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Pearson Edexcel International GCSE 4EB0/01

English Language B

Paper 1

The purpose of this pack is to provide centres with a set of

exemplars with commentaries.

Included in this pack:

• Questions 4, 5, 9, 10, 11, 12 from January 2014 paper

• Range of responses with marks

• Examiner commentary

Questions 1, 2, 3, 6, 7 and 8 are n o t included as the range of correct

responses to these are fully exemplified in the mark scheme. This pack

focuses on the reading questions where students are asked to respond ‘in

your own words’.

Contents

Pages

Question 4 1-2

Question 5 3-4

Question 9 5-6

Question 10 7-15Question 11 16-39

Question 12(a) 40-47

Question 12(b) 48-58

Question 12(c) 59-67


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Question 4 (Total = 4 marks)

Candidate A

Mark: 4

Candidate B

Mark: 2

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Candidate C

Mark: 1

Candidate D

Mark: 4

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Candidate A

Mark: 3

Candidate B

Mark: 2

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Candidate C

Mark: 3

Candidate D

Mark: 2

Candidate E

Mark: 3

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Candidate A

Mark: 2

Candidate B

Mark: 3

Candidate C

Mark: 9

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Candidate D

Mark: 1

Candidate E

Mark: 0

Candidate F

Mark: 3

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Candidate A

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Candidate A cont.

Commentary

The candidate has made a choice in the first sentence but the remainder of the

response is narrative, re-telling the events of the two texts.

Mark: 1

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Candidate B

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Candidate B cont.

Commentary

The response has two clear reasons for the choice of the second text: ‘that it tells us about Amy’s major injuries’; ‘Amy stood up for life and survival’

with clear examples from the text to support each reason (4 marks). There is a

clear reason: ‘it describes a survival story of someone who was in a less remote

place’ and support for the text not chosen (2 marks).

Mark: 6

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Candidate C

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Candidate C cont.

Commentary

There is sufficient personal response and development to support the choice of

Text 1 in a comparative response (4 marks); however, there is not sufficient

development in support of the text not chosen (1 mark).

Mark: 5

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Candidate D

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Candidate D cont.

Commentary

The candidate has presented two reasons for the chosen text: ‘from the real

experience’ and ‘places are well know and the present time’ [sic] with a

quotation in support of the latter point (3 marks). There is a reason for notchoosing the other text: ‘date back to 1971 reader will find it hard to relate’

[sic] (1 mark).

Mark: 4

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Candidate A

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Candidate A cont.

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Candidate A cont.

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Candidate A cont.

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Candidate A cont.

Commentary

The response covers the three bullet points. There is some attempt to write an

article, but weak control limits the response. There is some accurate spelling,but grammatical structuring lacks control.

Marks:

AO1: 5

AO2: 7

AO3: 2

Total: 14

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Candidate B

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Candidate B cont.

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Candidate B cont.

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Candidate B cont.

Commentary

This is a re-telling of the original extracts and there is little evidence of the

candidate’s own work.

Marks:

AO1: 1

AO2 1

AO3 1

Total: 3

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Candidate C cont.

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Candidate C cont.

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Candidate C cont.

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Candidate C cont.

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Candidate C cont.

Commentary

The response offers quite a wide range of relevant points and relates well to

the intended audience. Quality of written communication is generallyaccurate across a fairly wide range but lacks the sophistication required for

level 5.

Marks:

AO1: 9

AO2: 15

AO3: 4

Total: 28

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Candidate D

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Candidate D cont.

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Candidate D cont.

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Candidate D cont.

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Candidate D cont.

Commentary

The response is well adapted for its intended audience. It covers a wide range

of ideas. The quality of written communication is ambitious and assured.

Marks:

AO1: 10

AO2: 20

AO3: 5

Total: 35

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Candidate E

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Candidate E cont.

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Candidate E cont.

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Candidate E cont.

Commentary

This is a sound response which has a good number of relevant points. The

response has a clear grasp of how to relate to the intended audience. Quality

of written communication is mostly secure with a few errors.

Marks:

AO1: 6

AO2: 12

AO3: 3

Total: 21

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Question 12 (Total marks: 35)

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Question 12(a)

Candidate A

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Candidate A cont.

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Candidate A cont.

Commentary

The ideas are effective and sustained. The argument is well structured.

Quality of written communication is accurate although there are some errorsbut also ambitious vocabulary.

Marks:

AO2: 18

AO3: 7

Total: 25

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Candidate B

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Candidate B cont.

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Candidate B cont.

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Candidate B cont.

Commentary

The ideas are broadly appropriate with some attempt at organisation. Quality

of written communication: the punctuation is mostly correct with some

correct spelling, but the grammar and expression are weak.

Marks:

AO2: 8

AO3: 3

Total: 11

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Question 12(b)

Candidate A

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Candidate A cont.

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Candidate A cont.

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Candidate B

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Candidate B cont.

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Candidate B cont.

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Candidate B cont.

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Candidate B cont.

Commentary

The ideas are broadly appropriate but they lack detail and development. The

response is pedestrian. Quality of written communication: the spelling issecure, but the grammar is weak.

Marks:

AO2: 10

AO3: 4

Total: 14

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Question 12(c)

Candidate A

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Candidate A cont.

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Candidate A cont.

Commentary A skilfully controlled response, which has compelling and fully developed

ideas. The occasional slips do not detract from the overall quality of this

mature and engaging response.

Marks:

AO2: 25

AO3: 10

Total: 35

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Candidate B

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Candidate B cont.

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Candidate B cont.

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