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A bald-headed man
A happy smile
A private yacht Wealthy millionaires
A best-selling hit
New recruits
A widespread epidemic
Established traditions
Pregnant with a child
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She was the most dominant tennis playerof her generation.
The company is marketing a line of veryunique eyeglasses.
The blaze completely destroyed the
empty warehouse. The late touchdown could not affect the
ultimate outcome.
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At that time; at that point in time
THEN
At this point in time; at the present time
NOW
Due to the fact that
BECAUSE
In the course of DURING, WHILE
In the event of
IF
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In the near future
SOON
In reference to; in terms of ABOUT
Located at
AT On one occasion
ONCE
Once in a great while
SELDOM; RARELY
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Previous to; prior to
BEFORE
Subsequent to
AFTER
With the expectation that
EXPECTING
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Thorough knowledge of the academic
regulations and policies of theUniversity and its academic divisions isessential for all students. Each studentis expected to become familiar withthe University of Westmedia
undergraduate catalog and to consultwith the academic advisers providedby the student's division.
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Jennilyn Mercado donated P25,000
of her own money to the KapusoFoundation due to the fact that shewants to help the poor.
The company owned by abusinessman makes labels for awide variety of products found in
retail stores and outlets.
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People in Asian countries have
been eating jellyfish as a delicacyfor hundreds of years.
The educational facility isimmediately being scheduled forcomplete demolition at the end
of the current school year.
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A typical night on the copy desk means ________
multiple stories by writers of varying _______. Younever have enough time, and you must rememberthat you are the ________, not the writer. Thistranslates into hurried decisions about someone
elses work. It can be a _________ for disaster if youbutcher the writing or change things that are all______.
TALENTS RIGHT FORMULA
EDITING EDITOR TALENT
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I have spent ________ two decadesediting copy and working with student
copy editors. I am _________ that youneed some clear priorities before youstart __________ someone elses copy,
before you begin tinkering with whatsome reporter thought was _________.
CONVINCE REWRITING WRITING
NEARLY CONVINCED
PERFECT
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When I was a rookie copy editor, I didnt
have a clear ______ of priorities. One of the
first stories I edited had an _________ lead.
Instead of letting it go, I ________ it. I
thought it was better, but the reporterdidnt. The next day, the _________ asked
me: What was wrong with my lead?
AVERAGE REWROTE SENSE
REPORTER EDITOR
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I wanted to improve it, I replied. What was
wrong with my lead? the reporter ________. Itneeded work, I said a bit louder. I had no clearreason for changing it.
What was wrong with my lead? the reporter
shouted.By then, other reporters and editors were
_________. I was ________. The reporter was_________.
It sucked! I yelled. ASKED LISTENING COUNTERED
MAD FRUSTRATED