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8/3/2019 Description Report

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DescriptionDescription


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a statement expressing the essential

nature of something.

a statement, picture in words, or

account that describes;

descriptive representation.

A set of characteristics by which

someone or something can

be recognized.


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NotNot whatwhat youyou saw,saw, butbut whatwhat readersreaders needneed

toto seesee inin orderorder toto imagineimagine thethe scene,scene,

person,person, object,object, etcetc..

RequiresRequires toto recordrecord aa seriesseries ofof detaileddetailed

observationsobservations.. BeBe especiallyespecially carefulcareful toto makemake

realreal observationsobservations..


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UseUse sensorysensory languagelanguage.. GoGo lightlight onon adjectivesadjectives andand

adverbsadverbs.. LookLook forfor waysways toto describedescribe actionaction.. PayPay

specialspecial attentionattention toto thethe soundsound andand rhythmrhythm ofofwordswords;; useuse thesethese whenwhen youyou cancan..

TheThe descriptiondescription isis alwaysalways partpart ofof aa largerlarger pointpoint..UseUse thethe descriptiondescription toto makemake youryour point,point, oror toto

movemove youryour storystory alongalong.


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YouYou conveyconvey howhow somethingsomething sounds,sounds, smells,smells,

tastes,tastes, feelsfeels and/orand/or lookslooks;; usingusing transitionaltransitional wordswords

andand phrasesphrases thatthat signalssignals timetime areare highlyhighlyrecommendedrecommended..

avoidavoid beingbeing staticstatic oror flatflat.. AdoptAdopt aa strategystrategy thatthatmakesmakes youryour descriptiondescription intointo aa littlelittle storystory:: movemove

fromfrom farfar toto near,near, leftleft toto right,right, oldold toto new,new, or,or, asas

inin thisthis example,example, downdown aa river,river, toto givegive youryour

descriptiondescription aa naturalnatural flowflow..


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asas aa littlelittle narrativenarrative inin whichwhich thethe visualvisual

characteristicscharacteristics unfoldunfold inin aa natural,natural, interesting,interesting,

dramaticdramatic orderorder.. ThinkThink ofof whatwhat piecespieces readersreadersneed,need, inin whatwhat order,order, toto constructconstruct aa scenescene.. TryTry

makingmaking thethe descriptiondescription aa littlelittle dramaticdramatic

revelation,revelation, likelike watchingwatching anan actoractor putput onon aa

costumecostume----wherewhere youyou cannotcannot decipherdecipher whatwhat thethecostumecostume meansmeans untiluntil manymany ofof thethe partsparts areare inin

placeplace..


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O'Leno is a good example of a state park

in Florida. Surrounded by the

forest,

the Santa Fe River disappears in a pool.

After appearing intermittently in scattered sinkholes, the river rises

three miles down,

then continues on to meet the Suwannee and the sea.

Instead of stating that it is JUST forest,

you should write a better description forit.

Instead, write this: tall, shaded woods of a beautiful hardwoodforest

Instead of writing thatit is JUST a pool

Instead, write this: large, slowly swirling, tree-lined pool.

Instead of writing that it JUST three milesdown, you should write what people can SEE.

Instead, write this: three miles downstream in a big boil


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O'Leno is a good example of astate park in Florida. Surrounded

by the tall, shaded woods of a

beautiful hardwood forest, the Santa FeRiver disappears in a large, slowly swirling,

tree-lined pool. After appearing

intermittently in scattered sinkholes, theriver rises three miles downstream in a big

boil, then continues on to meet the

Suwannee and the sea.


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The woman seems to be nervous.

Her eyes,

Instead of stating that she is JUST a

woman, you should write how old she looks like.Add this:

Instead of stating that she is nervous, you should add

how she looks like when she is nervous.Add this: .

Instead of writing her eyes, you must include

what is its expression when you saw her.Add this: full of inexplicable emotions.


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Her face gives the

impression that her dilemma can somewhat be

solved, it was a beacon of hope. Then, Out ofthe blue, she grinned.

Instead of saying that you saw her face, you should describe

what her face looks like.Instead, write this:

You should write, what you feltafter she grinned at you, to add amore descriptive paragraph.

Now add:


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the woman,

, seems to benervous. Her eyes its full of

inexplicable emotions. Her

gives the impression that her dilemmacan somewhat be solved, it was a beacon

of hope. Then, Out of the blue, she

grinned.Then, she gave me a hug. It was

my sister; she passed the brain-draining

board exam!


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