get the correct answer.

For an A-grade, the response had to provide 2492 as the answer and there had to be no incorrect working; that is, if working was shown, it could not contain errors. Most responses that were awarded an A-grade showed clear working.

It is advisable to show working even when it is not required as parts of it could contribute to the awarding of a creditable grade.

The majority of responses showed some working. Errors generally involved leaving out one or more of the stages required. Most students were able to translate the segments of the name into at least some of the correct digits.

Determine the power of 10 for the number that has the name:

one hundred novemvigintioctingentillion.

Show your working here.

Write the power in the box.

10

one hundred means a remainder of 2

novem 9 units, viginti 2 tens, octingenti 8 hundreds

829 x 3 = 2487

2487 + 2 = 2489

2489 + 3 = 2492

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Unit Five

This unit was based on historical information about the Treaties of Tordesillas and Zaragoza. Students were required to convert units which they may have been unfamiliar with.


Item 8

Model response

A B C D E N O

Item 8 25.6 13.2 11.4 8.0 29.1 12.8

Item 9 6.0 1.8 6.0 7.8 11.2 22.2 45.0


I. Calculate the distances in kilometres from the westernmost point of the Cape Verde

Islands to the Line as defined by the treatyTordesillas of 1494, first using Spanish leagues

and then Portuguese leagues.

Using Spanish leagues

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Using Portuguese leagues

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II. On the map, where 1 mm represents 50 km, rule and label lines to show clearly where

each of Spain and Portugal believed the Tordesillas Line to be.

Show all steps

required to

calculate each

distance.

Working space.

370 x 4.179 km = 1546.23 km

370 x 6.174 km = 2284.38 km

Spanish line 1546.23/50 = 30.9 31 mm

Portuguese line 2284.38/50 = 45.7 46 mm

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Model response continued

CommentaryItem 8 is a three-star item which tested achievement in CCEs 16 Calculating with or without calculators, 6 Interpreting the meaning of …maps… and 57 Manipulating/operating/using equipment.

The stimulus material provided historical information regarding the two differing interpretations of a line of demarcation, known as the Tordesillas Line, which was used by Portugal and Spain to settle territorial disputes in the 1400s. Students were told that the line was 370 leagues to the west of the Cape Verde Islands which was identified on the map provided. The Spanish located the line in one

place because they defined a league as being 4179 metres. The Portuguese located it in another as they defined a league as being 6174 metres.

Part I instructed students to convert 370 leagues to kilometres using each of the two definitions. The cue instructed them to show all steps required to calculate each distance. To be awarded an A- or B-grade,

Portuguese Spanish

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evidence of this working was mandatory. The stem instructed students to calculate the distances to the Tordesillas Line in kilometres.

Part II of this item provided students with a map of the North Atlantic Ocean on which they were required to locate, rule and label the Portuguese and the Spanish versions of the Tordesillas Line.

Showing working was not mandated in Part II; however, most students did use the space provided to perform the scaling calculations needed to locate the lines on the map to the degree of accuracy required. Working provided may be used to award creditable grades.

For an A-grade, the response had to calculate the correct distances in Part I and then use these distances to accurately locate and label the corresponding Tordesillas Lines on the map.

A common error was the incorrect positioning of both map lines to the east (rather than the west) of the Cape Verde Islands. Also a lack of skill in measuring map distances with a ruler was evident in responses.

As part of their early preparation for the QCS Test students should be encouraged to collect the necessary equipment, keep it in good order and become proficient at using it. A ruler that can be used to accurately measure millimetres and centimetres and that has a straight edge is an important piece of equipment every year.


34

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FIV

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8

PE

RF

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IN

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EM

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ts

for

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part

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resp

on

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how

s, o

n t

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map

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ly t

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two T

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part

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he

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how

s

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nce

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ng S

pan

ish

leagu

es

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e co

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nce

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ng

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ugu

ese

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es.

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part

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resp

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how

s, o

n t

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, n

o m

ore

th

an

tw

o T

ord

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las

lin

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ne

lin

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ly p

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y l

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elle

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es r

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nab

ly p

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tion

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part

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se s

how

s, w

ith

at

most

on

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ng S

pan

ish

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corr

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ort

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part

II

the

resp

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p, o

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ng

lea

gu

es

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e co

rrec

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lcu

lati

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of

a m

ap

dis

tan

ce u

sin

g t

he

sca

le

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ord

esil

las

lin

e d

raw

n a

nd

reaso

nab

ly p

osi

tion

ed o

n t

he

map

.

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s:

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Th

e co

rrec

t d

ista

nce

fro

m t

he

wes

tern

most

poin

t of

the

Cap

e V

erd

e Is

lan

ds

to t

he

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illa

s L

ine

for

Sp

an

ish

lea

gu

es i

s 1546.2

3 k

m a

nd

th

e co

rrec

t d

ista

nce

for

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ugu

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leagu

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s 2284.3

8 k

m. T

hes

e d

ista

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s co

rrec

tly r

ou

nd

ed t

o t

he

firs

t d

ecim

al

pla

ce o

r to

a

wh

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nu

mb

er a

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o b

e co

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der

ed c

orr

ect.

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corr

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tion

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th

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AT

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he

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n S

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TH

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las

lin

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at

is “

reaso

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ly p

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d t

o t

he

wes

t of

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e V

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ther

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ith

in 2

mm

of

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posi

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in 2

mm

of

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tion

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n t

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resp

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se i

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e li

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4.1

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m

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ng P

ort

ugu

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leagu

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74 k

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2284.3

8 k

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pace

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36

Item 9

Model response

CommentaryItem 9 is a four-star item which tested achievement in CCEs 17 Estimating numerical magnitude, 50 Visualising and 16 Calculating with or without calculators.

The stimulus for this item introduced more information about a second demarcation line, called the Zaragoza Line. The two lines of demarcation basically divided the world into two parts, one for Portugal and one for Spain. Students were asked to determine the percentage of the world that was attributed to Portugal. It was a challenging item requiring good visualisation skills.

To arrive at the required answer, it was necessary to visualise the Portuguese section of the world divided into four regions by their longitude. Two regions were to the west of the prime meridian and two to the east. The widths of these four regions needed to be added to find the total width. Most students receiving A- or B-grades worked in degrees of longitude and converted the two widths given in leagues into degrees. Fewer chose to work in leagues. Generally the working shown was clear and easy to follow. A minor error in the working was allowable for a B-grade.

The C-grade was awarded to responses which contained a visualisation error that led to the addition of only three widths instead of four. Another type of visualisation error existed where students added three widths and subtracted the fourth due to confusion with widths being east or west of given longitudes. A C-grade response showed evidence of finding the total width for Portugal in leagues or degrees of longitude but then either forgetting to work this out as a percentage or by giving an incorrect percentage.

D-grades were awarded to responses that contained at least one conversion from degrees of longitude to leagues (or vice versa) and also demonstrated the adding of two widths. At least one conversion was necessary in order to arrive at the correct answer so conversions were required for A- through to D-grades.

Responses containing at least one correct conversion or the addition of two widths or the determination of a fraction of the world that was attributed to Portugal were awarded an E-grade.

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Show all steps.

Longitude of Tordesillas Line

370/17.5 = 21.14° west of 25.35° W.

21.14 + 25.35 = 46.49°W.

Portuguese section

46.49 + 146.38 = 192.87°

As a percentage of 360° this is 192.87/360 = 0.53575 x 100

Or approximately 54%

Longitude of Zaragoza Line

297.5/17.5 = 17° east of 129.38° E.

17 + 129.38 = 146.38°E.

A B C D N O

100%

E


UN

IT

FIV

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9

PE

RF

OR

MA

NC

E D

OM

AIN

MA

RK

IN

G S

CH

EM

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Un

it 2

N

Res

pon

se i

s

un

inte

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ible

or

does

not

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sfy t

he

req

uir

emen

ts

for

an

y o

ther

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de.

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esp

on

se

has

bee

n m

ad

e

at

an

y t

ime.

17

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ima

tin

g n

um

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al

ma

gn

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de

50

Vis

ua

lisi

ng

16

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lcu

lati

ng

wit

h o

r w

ith

ou

t ca

lcu

lato

rs

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Th

e re

spon

se s

how

s, w

ith

at

most

on

e m

inor

erro

r, s

tep

s

that

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se a

co

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t co

nv

ersi

on

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dd

th

ree

wid

ths

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e a c

on

seq

uen

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y

corr

ect

fract

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se g

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a c

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wid

th f

or

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n o

f

the

wo

rld

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se s

how

s st

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that

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se c

orr

ect

con

ver

sion

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dd

th

e fo

ur

wid

ths

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e co

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t p

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nta

ge

for

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rtu

gal.

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spon

se s

how

s, w

ith

at

mo

st o

ne

min

or

erro

r, s

tep

s

that

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se c

on

ver

sion

s

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dd

th

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ur

wid

ths

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y

corr

ect

perc

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tage.

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spo

nse

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es t

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corr

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per

cen

tag

e fo

r P

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al.

