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Sample Essay - Score of 6 Though America has sufered through times o massive economic distresswhere government intervention was necessary in maintaining the people’sspirit, America was ounded by individuals at town meetings, behind their

ploughs, or in peace ul petition. In today’s relatively stable society, peopleshould eel empowered to make changes and solve problems becausecountless re orms began at the grassroots level. I people need inspiration orproo , they need only to look to the progressives or the Steimet twins, whorid the beaches o cigarette butts with their activism.In the early !"##’s, American government had been congealed into a stateo corruption and inaction by the power ul lobbyists o the industries. In this$ilded Age, the disparity between rich and poor were astonishing%while&anderbilt became a millionaire, millions o actory workers%mostlyimmigrants%lived in s'ualor and ate insalubrious ood. At this same time,the progressive movement sought to recti y these in(ustices. )ane Addams,or e*ample, started a settlement house or women workers, where she notonly provided child care and +nancial support, but also campaigned or theabolition o child labor and the creation o laws to protect workers’ sa ety.

The actions o hundreds o others like her eventuly led to re orms in citygovernment%the re erendum, the city council ran by e*perts, not lobbyists,etc. All these re orms originated at the movement o the individual.owever, movement by individuals does not have to spread nationwide to beefective. In the state o -onnecticut, two teenagers who passionately caredor the environment efected state laws to make littering o cigarette buttsillegal on beaches. The teens began with simple cleanup campaigns withriends and amily but reali ed that more action could%and should%betaken. Thence, they began to make trips to state legislature in addition totrips to the beach%instead o collecting butts, they rallied support.ventually, a law was passed to make their sentiments permanent%however, the impetus started in the minds o two teenagers.$overnment is power ul and well/intentioned, but the sordid mechanics opolitics o ten obstruct problem solving. Individuals, however, are not sohampered. In a country where rights not enumerated 0e*plicitly given to theederal gov’t1 are or the people, people should see individual action as aright A23 responsibility.Score Explanation3emonstrating outstanding critical thinking, this essay efectively andinsight ully develops a point o view 0 In a country where rights notenumerated . . . are for the people, people should see individual action as aright AND responsibility 1, using clearly appropriate e*amples rom historyand current events to support the position. 4ell organi ed and clearlyocused as it discusses people who were 5empowered to make changes andsolve problems,6 the response displays clear coherence and smoothprogression o ideas 0 In the state of Connecticut, two teenagers who

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passionately cared for the environment e ected state laws to make litteringof cigarette butts illegal on beaches. . . . ventually, a law was passed tomake their sentiments permanent 1. The essay also e*hibits skill ul use olanguage, using a varied, accurate, and apt vocabulary, and meaning ulvariety in sentence structure is evident 0 !overnment is powerful and well"

intentioned, but the sordid mechanics of politics often obstruct problemsolving 1. This essay demonstrates clear and consistent mastery and receivesa score o 7.