evaluation of other magazines
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AFL
Evaluating Peer Work
NameAlex Rhodes
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Activity 1
Use the mark scheme below and work in pairs to grade the 4 exemplar pieces of work.You must try and place the work into the correct level. Wherever possible you should
use a best fit model, this means that you take an overall view rather than harshlypenalising for one fault. Use the space provided to give specific examples and write a
summary comment at the bottom of the page. You are examining the FRONT PAGEONLY
MGN
Minimal Level 1
1023 marksBasic Level 2
2435 marksProficiency
Level 3
3647 marks
Excellence
Level 4
4860 marksFraming a shot,
including and excluding
elements as
appropriate
X
She has used a variety of
images and the front
image stands out with not
too much overlapping it.
The image has been usedin the three quadrants as
the eye line of her is on the
first thirdUsing a variety of shot
distances as
appropriate
X
She has used a variety of
images to such as close up
and mid shot which shows
evidence of her
experimenting with a
range of images to fit her
magazine the best.
Shooting material
appropriate to the taskset
X
As from looking at themagazine I can tell that she
has tried to make a similar
magazine to Q which
supports her decision for
the style of image which
she has taken because it
looks like something which
represents indie / pop, and
as Q is about a variety of
genres, mainly in the indie
/ rock, this works well with
the image.
Selecting mise-en-scne including colour,
figure, lighting, objects
and setting
XFor the images, the creator
has used the appropriate
clothes on each of the
person on the magazine,
which suits their genre. As
well as this she has shown
a good understanding as to
how you use the lighting
because there arent any
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shadows around and the
lighting is bright which
focuses on the model.
Manipulating
photographs as
appropriate to thecontext for
presentation, including
cropping and resizing
X
The designer of this
magazine shows a range ofways to apply the
photographs to the
context, and they have
used the correct
background that doesnt
have any additional extras
in there that would ruin the
design as the have cropped
it. They also havent
overused the images and
placed them in the wrong
areas, which is used to
great effect.Accurately using
language and registerX
For the language register
of the magazine, the
designer of it has used the
correct terminology that
you would expect to see in
a magazine such as this
one with its similar style.
Appropriately
integrating illustration
and text
This magazine shows good
use of using the three-
colour palette and only
three different fonts. AS
well as this they show
awareness of the correct
style of font because for
the majority of her writing,
she uses sans serif font
that looks professional and
easy for the audience to
read.Showing
understanding of
conventions of layout
and page design
X
The creator of this
magazine shows a great
understanding of how to
layout the magazine, not
lonely with the front cover,
but with all pages. She
does this very well with the
way that she minimises the
bleed in the magazine.
Showing awareness of
the need for variety in
fonts and text size
X
The double page spread
has the perfect font,
because it allows you to
read the article, but when
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she uses either a pull quote
of asks a question in the
interview it is very evident
what is going on.
Summary Comment:
This magazine is a high level 4 due to the fact that the creator has shown a great understanding and detail of trying to base
theirs upon a similar genre style of magazine, and they have used the correct layout which makes the magazine look
professional.
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GHR
Minimal Level 1
1023 marksBasic Level 2
2435 marksProficiency
Level 3
3647 marks
Excellence
Level 4
4860 marksFraming a shot,
including and excludingelements as
appropriate
X
AS the image has twodifferent backgrounds and a
white lining around the
three models, its very
complicated and it makes it
lose the professionalism
which is needed very much
in magazine designing it
needs to be more simplistic.Using a variety of shot
distances as
appropriate
X
This person who has
created this magazine has
based all of their images on
a mid-shot, which shows alack of experimenting in
different ranges of camera
angles that is what you
wouldnt see in a typical
magazine.Shooting material
appropriate to the task
set
X
Albeit the photos
taken arent great,
the models which
they have used all
suit the R n b / hip-
hop genre which is
applied to themagazine.