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D

Th

e re

spon

se s

how

s st

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that

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se a

co

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t co

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on

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idth

s.

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e re

spon

se s

how

s a c

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sion

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e re

spon

se s

how

s th

e

ad

dit

ion

of

two

wid

ths.

Th

e re

spon

se s

how

s a w

idth

con

ver

ted

to a

fra

ctio

n o

f th

e

worl

d.

OR

OR

Mod

el R

esp

on

se:

Lon

git

ud

e of

Tord

esil

las

Lin

e

37

0/1

7.5

= 2

1.1

4°

wes

t o

f 2

5.3

5°

W.

21.1

4 +

25.3

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9°W

.

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git

ud

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goza

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e

29

7.5

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.5 =

17

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st o

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+ 1

29

.38

= 1

46

.38°E

.

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ugu

ese

sect

ion

46.4

9 +

146.3

8 =

192.8

7°

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a p

erce

nta

ge

of

360°

this

is

192.8

7/3

60 =

0.5

3575 x

100

Or

ap

pro

xim

ate

ly 5

4%

Note

s:

1.

Con

ver

sion

s in

clu

de

deg

rees

to l

eagu

es,

leagu

es t

o d

egre

es.

2.

A w

idth

is

the

dis

tan

ce a

lon

g t

he

equ

ato

ran

d c

an

be

mea

sure

d in

deg

rees

of

lon

git

ud

e or

leagu

es.

Wid

ths

wh

en a

dd

ed m

ust

be

in t

he

sam

e u

nit

.

3.

Th

e fo

ur

wid

ths

are

: th

e T

ord

esil

las

Lin

e to

th

e C

ap

eV

erd

e Is

lan

ds,

th

e C

ap

e V

erd

e Is

lan

ds

to

the

pri

me

mer

idia

n, th

e p

rim

e m

erid

ian

to t

he

Molu

ccas

an

d t

he

Molu

ccas

to t

he

Zara

goza

Lin

e.

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or

erro

rs i

ncl

ud

e:

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rith

met

ic a

nd

tra

nsc

rip

tion

erro

rs t

hat

resu

lt i

n a

n a

nsw

er t

hat

cou

ld r

easo

nab

ly b

e

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ugal’

s p

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of

the

worl

d

•re

ver

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on

s ass

ign

edto

th

e tw

o c

ou

ntr

ies.

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ract

ion

may b

e w

ritt

en w

ith

a v

incu

lum

, as

a d

ecim

al

or

as

a p

erce

nta

ge.

Last

Page

Cou

nt


38

Unit Six

A selection of colourful plates from a children’s alphabet book together with an explanatory text about such books formed the stimulus for this unit.


Item 10

Model response

CommentaryItem 10 is a three-star item which tested achievement in CCEs 4 Interpreting the meaning of words, 10 Using vocabulary appropriate to a context and 9 Using correct spelling, punctuation, grammar.

Part I required students to explain the problem that writers of alphabet books have when choosing a suitable object, animal or person to illustrate any letter. The cue instructed them to refer to examples from the first paragraph. The first paragraph of the stimulus material warns that the letter p should not be illustrated with “phantom” or “pterodactyl”. Both these words begin with the letter p but neither sounds as though it starts with the letter p. In other words, they do not

A B C D E N O

Item 10 13.0 18.3 30.2 15.4 20.7 2.2

Item 11 6.8 16.6 30.5 37.3 7.2 1.2

Item 12 4.0 12.9 33.5 26.4 14.6 4.4 4.1


I. Explain the problem — discussed in the first paragraph — that writers of alphabet books

must be aware of when choosing a suitable object, animal or person to illustrate any letter.

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II. For each of the letters, g and k, provide an example of an object, animal or person

that would, if illustrated in an alphabet book, have the problem discussed in the first

paragraph.

g k

Refer to

examples from

the first

paragraph.

Some words don’t sound the way they look. For example you don’t

hear the p in ‘pterodactyl’ so pterodactyl sounds like a t word.

Some combinations of letters can sound like another letter,

e.g. ph in ‘phantom’ sounds like f in fan.

gnome knife

A B C D N O

100%


behave as if they begin with their initial letter. It was expected that students would explain in some way that the word chosen for each letter in an alphabet book should behave as if it begins with its initial letter. To support the explanation, the examples of “phantom” and “pterodactyl” had to be provided in the response, as required by the cue. In Part II of the item, students were required to give an example of an object, animal or person that would exemplify the same problem already discussed for the letters g and k.

In responding to Part I, most students recognised why the ph and pt letter combinations in “phantom” and “pterodactyl” would not be suitable in an alphabet book page for the letter p. Most responses included both the required examples of “phantom” and “pterodactyl” but some did not pay sufficient attention to the cue and gave only one example.

In Part II students had to supply two suitable correctly spelled words that demonstrated the problem identified in the text. Some overlooked the requirement to supply an example of an object, animal or person and instead gave examples that were adjectives, verbs, adverbs or abstract words like concepts or qualities. Some students failed to read the stem thoroughly and consequently provided words such as “golf” and “kitten” which do not demonstrate the problem.


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s

un

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ts

for

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for

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con

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se:

for

I

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pla

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word

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as

if t

hey

beg

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ith

th

eir

init

ial

lett

er

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to “

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ab

le,

corr

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ple

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spon

se:

for

I

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pla

ins

that

the

word

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av

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s if

it

beg

ins

wit

h i

ts i

nit

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er

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fers

to “

ph

an

tom

” O

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yl”

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le e

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least

on

e of

wh

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is

corr

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y s

pel

led

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spon

se:

for

I

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pla

ins

that

the

word

s d

o n

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beh

ave

as

if t

hey

beg

in w

ith

th

eir

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ial le

tter

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fers

to “

ph

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tom

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to “

pte

rod

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for

II

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es o

ne

suit

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le a

nd

on

e

con

ced

ed e

xam

ple

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lea

st o

ne

of

wh

ich

is

corr

ectl

y s

pel

led

.

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e re

spon

se:

for

I

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pla

ins

that

som

e w

ord

s d

o n

ot

beh

ave

as

thei

r sp

elli

ng w

ou

ld

sugges

t.

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e re

spon

se:

for

II

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es a

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ast

on

e su

itab

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exam

ple

.

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beh

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as

if t

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do:

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uit

ab

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word

s fo

r ob

ject

s, a

nim

als

or

per

son

s su

ch a

s —

gn

om

e, g

nu

, gem

, gir

aff

e, g

nei

ss,

gn

om

on

, gaol,

gym

, k

nig

ht,

kn

ee, k

nit

tin

g.

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on

ced

ed

ab

stra

ct w

ord

s, a

dje

ctiv

es,

ver

bs,

ad

ver

bs,

con

cep

ts o

r q

uali

ties

su

ch a

s —

gn

aw

, gn

ost

ic, gen

ero

us,

kn

ow

led

ge,

kn

ock

ing.

•N

o c

red

it

pro

per

nou

ns

or

acr

on

ym

s su

ch a

s —

Gen

eva,

Geo

rge,

Geo

ff, G

hee

rull

a, G

eelo

ng, G

NO

R,

Kn

an

ap

ur,

Kn

oxvil

le.

3.

Wh

ere

corr

ect

spel

lin

g i

s n

ot

a r

equ

irem

ent

the

word

mu

st b

e a r

eco

gn

isab

le v

ersi

on

of

the

sup

pose

d w

ord

, e.

g.

gn

och

i in

stea

d o

f gn

occ

hi.

4.

A s

uit

ab

le e

xam

ple

can

be

cred

ited

as

a c

on

ced

ed e

xam

ple

if

nec

essa

ry, e.

g. “p

rovid

es a

t le

ast

on

e su

itab

le a

nd

on

e co

nce

ded

exam

ple

, at

least

on

e of

wh

ich

is

corr

ectl

y

spel

led

” w

ou

ld b

e sa

tisf

ied

by t

wo s

uit

ab

le e

xam

ple

s w

her

e on

e is

sp

elle

d c

orr

ectl

y a

nd

on

e in

corr

ectl

y.

5.

No c

red

it i

s giv

en f

or

rep

eati

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he

stim

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s.


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Item 11

Model response

CommentaryItem 11 is a three-star item which tested achievement in CCEs 49 Perceiving patterns, 43 Analysing and 29 Comparing and contrasting.

Part I required students to look closely at four illustrations taken from the alphabet book, compare and contrast the images in order to perceive patterns and provide three different ways in which continuity and predictability were used. Students were also required to supply an example for each of the ways they provided. In responding to Part I, most students were able to identify how continuity and predictability had been used but some students did not provide examples from the illustrations for each of the ways identified and so did not

respond fully to the stem and could not gain the highest grade.

Part II required students to give one example of how incongruity was used in the illustrations. To respond correctly students needed to understand the meaning of incongruity. This word had been glossed when first used in the stimulus material. Students should keep in mind all information given in a unit when responding to individual items within the unit.

