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7/22/2019 Bryan Garner Exercises

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Presented by: Benedict D. Ontal, R.N.

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5. Omit needless words.
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Delete at least four consecutive words in thefollowing sentences, replace those words with

just one word. You may rephrase ideas and

rearrange sentences, but don't change themeaning.

The Business Corporation Law does notaddress the ability of a New York corporation

to indemnify individuals who are not itsemployees.


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The Business Corporation Law does notaddress the ability of a New York corporationto indemnify nonemployees.

individuals who are not its employees =

nonemployees


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Revise the sentence to make them as lean asyou can without changing the meaning:

The County sent an inspector who madeobservations as to the condition of the sidewalk

and concluded that it was uneven.


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Find a wordy sentence that you can reliably cutin half without changing the meaning.


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Arbitration as a means of settling disputes wasat first viewed by the courts with muchdisfavor, but today is being used increasingly

as a substitute for litigation for the adjudicationof disputes arising out of contracts.

37 words


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Arbitration, once viewed disfavorably, is nowused instead of litigation for the adjudication ofdisputes arising out of contracts.

19 words


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10Avoid multiple negatives.
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Recast the sentence in positive form:

Notice will not be effective unless it isdelivered in person or by certified mail, return

receipt requested.

Notice takes effect upon delivery either inperson, or via certified mail with return receiptrequested.


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Recast the sentence in positive form:

Bendola cannot be permitted to stand onnothing more than unsubstantiated and self-

laudatory statements as a basis for denyingsummary judgment.


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Bendola must provide a basis for denyingsummary judgment further thanunsubstantiated and self-laudatory statements.


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Find a sentence in published writing that isburdened with at least two negatives that youcan easily--and with no change in meaning--

recast in the positive. Art. 151 of the Family Code 2nd paragraph

This rule shall not apply to cases which maynot be the subject of compromise under theCivil Code.


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This rule only applies to cases that can be thesubject of compromise under the Civil Code.

Or

This rule applies to cases that can be the subject

of compromise under the Civil Code.


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13 Use strong, precise verbs. Minimize is,are,was,and were.
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Rewrite the sentence to eliminate the be-verbs:

(be, am, is, are, was, were, been, has, have, had,do, did, does, can, could, shall, should, will,

would, may, might, must) Jones is in agreement with Smith.

Answer Jones agrees with smith.


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Rewrite the passage to eliminate the be-verbs:

Several members were in attendance, and thosepresent were in agreement that the board's

action was violative of the bylaws.

Answer

Several members attended and they agreedthat the boards action violated the by-laws.


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In a piece of published legal writing, find twomeaty paragraphs--consecutive ones--inwhich be-verbs predominate. Type the

paragraphs, preserve an unedited version, andthen revise them to reduce the number of be-verbs by at least 75%.


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http://www.nytimes.com/2013/07/08/opinion/immigration-in-the-

house.html?ref=lawandlegislation A bipartisan gang of House members has been

working on a broader bill, but nobody has seenit yet and it may go nowhere because it is said

to include a path to citizenship. About all thatcan be safely predicted is that we are in for asummer of heat and pressure, with immigrantadvocates loudly demanding a bill.
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Mr. Boehner has a choice. He can let reform goforward with bipartisan support HouseRepublicans and Democrats together couldpass a good bill. This would infuriate thehotheads in his caucus but save the RepublicanParty from itself. Or he can stand back and lethis party kill reform. As the issue festers, anation is watching to see whether the

Republicans can work out their Steve Kingproblem and do something difficult for theirown good, and the countrys.


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A broader bill is currently being drafted by a bipartisangroup of House members. It may go nowhere as ittends to include a path to citizenship. With immigrantadvocates loudly demanding a bill, a summer of heatand pressure can be foreseen.

Mr. Boehner has a choice either to let reform goforward with bipartisan support - House Republicansand Democrats passing a good bill or to stand back andlet his party kill reform. Although the former choicetends to infuriate the hotheads in his caucus, it

nevertheless saves the Republican Party from itself . Asthe issue festers, a nation keeps an eye (or observes,monitors) to see whether the Republicans settle theirSteve King problem and do something difficult fortheir own good, and the countrys.


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14Turn -ion words into verbs when you can.
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Improve the passage by changing all but one ortwo of the -ion words. Do any -ion words needto stay?

The determination that reasonable groundsexist for the revocation of parole should first bemade by someone directly involved in the case.Yet we need make no assumptions in arrivingat the conclusion that this preliminaryevaluation, and any recommendationsresulting therefrom, should be in the hands ofsomeone not directly involved.


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Determining whether reasonable grounds existto revoke parole should first be made bysomeone directly involved in the case. Yet we

need not assume in concluding that thispreliminary analysis, and any advice resultingtherefrom, should be in the hands of someonenot directly involved.


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Edit the sentence to reduce the number ofwords ending in -ion:

Any violation of the terms of probationestablished by the Board will result inrevocation of VanTech's authority to conductitself as a public-utility operation.


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If the terms of probation established by theBoard is violated, the authority of Van Tech tooperate as public utility will be revoked.

Or

Any violated terms of probation established bythe Board will result in revoking Van Techsauthority to conduct itself as a public-utilityoperation.


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Find a paragraph in published legal writingwith at least three -ion words that need editing.Retype the paragraph, with its citation, and

then type your own revised passage below it.

Lets Make a Deal ByGAIL COLLINS

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Immigration reform was an invitation to deal-making from the get-go. Its yin and yang areborder security, plus giving a path to citizenship tothe estimated 11 million people who are currentlyliving here without documentation.

Immigration reform was an enticement to deal-making from the get-go. Its yin and yang are

border security, plus giving a path to citizenship tothe estimated 11 million people who are currentlyliving here without the proper documents.

Or


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Immigration reform invites deal-making fromthe get-go. Its yin and yang are border security,plus giving a path to citizenship to the

estimated 11 million people who are currentlyliving here without the proper documents.


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15. Simplify wordy phrases. Watch out for of.
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Revise the sentence to minimize prepositions(at, on, in, of, to, for ..etc)

This Court did not err in issuing its order of

dismissal of the claims of Plaintiff.

Answer This Court correctly dismissed the plaintiffs

claims


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Revise the passage to minimize prepositions:

Henry II had genius of a high order, whichnever manifested itself more clearly than in his

appreciation of the inevitability of thedivergence of the paths of crime and of tort,and in his conception of crimes as offensesagainst the whole community.


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Henry IIs genius never manifested itself moreclearly than in the way he appreciated thedivergence between crime and tort, and the

way he conceived that crimes offend the wholecommunity.


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Find a published passage in which you canimprove the style by cutting the ofs by at leasthalf. Type the original, and then handwrite

your edits so that they're easy to follow.
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http://www.salon.com/2013/07/07/oh_yay_im_single_in_my_50s/

I recently heard an interesting statistic more

than 80 percent of single people over 50 say theyare happy with their single status. I am one ofthem. I bet most of them, like me, initially thoughtthings were going to go just great in their second

or third or fourth round of finding true love. Andthen came the experience sohorrible/pathetic/humiliating they realized howunbelievably happy they already were.
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I recently heard an interesting statistic thatmore than 80 percent of single people over 50slike me, say they are happy with their single

status. Like me, I bet they initially thought thatfinding true love would go just great in theirsecond, third, or fourth round. And then camethe experience so

horrible/pathetic/humiliating they realizedhow unbelievably happy they already were.

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