Selecting mise-en-
scne including colour,
figure, lighting, objects
and setting
X
For the majority of the
images the clothes that the
models are wearing suit the
design and genre, however
there isnt any consistency
in this due to the fact that
for example there is a
model in there wearing a
cardigan and polo, which
doesnt suit the genre. As
well as this the lighting onthe images are not great
and it isnt clear on all of
them.Manipulating
photographs as
appropriate to the
context for
presentation, including
cropping and resizing
X
The images which have
been used suit what has
been is being said on the
page, such as on the double
page spread they have used
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an image which looks like
something which youd see
on the front cover.
Accurately using
language and registerX
The language that is used
doesnt suit or appeal to theRnB genre of music at all.
Instead of using language
that you would see on a rap
magazine they have used
words such as tune and
celeb instead.Appropriately
integrating illustration
and text
X
On this magazine the text
isnt up to a high standard
at all due to the fact that
there are too many
different colours which are
used on the front page onthe font looks very
unprofessional, and similar
to the colours, they use too
many different fonts.Showing
understanding of
conventions of layout
and page design
X
Although you can see they
have tried to make it look
somewhat like an RnN
magazine, they havent
been able to get anywhere
near to that standard
because of the way that
everything is laid out on the
every page, it all looks
unprofessional.Showing awareness of
the need for variety in
fonts and text size
X
They have used a variety of
fonts, but almost too many
which makes the magazine
lose its touch of realism.
The serif fonts that are used
also look like they could do
with a lot of changing and
improvement.
Summary Comment
This magazine design could do with a lot of improvements being made because it hasnt replicated any other similar
magazine. The reason being for this is that the creator of the magazine has tried to use too many different fonts, different
colours and the layout needs vastly improving because it is all unclear and confusing for the reader to get an
understanding of whats going on in the magazine, and what its genre is.
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BUZZ
Minimal Level
1
1023 marks
Basic Level 2
2435 marksProficiency
Level 3
3647 marks
Excellence
Level 4
4860 marksFraming a shot,
including and excluding
elements as
appropriate
X
The mid shot used is a good
photo, however they havent
made it the central visual
interest that doesnt match the
three-quadrant rule becausethe masthead tends to overlap
the head and become the focus
instead of the person on the
cover.Using a variety of shot
distances as
appropriate
X
The creator of this magazine
has used a variety of shots and
it shows a greater
understanding of camera shots
as they have used a different
number of people in some of
the shots.Shooting material
appropriate to the task
set
X
The material which has been
used in this magazine is mainly
suited to the magazine,
however some of the photos
dont lookparticular
professional and have an
element of realism to it.Selecting mise-en-
scne including colour,
figure, lighting, objects
and setting
Manipulating
photographs as
appropriate to the
context for
presentation, including
cropping and resizing
X
The photos dont
always match what
the context is saying
for example on the
double page spread
the image is of her
happy, even though
the pull quote is
about how fallAccurately using X
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language and register The music is allpop and charts
music, whereas
the magazine
looks more
indie design
which makes
the language
register
unprofessionalAppropriately
integrating illustration
and text
X
Its not necessarily
text that links in with
what the context is
about and therefore
it needs to be more
suited to a similar
pop music magazine
instead of edging
towards the indie
example.Showing
understanding of
conventions of layout
and page design
X
The page layout
would be at a higher
level if there wasnt
as much on the page
which ruins the
layout because there
is all too much on
there.Showing awareness of
the need for variety in
fonts and text size
X
The layout of the font is all set
out professional but on the
cover ruins the it because of
the certain fonts theyve used
and the fact t that they have
used too many, however this is
used to good effect on the
double page and contents.
Summary Comment
I think that this magazine is a low level 3 because the idea and design in some parts can be excellent, but its the little
things that let this students magazine down. The student needs to be ore specific to the genre she is aiming it at instead
of edging it towards the indie genre that is evidently shown in this design.