I. Referring to the illustrations on the opposite page, identify three different ways in which

continuity and predictability have been used to create interest and promote the learning of

letters and their sounds. Give an example for each of the ways.

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You may use

point form.

The illustration that will appear on the letter page is always in the

preceding page in a smaller way, for example: the owl is flying in the

background in the n page and then is the major illustration in the “o is for owl” page.

In each page there is either the man or the woman as a minor character, for

example: in the n page the woman is writing a note.

There are often illustrations from previous letters on a page, for example: the o

page has the moon and the nest in its page.

An example of incongruity is how the feature animal/object is depicted doing human

things such as wearing glasses (owl), smiling (moon) or wearing a napkin (panda).

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A-grade responses provided three different ways in which continuity and predictability were used and an example from the illustrations for each way. They also provided one example of the use of incongruity in the illustrations.


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each

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in t

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s is

giv

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e re

spon

se p

rovid

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ne

wa

y

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ex

am

ple

fro

m t

he

illu

stra

tio

ns

for

tha

t w

ay.

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e re

spon

se p

rovid

es o

ne

way.

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e ex

am

ple

of

the

use

of

inco

ngru

ity

in t

he

illu

stra

tion

s is

giv

en.

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e re

spon

se p

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es t

wo d

iffe

ren

t

ways.

OR

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e re

spon

se p

rovid

es:

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o d

iffe

ren

t w

ay

s

•a

n e

xam

ple

fro

m t

he

illu

stra

tio

ns

for

each

way.

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e ex

am

ple

of

the

use

of

inco

ngru

ity

in t

he

illu

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tion

s is

giv

en.

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e re

spon

se p

rovid

es:

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ree

dif

fere

nt

wa

ys

•a

n e

xam

ple

fro

m t

he

illu

stra

tio

ns

for

each

way.

OR

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el R

esp

on

se:

Th

e il

lust

rati

on

th

at

wil

l ap

pea

r on

th

e le

tter

page

is a

lways

in t

he

pre

ced

ing p

age

in a

sm

all

er w

ay,

for

exam

ple

: th

e ow

l is

fly

ing i

n t

he b

ack

gro

un

d i

n t

he

n p

age

an

d t

hen

is

the

majo

r il

lust

rati

on

in

the

“o i

s fo

r ow

l” p

age.

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ach

page

ther

e is

eit

her

th

e m

an

or

the

wom

an

as

a m

inor

chara

cter

, fo

r ex

am

ple

: in

th

e n

page

the

wom

an

is

wri

tin

g a

note

.

Th

ere

are

oft

en i

llu

stra

tion

s fr

om

pre

vio

us

lett

ers

on

a p

age,

for

exam

ple

: th

e o p

age

has

the

moon

an

d t

he

nes

t in

its

pag

e.

An

exam

ple

of

inco

ngru

ity is

how

th

e fe

atu

re a

nim

al/

ob

ject

is

dep

icte

d d

oin

g h

um

an

th

ing

s su

ch a

s

wea

rin

g g

lass

es (

ow

l), sm

ilin

g (

moon

) or

wea

rin

g a

nap

kin

(p

an

da).


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have

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ne

or

more

com

pon

ents

in

on

e or

more

of

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pages

.

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e fo

llow

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ab

le g

ives

a s

elect

ion

of

ways,

wit

h e

xam

ple

s, s

how

ing h

ow

th

ey w

ork

toget

her

.

4.

Exam

ple

s of

inco

ngru

ity m

ay i

ncl

ud

e:

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imals

or

peo

ple

are

oft

en d

isto

rted

in

sh

ap

e or

size

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imals

an

d o

bje

cts

are

tre

ate

d l

ike

peo

ple

— a

nth

rop

om

orp

his

ed (

gla

sses

an

d n

ap

kin

s, s

mil

ing f

ace

of

the

moon

)

•p

eop

le a

nd

ob

ject

s so

met

imes

sli

p o

uts

ide

the

fram

es

•sc

ale

is

oft

en i

gn

ore

d,

e.g. m

ap

is

hu

ge

an

d p

eop

le l

ook

dis

tort

ed.

WA

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MP

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lust

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of

TH

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ord

for

the

page

is b

igger

th

an

th

e oth

er o

bje

cts.

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the

lett

er M

th

e m

oon

is

the

larg

est

ob

ject

on

th

e p

age.

Th

e p

rece

din

g p

age

con

tain

s a s

mall

er v

ersi

on

of

TH

E w

ord

’s i

llu

stra

tion

.T

he

ow

l ap

pea

rs m

uch

sm

all

er o

n t

he

N p

age

an

d t

hen

it

is t

he

cen

tral

focu

s of

the

O p

ag

e.

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her

th

e m

an

or

wom

an

is

on

ever

y p

age.

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mall

man

is

hold

ing a

map

on

th

e M

page.

Lan

dsc

ap

es h

ave

a p

att

ern

in

th

e p

ages

.N

an

d O

pages

have

a f

arm

sce

ne;

oth

ers

have

mou

nta

ins.

On

most

pages

at

least

on

e oth

er i

llu

stra

tion

for

TH

E l

ette

r ap

pea

rs.

Th

ere

are

pic

ture

s of

a p

ie,

pea

rs a

nd

a p

um

pk

in o

n t

he

P p

age.

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etit

ion

of

som

e of

the

alr

ead

y v

isit

ed o

bje

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in a

vari

ety o

f p

ages

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he

moon

ap

pea

rs o

n t

he

M a

nd

O p

age.

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e co

lou

r p

ale

tte

is s

imil

ar i

n a

ll p

ictu

res.

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gh

t b

lue

is r

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ted

on

all

fou

r p

ages

.

Th

e re

pet

itio

n o

f a s

imil

ar

style

of

dra

win

g.

Use

of

the

craze

d b

ack

gro

un

d o

n e

ach

pa

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Item 12

Model response

I. In the page space below create a rough sketch for an illustration for the letter q. Be careful

to follow the design elements already established in the other pages.

II. Provide a rationale for what you have included in your sketch.

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Use pencil.

Colour is not required.

You may write in the white space and use

arrows to clarify the contents of your sketch.

Complete this statement.

Refer to design

elements.

The reason I chose ‘quilt’ is because it is the item evidenced in ‘p is for panda’ that

begins with the letter ‘Q’. It also represents the most common phonetic sound of

the letter. I included the female person, as the images alternate beween male and

female in each image randomly, but remain fair in doing so. I included the rabbit, as

each image so far has shown the next item/ animal in the background of the image.

quilt


CommentaryItem 12 is a four-star item which tested achievement in CCEs 34 Inserting an intermediate between members of a series, 46 Creating/composing/devising, 48 Justifying, and 31 Interrelating ideas/themes/issues.

In this item, students were shown the coloured plates of the pages for the letters m to r. The page for the letter q was left blank. Students were instructed to study progression in the illustrations and note common features of the design and content of the illustrations. Students were provided with a blank template for the q page as part of the response area.

Part I required students to create a rough sketch for an illustration for the letter q page, following the design elements already established by the other pages. Cues advised students to use pencil, that colour was not required and that they may write in the white space, using arrows to clarify the contents of the sketch. Beneath the template, students were required to complete the statement “q is for ........” in keeping with their illustration. Part II required students to provide a rationale for what was sketched, referring to design elements.

The most notable elements of design in the progression of pages in the alphabet book were the foreshadowing of an image (in smaller form) on the page preceding the one in which it is featured and the man or the woman being included on every other page. Other examples of elements of design used in the progression of pages included: the object featured being the focal point and larger than other objects; a number of words beginning with the featured letter being included; backgrounds (nature, mountains, grass, trees) on all the pages being similar; and some objects being repeated on multiple pages.

From an examination of the illustrations, and recognition that the featured illustration for a letter must appear smaller on the preceding page, either “quilt”, “quince” or “question mark” could be the featured word for the q page.

For an A-grade response, the students were required to complete the statement “q is for …….” with one of these words: quilt, quince, or question mark. Their visual response had to contain a sketch of the word chosen and show it as the focal point, a rabbit (foreshadowing the r page feature) and the man or the woman. A rationale was required for each of the mandatory (required for that grade) elements. The rationale had to identify the design elements which justified the inclusion of each element. The rationale for each required that: the featured object (quilt, quince, or question mark) appeared on the previous page and hence was the preferred object for the q page; the small illustration of the rabbit prepared readers for its appearance as the focal point for the r page; the man or the woman appeared on every page. It was expected that the contents of the sketch made effective use of the page space as had been the case in all the other pages. There was no penalty for the misspelling of words, nor was there any extra credit or penalty for the use of colour.

It was surprising that a number of students recognised the backward referencing and provided “quilt”, “quince” or “question mark” as the q word, but did not acknowledge the forward referencing; that is, the rabbit.

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Unit Seven

This unit was based around the popularity of ice-cream and the process of manufacturing ice-cream.


Item 13

Model response

CommentaryItem 13 is a two-star item which tested achievement in the CCEs 19 Substituting in formulae and 37 Applying a progression of steps to achieve the required answer.

This item required students to find how many scoops of ice-cream an Australian eats on average per year. The stem reminded students about the formula for the volume of a sphere and indicated that one litre equals 1000 cm3. The first cue instructed students to show all steps. The second cue indicated that they should round their answer to the nearest whole number of scoops.

An A-grade response needed to provide evidence of correct substitution into the formula, i.e. students needed to show the formula rewritten with the “r” replaced by the value of the radius. Next the calculation had to be done correctly making sure that radius cubed was performed as radius x radius x radius, not radius

A B C D E N O

Item 13 37.2 19.3 27.2 10.3 6.0

Item 14 11.8 15.9 17.2 21.2 17.5 16.4

Item 15 18.3 14.7 22.7 24.0 8.3 12.0

Item 16 1.1 0.6 3.2 15.8 14.8 31.5 33.0


Suppose an average scoop of ice-cream is a solid sphere 6 centimetres (cm) in diameter.

Find how many scoops of ice-cream an Australian eats on average per year.

Reminder: Volume of a sphere 1 litre 1000 cm3

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3

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Show all steps.

Round your

answer to the

nearest whole

number of

scoops.

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4 3

3

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number of scoops =

volume of one scoop =

= 159

= 113.1

= 159.1518000

113.1

A B C N O

100%


x3 and that when finding the number of scoops, the units used for the yearly intake and the volume of one scoop were consistent. Finally, correct rounding had to give the whole number of scoops.

The majority of students were able to substitute into the given formula for the volume of a sphere. However some students substituted the diameter (6 cm) rather than the radius (3 cm). This could still be awarded a B-grade if subsequent calculations were correct. Other students, after substitution, made calculation errors by either failing to divide by the 3 in the denominator or failing to find 33 correctly. Again, correct subsequent calculations could lead to a B-grade. After finding the correct volume of one scoop, students needed to divide this figure into the volume of the yearly intake to arrive at the nearest number of scoops per year.

Use of mathematical formulae including substitution is important. Students should become more proficient at this.


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ps.

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t th

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in

to t

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f sc

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se p

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r eq

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as

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er o

f sc

oop

s.

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s:

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t su

bst

itu

tion

in

to f

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how

s th

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rep

lace

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y 3

or

.

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fo

r th

e n

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how

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me

of

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in

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olu

me

of

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oop

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its

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n u

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g t

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oop

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18

x 8

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or

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2 (

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).

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Item 14

Model response

CommentaryItem 14 is a three-star item which tested achievement in the CCEs 37 Applying a progression of steps to achieve the required answer and 16 Calculating with or without calculators.

Students were given a recipe for making a type of ice-cream mixture based on one litre of milk. They were then asked to determine how many kilograms of ice-cream mixture could be made from 1500 litres of milk if 0.2 percent of the mass of all the recipe ingredients was lost while making the ice-cream mixture. The cue indicated that students should show all steps.

The A-grade response needed to show correct execution of the four steps: multiple, % loss, conversion, summation, indicated in the marking scheme. The result 2174 or equivalent had to be provided as the answer and no inaccuracies could be included in the response.

With respect to “indicates steps have been executed correctly” (see note 1) the response had to contain a statement acknowledging the nature of a step or appropriate maths symbols for the step in question.

Students chose to perform the four steps in many ways. While some took the more direct path, summing the ingredients for one litre of milk first and then performing the multiple (i.e. changing to 1500 litres), percentage loss and conversion (grams to kilograms) step on the total, others chose to perform each of these steps on each of the seven ingredients! Although correct, this was certainly a much more time consuming way to perform the calculations. There was also a greater chance of errors occurring than in the more direct method. The response area provided may not have been sufficient if the longer method was used and this should have pointed students to a more succinct method. The amount of response area given is a good indication of the space that would be required to correctly and efficiently provide a response to an item.

Students found the percentage loss step the most difficult. Some multiplied their total by 0.998 and others multiplied by 0.002 and then subtracted this result from the original number either way being correct. However, some mistakenly used 0.98 (as in 2%) or 0.8 (as in 20%) or only found the amount lost and not what was left. Careful reading of the stimulus and stem is important.

To make one type of ice-cream mixture, milk is first brought to a temperature of 50°C. Then, to

each litre of milk, 70 grams (g) of skim milk powder, 100 g of butter and 220 g of sugar are

added. Next, 8 g of gelatin and 6 g of glycerol monostearate are combined and added to the

milk mixture along with 15 g of vanilla. One litre of milk has a mass of 1033 g.

Determine how many kilograms of ice-cream mixture can be made from 1500 litres of milk

if 0.2 per cent of the mass of all the ingredients is lost while making the ice-cream mixture.

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Show all steps.1033 + 70 + 100 + 220 + 8 + 6 + 15 = 1452 g

% loss =

Remainder = 1452 – 2.9 = 1449.1

In 1500 L = 1449.1 x 1500 = 2173650 g

= 2173.65 kg

= 2174 kg

1452 x2

1000= 2.9 g

A B C D N O

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pon

se i

nd

icate

s th

at

an

att

emp

t h

as

bee

n m

ad

e to

exec

ute

2 o

f th

e st

eps:

•m

ult

iple

•%

loss

•co

nver

sion

•su

mm

ati

on

.

Mod

el R

esp

on

se 1

:

mass

= 1

452

1452 x

1500 =

2178000 g

21

78

00

0 x

0.9

98

= 2

17

36

44

= 2

173.6

44

Mo

del

Res

po

nse

2:

1.0

33 x

1500 x

0.9

98 =

1546.4

kg

0.0

7 x

15

00

x 0

.99

8 =

10

4.8

kg

0.1

x 1

500 x

0.9

98 =

149.7

kg

0.2

2 x

15

00

x 0

.99

8 =

32

9.3

kg

0.0

08

x 1

50

0 x

0.9

98 =

11

.98 k

g

0.0

06

x 1

50

0 x

0.9

98 =

8.9

8 k

g

0.0

15 x

1500 x

0.9

98 =

22.4

6 k

g

Tota

l =

2173.6

kg

Mod

el R

esp

on

se 3

:

10

33 +

70

+ 1

00

+ 2

20

+ 8

+ 6

+ 1

5 =

14

52

g

% l

oss

=

Rem

ain

der

= 1

452 –

2.9

= 1

449.1

In 1

50

0 L

= 1

44

9.1

x 1

50

0 =

21

73

65

0 g

= 2

17

3.6

5 k

g

= 2

17

4 k

g

1452

210

00----

--------

2.

9=

g


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14

Note

s:

1.

For

the

A-g

rad

e re

qu

irem

ent

of

“in

dic

ate

s st

eps

ha

ve

bee

n e

xec

ute

d c

orr

ectl

y”, th

e re

spon

se m

ust

con

tain

a s

tate

men

t ack

now

led

gin

g t

he

natu

re o

f th

e st

ep

or

ap

pro

pri

ate

math

emati

cal

sym

bols

for

the

step

in

qu

esti

on

.

Corr

ect

exec

uti

on

of

the

4 s

tep

s (o

rder

ma

y v

ary

) a

re:

sum

mati

on

ste

p/s

— (

mil

k +

all

in

gre

die

nts

) w

hic

h l

ead

s to

th

e co

rrec

t an

swer

% l

oss

ste

p/s

— (

each

/tota

l x 0

.998)

or

(each

/tota

l – 0

.002 x

ea

ch/t

ota

l) w

hic

h l

ead

s to

th

e co

rrec

t an

swer

/s

mu

ltip

le s

tep

/s —

(ea

ch/t

ota

l x

15

00

)w

hic

h l

ead

s to

th

e co

rrec

t an

swer

/s

con

ver

sion

ste

p/s

— (

each

/tota

l )

wh

ich

lea

ds

to t

he

corr

ect

an

swer

/s.

2.

Th

e om

issi

on

of

un

its

or

the

incl

usi

on

of

inco

rrec

t u

nit

s in

th

e w

ork

ing o

r in

th

e fi

nal

resu

lt d

oes

not

att

ract

a p

enalt

y.

3.

“2174 o

r eq

uiv

ale

nt”

mea

ns

2174, 2173.6

, 2

17

3.6

4 o

r 2

17

3.6

44

.

4.

At

the

C-

an

d D

-gra

des

, th

e re

qu

irem

ent

“in

dic

ate

s th

at

an

att

emp

t h

as

bee

n m

ad

e to

exec

ute

… t

he

step

s” m

ean

s:

sum

mati

on

ste

p/s

— o

bse

rve

at

least

3 o

f th

e in

gre

die

nts

have

bee

n a

dd

ed c

orr

ectl

y

% l

oss

ste

p/s

— o

bse

rve

(at

least

on

e valu

e x {

on

eof

0.9

8, 0.9

98 o

r 0.8

}) o

r (a

t le

ast

on

e valu

e – {

on

e of

0.0

2,

0.0

02 o

r 0.2

} x t

he

valu

e) h

as

bee

n d

on

e co

rrec

tly

mu

ltip

le s

tep

/s —

ob

serv

e (a

t le

ast

on

e v

alu

e x

15

00

) h

as

bee

n d

on

e co

rrec

tly

con

ver

sion

ste

p/s

— o

bse

rve

the

resu

lt o

f at

least

on

e co

nver

sion

is

corr

ect.