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DUBZONE
Minimal Level 1
1023 marksBasic Level 2
2435 marksProficiency
Level 3
3647
marks
Excellence
Level 4
4860 marks
Framing a shot,including and excluding
elements as
appropriate
XThis students needs to
pay more attention to
mise en scene, as from
looking at this design
which was aimed for the
dubstep genre the
student has used a girl
in a jumper and a boy
playing guitar which
isnt dubstep.Using a variety of shot
distances as
appropriate
X
The student hasnt used
a variety of shots, andthe ones which they
have used are not
related to the magazine
what so ever so there is
improvement needed to
ensure different shots
are used and related
images.
Shooting material
appropriate to the task
set
X
This needs a lot of
improvements due to
the fact the photos
which have been taken
are not in the slightest
related to the genre
which the student is
aiming for,Selecting mise-en-
scne including colour,
figure, lighting, objects
and setting
This student needs to
use costumes that are
related to the dubstep
genre instead of indie,
and they need to work
out the way to use the
camera to good effect
so she has better quality
images.Manipulating
photographs as
appropriate to the
context for
presentation, including
cropping and resizing
X
There are some
photographs in there
that demonstrate a high
quality such as on the
contents page; however
there are low quality
images that evidently
havent been
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redesigned.Accurately using
language and registerX
This needs some
improvement but the
majority of the context
is about dubstep that
suits their genre theyare trying to recreate.Appropriately
integrating illustration
and text
X
With the use of the serif
font which makes the
magazine look too fake
and unprofessional, this
needs a lot of
improvement to create
the simplistic design.
Showing
understanding of
conventions of layout
and page design
X
This student hasnt
shown a great
understanding of what
other magazine designs
are like and she has
tried to create her own
version, which dont
match to the
professional look.Showing awareness of
the need for variety in
fonts and text size
X
This is a low level 2
because the student has
shown a good
understanding with
some of the text in bold,
but its the actual font
that lets the student
down and the way
theyve laid the text out
on the double page
spread.
Summary Comment
This student has shown a good idea, however it was the way she presented the whole magazine with the unprofessional
lay-out and font choices that have let the student lose marks due to it not looking like another magazine.
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Task 2
Now using the skills youve acquired in task 1, evaluate your own work and then two
pieces of work from classmates. Use the space provided to give specific examples and
write a summary comment at the bottom of the page.
Magazine title: PARKLIFE (Ollie Dennis)
Minimal Level 1
1023 marksBasic Level 2
2435 marksProficiency
Level 3
3647 marks
Excellence
Level 4
4860 marksFraming a shot,
including and
excluding elements
as appropriate
X
This student has shown a
good understanding of
what images need to be
on each page, however to
improve they could do
with using more than one
different angle of them totry and show that they
have a greater
understanding the
different angles.Using a variety of
shot distances as
appropriate
X
All of the photos
used tend to be the
same angle, try
using a variety to
show good
awareness.Shooting material
appropriate to thetask set
X
All the image are relatedto the genre of his
magazine, when looking
you get the feeling that it
is an indie genre
magazine.Selecting mise-en-
scne including
colour, figure,
lighting, objects
and setting
X
Very good choice
of costume for the
model, the lighting
could be used to
create a shadow
effect to show
creator awareness
of the photos.Manipulating
photographs as
appropriate to the
context for
presentation,
including cropping
and resizing
X
The images suit
exactly what is
going and you get
the feeling it is
about him
Accurately using X
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language and
registerCorrect taboo
language to suit
the informal
language.
However he needs
to focus more on
the contents
language and add
more.Appropriately
integrating
illustration and text
X
The contents page
especially looks
unprofessional, need
to fill up more of the
white space a not
have as much on the
left side.Showing
understanding of
conventions of
layout and page
design
X
Can see the idea
behind the
magazine,
improvements
needed on the layout
of the page and the
content on it.Showing
awareness of the
need for variety in
fonts and text size
X
There are a variety
of fonts, but not all
of them are
professional at all
due to the fact that
some look very
informal / child-like.