5.

“2

17

3644 o

r eq

uiv

ale

nt”

mea

ns

2173

500 o

r 2

173

650.

1000


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Item 15

Model response

CommentaryItem 15 is a three-star item which tested achievement in the CCEs 15 Graphing and 6 Interpreting the meaning of graphs.

This item required students to draw a line graph to show the temperature throughout the ice-cream making process from the time the milk was at 50° C at the beginning until the time the ice-cream was ready for transportation. Students were told to assume each change of temperature mentioned in the process took 10 minutes. The stimulus dot-pointed the six stages in the process.

The A-grade response showed a line graph consisting of the starting point at (0, 50), the five appropriate horizontals (showing how long the mixture was at certain

temperatures), the five required connecting diagonals (showing the 10 minutes taken to change temperatures) and an end point at –20° C.

The cue instructed students to use a ruler. Unfortunately a number of responses showed that some students did not have this piece of essential equipment.

temperature (°C)

-20

-10

time (h)0

1 2 3 4 5 6

10

20

30

40

50

60

70

On the axes below draw a line graph to show the temperature throughout the process from the

time the milk is 50°C at the beginning until the time the ice-cream is ready for transportation.

Assume each change of temperature mentioned in the process takes 10 minutes.

Use a ruler.

1.

A B C N O

100%

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MA

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IN

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ing

Un

it 7

N

Res

pon

se i

s

un

inte

llig

ible

or

does

not

sati

sfy t

he

req

uir

emen

ts

for

an

y o

ther

gra

de.

O

No r

esp

on

se

has

bee

n m

ad

e

at

an

y t

ime.

15

Gra

ph

ing

6In

terp

reti

ng

th

e m

ean

ing

of

… g

rap

hs

C

Th

e re

spon

se s

how

s a l

ine

gra

ph

con

sist

ing o

f:

•th

e st

art

ing

po

int

at

(0, 5

0)

•a

t le

ast

3 a

pp

rop

ria

te h

ori

zon

tals

•an

en

d p

oin

t at

°C.

Th

e re

spon

se s

how

s a l

ine

gra

ph

ind

icati

ng

, in

co

rrec

t o

rder

, a

ll 6

of

the

dif

fere

nt

req

uir

ed t

emp

eratu

res.

{corr

ect

ord

er, le

ft t

o r

igh

t, i

s:

,,

, ,

,

}

20– OR

5070

44–

7–20–

A

Th

e re

spon

se s

how

s a l

ine

gra

ph

con

sist

ing o

f:

•th

e st

art

ing

po

int

at

(0, 5

0)

•th

e 5 a

pp

rop

riate

hori

zon

tals

•th

e 5 r

equ

ired

con

nec

tin

g d

iagon

als

•a

n e

nd

po

int

at

°C.

20–

B

Th

e re

spon

se s

how

s a l

ine

gra

ph

con

sist

ing o

f:

•th

e st

art

ing

po

int

at

(0, 5

0)

AN

D

at

most

on

e p

lott

ing e

rror

in o

ne

of

•th

e 5 h

ori

zon

tals

•th

e 5 c

on

nec

tin

g d

iagon

als

•th

e en

d p

oin

t.

Th

e re

spon

se s

how

s a l

ine

gra

ph

con

sist

ing o

f:

•a

t le

ast

4 a

pp

rop

ria

te h

ori

zon

tals

•a

t le

ast

3 r

equ

ired

co

nn

ecti

ng

dia

go

na

ls

•a

n e

nd

poin

t at

°C.

OR 20–

D

Th

e re

spon

se s

how

s, in

corr

ect ord

er, a

t

least

4 o

f th

e d

iffe

ren

t re

qu

ired

tem

per

atu

res.

{corr

ect

ord

er, le

ft t

o r

igh

t, i

s:

,,

, ,

,

}

5070

44–

7–20–

Note

s:

1.

For

the

gra

ph

to b

e re

gard

ed a

s a l

ine

gra

ph

th

e p

oin

ts m

ust

be

con

nec

ted

in

a “

forw

ard

s-ti

me”

man

ner

.

2.

“ap

pro

pri

ate

ho

rizo

nta

ls”

ha

ve

the

corr

ect

hei

gh

t an

d t

he

corr

ect

len

gth

.

3.

“re

qu

ired

con

nec

tin

g d

iagon

als

” j

oin

th

e en

d o

fa

ho

rizo

nta

l to

th

e b

egin

nin

g o

f th

e n

ext

hori

zon

tal

an

d s

how

tim

e el

ap

sed

is

10

min

ute

s (1

sq

uare

).

4.

A p

lott

ing e

rror

is o

ne

of:

•in

corr

ect

hei

gh

t of

on

e h

ori

zon

tal

•in

corr

ect

len

gth

of

on

e h

ori

zon

tal

•in

corr

ect

slop

e of

on

e d

iagon

al

•in

corr

ect

en

d p

oin

t

•th

e gra

ph

, w

ith

no e

rro

rs t

o t

hat

poin

t, f

inis

hin

g a

t .

5.

To c

red

it a

“te

mp

eratu

re” a

n i

nte

nti

on

al

mark

or

a c

han

ge

in d

irec

tion

of

dra

wn

lin

es m

ust

be o

bse

rved

at

that

tem

per

atu

re

(th

e x c

oord

inate

does

not

have

to b

e co

rrec

t).

7–


58

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UN

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EM

15

Mod

el R

esp

on

ses:

tem

pera

ture

(°C

)

-20

-10

tim

e(h

)0

12

34

56

10

20

30

40

50

60

70

tem

pera

ture

(°C

)

-20

-10

tim

e(h

)0

12

34

56

10

20

30

40

50

60

70

1.

2.


Item 16

Model response

The air that is whipped into the ice-cream mixture during the manufacturing process makes the

texture of the resulting ice-cream softer. The volume of air incorporated into the mixture can

vary, affecting what is referred to by ice-cream manufacturers as the ‘overrun figure’.

Ice-cream with an overrun figure of 0 per cent would have no air in it and would essentially be

just frozen ice-cream mixture. An overrun figure of 100 per cent doubles the volume of

ice-cream that can be made from a given volume of ice-cream mixture.

A particular ice-cream mixture has a density of 1125 g/litre and the mass of the resulting

ice-cream in a three-litre tub is 1900 g.

Calculate the overrun figure for this ice-cream and then clearly explain your reasoning.

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Show all steps of your

calculations here.

Write your

explanation here.

The resulting ice-cream is ice-cream mix + air and since air has no mass the

1900 g is ice-cream mix.

The volume that the ice-cream mix takes up in the 3 L tub is only 1.689 L

so there is 1.311 L of space for expansion.

The overrun figure is the % of air contained in the final mixture. Hence to

determine the overrun figure find the % increase for 1.689 L of ice-cream

mix to produce 3 L of ice-cream.

volume of solid in the 3 L tub = 1.689 L= (1900 1125)�

increase in volume = 3 – 1.689 = 1.311 L

% increase = 1.311

1.689

x 100 = 77.6

overrun figure = 77.6


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CommentaryItem 16 is a four-star item which tested achievement in the CCEs 48 Justifying and CCE 22 Structuring/organising a mathematical argument.

This item required students to calculate the overrun figure, as a percentage of air added to ice-cream mixture during the whipping process in manufacturing a particular batch of ice-cream. The stimulus provided the information that an ice-cream mixture has air whipped into it for improved texture. A mixture with no air in it had an overrun figure of zero percent and a mixture that doubled in volume due to air added in the whipping process had an overrun figure of 100 per cent.

The first cue instructed students to show all steps of the calculations. The second instructed students to write a clear explanation. The stimulus stated that a particular ice-cream mixture prior to whipping had a density of 1125 g/litre. A batch of this mixture had air whipped into it and three litres of the resulting ice-cream had a mass of 1900g.

Grades were awarded based on the combination of the calculations and the explanation. It was possible for the explanation to either enhance or detract from the grade suggested by the calculations alone.

Responses were awarded an A-grade if they showed an overrun figure of 77.6 and it had been arrived at via a sequence of clear, creditable steps, accompanied by a legitimate explanation with no inconsistencies. To be awarded an A-grade the overall response had to have volume as the context. A response that showed a sequence of calculations primarily based on mass or density could, if the explanation clearly showed how the mass or density was linked to volume, be awarded an A-grade.

Some of the explanations contained poor articulation of the thought processes behind the solution while others had an explanation that merely verbalised steps carried out in the calculations. Unfortunately, many responses had little or no explanation which meant that they could be awarded a C-grade. The separation of the response area into the calculation part and the explanation part guides students to do both and thus have the greatest opportunity to achieve a high grade.

A B C N O

100%

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Mark

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Un

it 7

N

Res

pon

se i

s

un

inte

llig

ible

or

does

not

sati

sfy t

he

req

uir

emen

ts

for

an

y o

ther

gra

de.

O

No r

esp

on

se

has

bee

n m

ad

e

at

an

y t

ime.

48

Ju

stif

yin

g

22

Str

uct

uri

ng

/org

an

isin

g a

ma

them

ati

cal

arg

um

ent

C

Th

e re

spon

se p

rovid

es:

•a

lo

gic

al

an

d c

orr

ect

seq

uen

ce o

f st

eps

•at

most

on

e er

ror.

Th

e st

eps

— i

f th

e er

ror

had

not

bee

n m

ad

e —

wou

ld l

ead

toth

e co

rrec

t over

run

fig

ure

.

A

Th

e re

spon

se p

rovid

es:

•a

lo

gic

al

an

d c

orr

ect

seq

uen

ce o

f st

eps

that

lead

s

toth

e c

orr

ect

over

run

fig

ure

•a

leg

itim

ate

exp

lan

ati

on

wit

h n

o i

nco

nsi

sten

cies

.

B

Th

e re

spon

se p

rovid

es:

•a

lo

gic

al

an

d c

orr

ect

seq

uen

ce o

f st

eps

•a

t m

ost

on

e er

ror

•a

leg

itim

ate

exp

lan

ati

on

.

Th

e st

eps

— i

f th

e er

ror

ha

d

not

bee

n m

ad

e —

wou

ld l

ead

toth

e co

rrec

t ov

erru

n f

igu

re.

D

Th

e re

spo

nse

pro

vid

es

•at

least

tw

o s

tep

s

•at

most

on

e er

ror.

Th

e st

eps

— i

f th

e er

ror

had

not

bee

n m

ad

e —

cou

ld h

ave

bee

n u

sed

in

a c

orr

ect

seq

uen

ce o

f st

ep

s to

fin

d t

he

ov

erru

n f

igu

re.

E

Th

e re

spo

nse

pro

vid

es

•on

e st

ep

•at

most

on

e er

ror.

Th

e st

ep —

if

the

erro

r h

ad

no

t

bee

n m

ad

e —

cou

ld h

ave

bee

n

use

d i

n a

corr

ect

seq

uen

ce o

f

step

s to

fin

d t

he

ov

erru

n

figu

re.

Mod

el R

esp

on

se:

volu

me

of

soli

d i

n t

he

3 L

tu

b =

L

incr

ease

in

volu

me

= L

% i

ncr

ease

=

over

run

fig

ure

= 7

7.6

Exp

lan

ati

on

:

Th

e re

sult

ing i

ce-c

ream

is

ice-

crea

m m

ix +

air

an

d s

ince

air

ha

sn

o m

ass

th

e 19

00

g i

s ic

e-cr

eam

mix

.

Th

e volu

me

that

the

ice-

crea

m m

ixta

kes

up

in

th

e 3

L t

ub

is o

nly

1.6

89 L

so t

her

e is

1.3

11 L

of

space

for

exp

an

sion

.

Th

e over

run

fig

ure

is

the

% o

f air

con

tain

ed i

n t

he

fin

al

mix

ture

. H

ence

to d

eter

min

e th

e over

run

fig

ure

fin

d t

he

% i

ncr

ease

fo

r 1

.68

9 L

of

ice-

crea

m m

ix t

o p

rod

uce

3 L

of

ice-

crea

m.

1900

1125

1.68

9=

31.

689

1.31

1=

–

1.31

11.

689

--------

-----

100

77.6

=

No

tes:

1.

For

the

A-

an

d B

-gra

des

, it

mu

st b

e cl

ear

from

th

e

calc

ula

tion

s an

d/o

r th

e ex

pla

nati

on

th

at

volu

me/

space

is

the

con

text.

2.

An

err

or

may b

e a m

ech

an

ical

or

tran

scri

pti

on

err

or

or

may o

ccu

r in

pre

sen

tin

g t

he

ov

erru

n f

igu

re a

s valu

es s

uch

as

177.6

, 1.7

7, 0.7

7, …

3.

An

exp

lan

ati

on

is

not

req

uir

ed a

t th

e C

-, D

- or

E-g

rad

es.

How

ever

, if

an

exp

lan

ati

on

is

pro

vid

ed i

n a

res

pon

se t

hat

ap

pea

rs e

ligib

le f

or

a C

-gra

de,

th

e ex

pla

nati

on

sh

ou

ld b

e

con

sid

ered

care

full

y, a

s it

may e

nh

an

ce o

r d

etra

ct f

rom

the

gra

de

sugges

ted

by t

he

calc

ula

tion

s on

ly.

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Page

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nt


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Unit Eight

This unit was based on an extract from Don Watson’s American Journeys, where he gave an account of some accommodation he encountered in America. Students were told hyperbole is a language technique that employs exaggerated or extravagant statements to produce a strong impression and that hyperboles are not meant to be taken literally.


Item 17

Model response

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Item 17 3.4 15.9 39.2 25.5 5.4 10.6

Item 18 2.4 11.9 31.5 19.7 7.0 7.3 20.2


Don Watson’s descriptions are intensified by im agery and figurative language such as simile,

metaphor and personification. Quote two examples of his descriptions that are especially vivid.

Explain what each conveys and why each is effective.

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Use at most

one simile in

your response.

“penetrated the sinuses like a bamboo skewer” is used to convey the

message that the room smelt extremely revolting and so strong that

it shot up his nose and made him feel like he was being stabbed in the

nostrils. It allows the reader to grasp an understanding of just how

dirty and revolting the Thunderbird Inn is.

“In the manner of classic motels, you spit on the road from the door of

your room”. This is a vivid image as it conveys the closeness of the

roadway and also the type of neighbourhood — somebody spitting

from the doorway does not conjure up thoughts of an upmarket motel.

The author is giving us a clue about the usual coarse clientele.


CommentaryItem 17 is a three-star item which tested achievement in the CCEs 4 Interpreting the meaning of words, 43 Analysing and 26 Explaining to others.

In the stem, students were told that Don Watson's descriptions are intensified by the use of imagery and figurative language such as simile, metaphor and personification. Students were required to quote two examples of descriptions that were especially vivid, explain what each conveyed, and explain why each was effective. The cue demanded that at most one simile should be used.

A-grade responses identified two vivid images, explained what each conveyed and explained why each was effective. There were two issues that arose with the

choice of a vivid image. Some extracts did not meet the criteria for what constituted a vivid image, for example, the first sentence of the extract and the two questions within the extract. It was acceptable for students to select two vivid images from a single sentence (i.e. “a roach as big as a small mouse …sitting on its hind legs like a kangaroo defending its territory”).

It was important for students to realise the difference between what an image conveyed and why it was effective. Convey refers to what the image imparts or makes known, e.g. what is made known about the smell, the cockroach, the girl, and so on. This information dealt with the specific piece of text. Effective refers to how the image puts into effect the purpose of the author. He was deliberately showing the reader that the motel was misrepresented or “dodgy” through mockery, distortion, exaggeration, etc. Thus effectiveness could be addressed in three ways: the response could link to subject matter (e.g. to give an account of the state of the accommodation) or to the author’s intention or the reader’s response.

Some responses addressed the “big picture” of the author’s intention and the reader’s response too generally and received no credit for explaining effectiveness. Sometimes the students cued convey and effectiveness incorrectly but they were not penalised for this as long as they addressed the text specifically (in convey) and the “big picture” specifically (for effectiveness).

The image could be identified variously. Generally, students identified the quotation accurately using quotation marks. However, identifying key words from the quotation, making a line reference or paraphrasing the image were acceptable methods of identifying the image.

Some students focused on defining figures of speech and failed to obey the stem, presumably a carryover from the previous items.

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or d

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not

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the

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her

grad

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one

viv

id im

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plai

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hat

it c

onve

ys•

expl

ains

why

it is

eff

ecti

ve.

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res

pons

e

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enti

fies

tw

o vi

vid

imag

es

•ex

plai

ns w

hat

each

imag

e co

nvey

s.

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res

pons

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iden

tifi

es t

wo

vivi

d im

ages

•ex

plai

ns w

hy e

ach

imag

e is

eff

ecti

ve.

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res

pons

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tw

o vi

vid

imag

es•

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ains

wha

t on

e im

age

conv

eys

•ex

plai

ns w

hy t

he o

ther

imag

e is

eff

ecti

ve.

OR

OR

OR

A

The

res

pons

e

•id

enti

fies

tw

o vi

vid

imag

es

•ex

plai

ns w

hat

each

con

veys

•ex

plai

ns w

hy e

ach

is e

ffec

tive

.

B

The

res

pons

e

•id

enti

fies

tw

o vi

vid

imag

es

and

for

one

of th

e im

ages

,

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plai

ns w

hat

it c

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plai

ns w

hy it

is e

ffec

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and

for

the

othe

r im

age,

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er

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plai

ns w

hat

it c

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ys

or •ex

plai

ns w

hy it

is e

ffec

tive

.