Summary Comment
A promising start to the magazine, as we can clearly see your idea and that you have aimed it for a indie magazine, but
there needs an improvement on the lay out because it has lost its professional feel and it is evident that a student has
designed it.
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Magazine title: H (Sanjay PAtel
Minimal Level 1
1023 marksBasic Level 2
2435 marksProficiency
Level 3
3647 marks
Excellence
Level 4
4860 marks
Framing a shot,including and excluding
elements as
appropriate
XGood use of images,
needs improvement on
contents page with the
images used to make it
look more professionalusing a variety of shot
distances as
appropriate
X
Images used a very good
however you could use
different shots other than
mid shot to show you
know the different types
of angles and to make
your magazine that bit
more interesting.shooting material
appropriate to the task
set
X
Material is very
relevant to that
pop type of
genre that you
have gone, the
variety of
images shows
the variety of
genre the
magazine is
about.Selecting mise-en-
scne including colour,
figure, lighting, objects
and setting
X
Good use of clothing for
the magazine, good do
with more pop clothing as
well as the sort of indie
style, because in a way
you get the idea that this
edges towards the
alternative side rather
than pop.Manipulating
photographs as
appropriate to the
context for
presentation, including
cropping and resizing
X
Sanjay has shown a great
understanding of the how
to edit the images and
create and realistic
design.
Accurately using
language and registerX
High level two due his
correct terminology
however needs to be
consistent with what he
uses.
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Appropriately
integrating illustration
and textShowing
understanding ofconventions of layout
and page design
X
Would be level 3, but thecontents page needs to be
clearer and look more like
a common magazine
instead of its own brand.
Showing awareness of
the need for variety in
fonts and text size
X
Especially on the front
cover this has been as
good as perfected and
suits exactly the design it
was after, however the
contents mainly needs to
be improved.
Summary Comment
If improvements are made on the contents page, this will become a much higher grade and will be one of
the most professional and realistic magazines that have been created. Especially the front cover stands
out clearly and you can tell its genre.
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Magazine title: UNDERGROUND
Minimal Level 1
1023 marksBasic Level 2
2435 marksProficiency
Level 3
3647 marks
Excellence
Level 4
4860 marksFraming a shot,
including and excludingelements as
appropriate
X
Work needed oncropping of images
and making them
match
using a variety of shot
distances as
appropriate
X
Need to use a wider
range of images to
show that I have an
understanding of
the different shotsShooting material
appropriate to the task
set
X
The images that I
have used are
appropriate to the
task, but I need to
use different facial
expressions in the
same as they are all
serious.
selecting mise-en-
scne including colour,
figure, lighting, objects
and setting
X
Clothes I have used
have worked well
and the images of
the band, however I
need to ensure that
the images are
perfectly fitted with
the positioning of
the band and
where they stand.
manipulating
photographs as
appropriate to the
context for
presentation, including
cropping and resizing
X
Correct positioning
of the band, need
more work on
making sure they
are cropped
correctly and the
white background
goes all the way
across.
accurately using
language and registerX
Correct language
used, however the
title needs to be
shorter on the
double page spread
and make sure I
highlight the
correct words in red
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appropriately
integrating illustration
and text
X
Need improvements
on the image
quality and need
captions around the
images.
Improvement on
the quality of text is
needed.
showing understanding
of conventions of
layout and page design
X
Correct idea and I
do show
understanding of
what I need it to
look like; however I
need to be more
fine with what I am
doing and making
sure everything fits
and is laid out
perfectly instead of
rushing.
showing awareness of
the need for variety in
fonts and text size
X
I have shown the
right idea with the
different size fonts,
but again need to
improve the double
page spread titles,
improvements will
make it look a lot
better.
Summary Comment
I need to redo certain images, and be more defining in what I do, so make sure all fonts for the text are
the same size unless they are purposefully not, and I need to make sure I change my contents page to
something that suits the genre that I am doing. Overall it is a good idea what I have done, but I need to
make some changes to what I have done.
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