D

The

res

pons

e

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enti

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one

viv

id im

age

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plai

ns w

hat

it c

onve

ys.

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res

pons

e •

iden

tifi

es o

ne v

ivid

imag

e

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plai

ns w

hy it

is e

ffec

tive

.

The

res

pons

e id

enti

fies

tw

o vi

vid

imag

es.

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OR

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el R

esp

on

se:

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just

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nd r

evol

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n th

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els,

you

spit

on

the

road

from

the

door

of y

our

room

”. T

his

is a

viv

id im

age

as it

con

veys

the

clos

enes

s of

the

road

way

and

al

so t

he t

ype

of n

eigh

bour

hood

— s

omeb

ody

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ting

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m t

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ay

does

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con

jure

up

thou

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of

an u

pmar

ket

mot

el. T

he a

utho

r is

giv

ing

us a

clu

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out

the

usua

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clie

ntel

e.

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s:

1.

If a

fig

ure

of

spee

ch h

as

bee

n m

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sed

, n

o p

enalt

y a

pp

lies

.

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3 a

pp

lies

to a

ctu

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sim

iles,

not

wh

at

a s

tud

ent

may h

ave

cate

gori

sed

as

sim

ile.

]

2.

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res

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ites

more

th

an

tw

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de

the

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on

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e is

use

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ere

the

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de

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ase

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incl

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ing t

he

ap

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of

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], t

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resp

on

se i

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fo

r an

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ut

can

be

aw

ard

ed B

-, C

-, D

- or

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rad

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e cr

edit

ab

le, th

e re

spo

nse

mu

stn

ot

be

inco

nsi

sten

t w

ith

th

e

extr

act

.


Item 18

Model response

In a style consistent with the author’s, continue the account of the motel, introducing two

additional features of the Thunderbird Inn.

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Craft your response

using vivid descriptions

that differ from those in

the extract.

1. The bald lightbulb that hung above my narrow mouldering bed

was glowing only dimly; the last effort of a terminal firefly. It

had a crack down its centre, a crack that entranced me as

surely as any hypnotist, for it was artfully done, splintered just so, to provide the

bulb with a sense of poverty and shattered dreams. It even swung slightly back

and forth — just enough to give the impression that as soon as I lay down on my

equally unsteady bed, the wires that suspended it in space like the tether that

connects an astronaut to his spacecraft would snap and split open my poor head

like a melon. It did not, however, do so. As I settled down for the night, I gave the

appropriate credit to my host: Even the bed was perfect. The slats were unevenly

spaced so my spine sagged down as if an anvil had been rested upon my stomach.

The blanket was thinner than paper and crawled with countless tiny insects that

danced the tarentella over my cold and shivering body. Overhead, the bulb broke

free of its restraints, showering me with glass.

2. Having refreshed myself, I headed for the hotel diner for a bite to eat. As it

turned out, the Thunderbird Inn’s idea of a bite would have fed a small country and

their drinks were almost big enough to come with their own rowing boat. I waddled

back to my room and flopped onto the bed like a hippopotamus into mud - dry

mud! The next thing I knew I was enveloped by 50 years of dust particles arising

from the bedspread like a desert storm. Did I dare turn on the huge cube of a TV

sitting ponderously on the dresser opposite the bed?


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CommentaryItem 18 is a four-star item which tests achievements in the CCEs 46 Creating/ composing/devising, 10 Using vocabulary appropriate to a context and 31 Interrelating ideas/ themes/ issues.

The stem asked the students to continue the account of the motel in a style consistent with the author’s, introducing two additional features of the Thunderbird Inn. The cue reminded the students to craft their response using vivid descriptions that differed from those in the extract.

To be awarded an A-grade the response was required to continue the description in a manner consistent with the style and intent of the author. This meant that the

response had an element of linkage to the extract or that it felt a part of a single piece. This might have been recognised through a mocking or ironic tone that described the additional features as malfunctioning or unsavoury or through an entertaining or humorous tone “to raise a smile”. To be consistent with the style of the extract, the response had to be in the past tense. Some responses failed to focus on description and instead transformed into an exciting narrative.

The response had to evoke the time and place of the extract. The time might have been recognised through references to 50 years of dust, outdated technology, aged equipment, furniture or décor clearly associated with the past. The place might have been recognised through references to a retro hotel, run-down features or an overall sense of disappointment. Many students achieved this with great subtlety and cleverness.

The response was also required to introduce two additional features. The note on the marking scheme indicated that for an additional feature to be creditable, it had to be in keeping with the Thunderbird Inn as described in the extract and be located at the motel or within its surroundings. The features of the motel identified in the extract were the office, neon sign, girl, Coke machine, shower, smell, cockroach and the proximity to road. It should be noted that these features could be mentioned in students’ writing to establish a sense of continuity. Some commonly used additional features were the bed, ceiling, diner, television and other staff.

A-grade responses were required to build and sustain vivid descriptions that differed from those in the extract. Vivid descriptions are those that appeal to the senses, use figurative language and powerful imagery, and/or use creative diction (powerful verbs, adverbs and interesting adjectives and/or provide specific details). The quality of the description had to be sustained throughout the response.

A-grade responses had to use vocabulary appropriately and to effect. Responses that had a wide and interesting vocabulary were able to build the atmosphere and entertain the reader with their witty/funny/colourful writing. A-grade responses were required to use hyperbole “to raise a smile”. The intention of the hyperbole was to support the mocking tone and not to deviate into moods or genres that weren't consistent with the style of the original extract. Therefore, it was deemed not acceptable for responses to use hyperbole to generate excessive violence, distaste or fear which would not have been found in a travelogue such as American Journeys. The phrase “to raise a smile” was deemed to mean anything on a continuum from obvious delight (laugh out loud) to quite subtle amusement (gentle or wry observations). Also, for an A-grade response, any lapses in the use of spelling, punctuation and grammar could not detract from the readability of the response.

This item required students to analyse the style of the passage so that they could write in a similar style. They had to be able to control their creative ideas so that the response was in the style of the original extract, mocking but not gross. Some responses tried to achieve hyperbole by making their writing as distasteful as possible rather than by exaggerating in keeping with the style of the author. Students with control over a wide vocabulary achieved outstanding results in this item.

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wit

h

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sty

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nd

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t o

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e a

uth

or

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tim

e an

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the

extr

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fea

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f th

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l

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se o

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from

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an

d t

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ffec

t

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ses

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to “

rais

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mil

e”.

Any

laps

es in

the

use

of

gram

mar

, pu

nctu

atio

n or

spe

lling

do

not

detr

act

from

the

rea

dabi

lity

of t

he

resp

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.

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res

pons

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ds

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tion

of

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bu

lary

or

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to f

ocu

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n

neg

ati

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asp

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s) o

f

fea

ture

(s)

of

the

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pons

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des

crip

tion

of

the

mo

tel

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info

rces

a n

egati

ve

asp

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of

a f

eatu

re o

f

the

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tel.

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te:

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an

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dit

ion

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atu

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e cr

edit

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st b

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kee

pin

g w

ith

the

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d I

nn

as

des

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he

extr

act

an

d b

e lo

cate

d a

t

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mote

l or

wit

hin

its

su

rrou

nd

ings.

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esp

on

se:

1.

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e b

ald

lig

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at

hu

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bove

my n

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mou

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ly;

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last

eff

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of

a t

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inal

fire

fly.

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crack

th

at

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an

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me

as

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for

it w

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to g

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th

at

as

soon

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qu

all

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th

at

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end

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sp

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ther

th

at

con

nec

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n a

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his

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wou

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an

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dow

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ht,

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ave

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ap

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to m

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as

per

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slats

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sp

ace

d s

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pin

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gged

dow

n a

s if

an

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ach

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thin

ner

th

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pap

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ntl

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ren

tell

a o

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ith

gla

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shed

myse

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for

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s it

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rned

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he

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dri

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alm

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n r

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bed

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to m

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les

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sin

g f

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th

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e a d

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dare

tu

rn o

n t

he

hu

ge

cub

e o

f a T

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ng p

on

der

ou

sly o

n t

he

dre

sser

op

posi

te t

he

bed

?

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es t

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des

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ime

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lace

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the

ext

ract

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ther

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s T

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dit

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al

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res

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tel

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s O

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re o

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l A

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pre

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eatu

re o

f th

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mo

tel

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uil

ds

viv

id d

escr

ipti

on

s (o

f th

e fe

atu

res)

tha

t d

iffe

r fr

om

th

ose

use

d i

n t

he

extr

act

•u

ses

voca

bu

lary

ap

pro

pri

ate

ly

•u

ses

hyp

erb

ole

to

“ra

ise

a s

mil

e”.

In t

he m

ain,

any

laps

es in

the

use

of

gram

mar

, pun

ctua

tion

or

spel

ling

do n

ot

detr

act

from

the

rea

dabi

lity

of t

he r

espo

nse.

Las

t P

age

Cou

nt

C

The

res

pons

e

•co

nti

nu

es t

he

des

crip

tion

of

the

mo

tel

in a

ma

nn

er t

ha

t sh

ow

s

som

e re

cogn

itio

n o

f th

e st

yle

an

d

inte

nt

of

the

au

thor

•ei

ther

–u

ses

viv

id d

escr

ipti

on

th

at

dif

fers

fro

m t

hose

use

d i

n t

he

extr

act

to i

ntr

od

uce

ON

E

ad

dit

ion

al

featu

re o

f th

e m

ote

l

or

–u

ses

viv

id d

escr

ipti

on

sto

po

rtra

y T

WO

fea

ture

s o

f th

e

mote

l

•in

th

e m

ain

, u

ses

voca

bu

lary

ap

pro

pri

ate

ly

•in

clu

des

th

e d

elib

erate

use

of

word

s or

ph

rase

s th

at

are

“over

the

top

”.


68

UN

IT

EIG

HT

IT

EM

18

PE

RF

OR

MA

NC

E D

OM

AIN

MA

RK

IN

G S

CH

EM

E

Mark

ing

Un

it 1

N

Res

pons

e is

un

inte

lligi

ble

or d

oes n

ot

sati

sfy

the

requ

irem

ents

fo

r an

y ot

her

grad

e.

O

No

resp

onse

has

bee

n m

ade

at a

ny t

ime.

46C

reat

ing/

com

posi

ng/d

evis

ing

10U

sing

voc

abul

ary

appr

opri

ate

to a

con

text

31In

terr

elat

ing

idea

s/th

emes

/issu

es

A

The

res

pons

e •

cont

inue

s th

e de

scri

ptio

n of

the

m

otel

in a

man

ner

cons

iste

nt w

ith

the

styl

e an

d in

tent

of

the

auth

or

•ev

okes

the

tim

e an

d pl

ace

(of

the

extr

act)

•in

trod

uces

TW

O a

ddit

iona

l fe

atur

es o

f th

e m

otel

•bu

ilds a

nd su

stai

ns th

e us

e of

viv

idde

scri

ptio

ns (

of t

he f

eatu

res)

tha

t di

ffer

fro

m t

hose

use

d in

the

ex

trac

t•

uses

voc

abul

ary

appr

opri

atel

y an

d to

eff

ect

•us

es h

yper

bole

to

“rai

se a

sm

ile”.

Any

laps

es in

the

use

of

gram

mar

, pu

nctu

atio

n or

spe

lling

do

not

detr

act

from

the

rea

dabi

lity

of t

he

resp

onse

.

D

The

res

pons

e

•ad

ds t

o th

e de

scri

ptio

n of

the

m

otel

•us

es so

me

desc

ript

ive

voca

bula

ry o

r hy

perb

ole

to fo

cus o

n ne

gati

ve a

spec

t(s)

of

feat

ure(

s) o

f th

e m

otel

.

E

The

res

pons

e

•ad

ds t

o th

e de

scri

ptio

n of

the

m

otel

•re

info

rces

a n

egat

ive

aspe

ct o

f a

feat

ure

of

the

mot

el.

No

te:

For

an

ad

dit

ion

alfe

atu

re t

o b

e cr

edit

ab

le it

mu

st b

e in

kee

pin

g w

ith

the

Th

un

der

bir

d I

nn

as

des

crib

ed i

n t

he

extr

act

an

d b

e lo

cate

d a

t

the

mote

l or

wit

hin

its

su

rrou

nd

ings.

Mod

el R

esp

on

se:

1.

Th

e b

ald

lig

htb

ulb

th

at

hu

ng a

bove

my n

arr

ow

mou

lder

ing b

ed w

as

glo

win

g o

nly

dim

ly;

the

last

eff

ort

of

a t

erm

inal

fire

fly.

It

had

a c

rack

dow

n i

ts c

entr

e, a

crack

th

at

entr

an

ced

me

as

sure

ly a

s an

y h

yp

noti

st,

for

it w

as

art

full

y d

on

e, s

pli

nte

red

ju

st s

o, to

pro

vid

e th

e b

ulb

wit

h a

sen

se o

f p

over

ty a

nd

sh

att

ered

dre

am

s. I

t ev

en s

wu

ng s

ligh

tly b

ack

an

d f

ort

h —

ju

st e

nou

gh

to g

ive

the

imp

ress

ion

th

at

as

soon

as

I la

y

dow

n o

n m

y e

qu

all

y u

nst

ead

y b

ed, th

e w

ires

th

at

susp

end

ed i

t in

sp

ace

lik

e th

e te

ther

th

at

con

nec

ts a

n a

stro

nau

t to

his

sp

ace

craft

wou

ld s

nap

an

d s

pli

t op

en m

y p

oor

hea

d l

ike

a m

elon

. It

did

not,

how

ever

, d

o

so. A

s I

sett

led

dow

n f

or

the

nig

ht,

I g

ave

the

ap

pro

pri

ate

cre

dit

to m

y h

ost

: E

ven

th

e b

ed w

as

per

fect

. T

he

slats

wer

e u

nev

enly

sp

ace

d s

o m

y s

pin

e sa

gged

dow

n a

s if

an

an

vil

had

bee

n r

est

ed u

pon

my s

tom

ach

.

Th

e b

lan

ket

was

thin

ner

th

an

pap

er a

nd

cra

wle

d w

ith

cou

ntl

ess

tin

y i

nse

cts

that

dan

ced

th

e ta

ren

tell

a o

ver

my

co

ld a

nd

sh

iver

ing b

od

y. O

ver

hea

d, th

e b

ulb

bro

ke

free

of

its

rest

rain

ts, sh

ow

erin

g m

e w

ith

gla

ss.

2.

Havin

g r

efre

shed

myse

lf, I

hea

ded

for

the

hote

l d

iner

for

a b

ite

toea

t. A

s it

tu

rned

ou

t, t

he

Th

un

der

bir

d I

nn

’s i

dea

of

a b

ite

wou

ld h

ave

fed

a s

mall

cou

ntr

y a

nd

th

eir

dri

nk

s w

ere

alm

ost

big

en

ou

gh

to c

om

e

wit

h t

hei

r ow

n r

ow

ing b

oat.

I w

ad

dle

d b

ack

to m

y r

oom

an

d f

lop

ped

on

to t

he

bed

lik

e a h

ipp

op

ota

mu

s in

to m

ud

- d

ry m

ud

! T

he

nex

t th

ing I

kn

ew I

wa

s en

vel

op

ed b

y 5

0 y

ea

rs o

f d

ust

pa

rtic

les

ari

sin

g f

rom

th

e

bed

spre

ad

lik

e a d

eser

t st

orm

. D

id I

dare

tu

rn o

n t

he

hu

ge

cub

e o

f a T

V s

itti

ng p

on

der

ou

sly o

n t

he

dre

sser

op

posi

te t

he

bed

?

B

The

res

pons

e

•co

ntin

ues

the

desc

ript

ion

of t

he m

otel

in a

m

anne

r th

at is

larg

ely

cons

iste

nt w

ith

the

styl

e an

d in

tent

of

the

auth

or

•su

gges

ts t

he t

ime

or p

lace

(of

the

ext

ract

)

•ei

ther

– i

ntr

od

uce

s T

WO

ad

dit

ion

al

featu

res

of

the

mo

tel

or

– in

trod

uce

s O

NE

ad

dit

ion

al fe

atu

re o

f th

e

mote

l A

ND

ela

bora

tes

on

ON

E

pre

vio

usl

y m

enti

on

ed f

eatu

re o

f th

e

mo

tel

•bu

ilds

vivi

d de

scri

ptio

ns (

of t

he f

eatu

res)

th

at d

iffe

r fr

om t

hose

use

d in

the

ext

ract

•us

es v

ocab

ular

y ap

prop

riat

ely

•us

es h

yper

bole

to

“rai

se a

sm

ile”.

In t

he m

ain,

any

laps

es in

the

use

of

gram

mar

, pun

ctua

tion

or

spel

ling

do n

ot

detr

act

from

the

rea

dabi

lity

of t

he r

espo

nse.

Las

t P

age

Cou

nt

C

The

res

pons

e

•co

ntin

ues

the

desc

ript

ion

of t

he

mot

el in

a m

anne

r th

at s

how

s so

me

reco

gnit

ion

of th

e st

yle

and

inte

nt o

f th

e au

thor

•ei

ther

– u

ses

viv

id d

escr

ipti

on

th

at

dif

fers

fro

m t

hose

use

d i

n t

he

extr

act

to i

ntr

od

uce

ON

E

ad

dit

ion

al

featu

re o

f th

e m

ote

l

or

– u

ses

viv

id d

escr

ipti

on

s to

po

rtra

y T

WO

fea

ture

s o

f th

e

mo

tel

•in

the

mai

n, u

ses

voca

bula

ry

appr

opri

atel

y•

incl

udes

the

del

iber

ate

use

of

wor

ds o

r ph

rase

s th

at a

re “

over

th

e to

p”.


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