expository essay expose: verb—make (something) visible, typically by uncovering it

Expository EssayExpose: verb—make (something) visible, typically by uncovering it.

Choose one theme from your worksheet.

First Draft: On a separate piece of paper, write down the first draft.

Second Draft: Then, create a second draft.

•Is it surprising?•Is it positive or negative?•Can you be more precise?

Take out the following:

1.Hamburger/Hamburger paper

2.Say-mean-matter sheet

3.9th grade honors essay outline

4.The novel, Bless Me Ultima

5.The sample essay, “Naming Body Parts and Lies”

Clarify the following theme:

Filial piety can bring honor to your family.

•Talk to a partner

•1 minute.

Clarify the following theme:

1.Filial piety can bring honor to your family.

2.The honor in filial piety brings shame to the children.

•What is the difference between the two themes?


•1 minute.

Take out a piece of paper

Get into pairs (1 paper per pair)

You will write second drafts of the following “themes”

Theme #1

How can you make this theme more detailed?:

Nature gives you perspective.\

Nature gives you perspective on the world.

Nature gives you a beautiful perspective on your spiritual life.


•1 minute.

How can you make this theme more detailed?:

Example: Nature forces a perspective that brings urgency in how we experience time.


•1 minute.

Theme #2

How can you make this theme more surprising?:

Example: Identity leads to filial piety.


•1 minute.


Example: Identity leads to filial piety.


•1 minute.

Theme #3


Example: Identity makes family tradition.


•1 minute.

Theme #4


New people leads to changes in life.

Example: Narciso introduced to Antonio’s life

Paradoxical, complicated characters improve the life of children.


•1 minute.

Theme #5


Like, nature leads to life, man.•Example: The llano helps him think by escaping his troubles from home and the town.•Nature leads to a more peaceful life, which allows for an escape from reality that deceives you from painful truths.


•1 minute.

Theme #6

How can you make this theme more precise?:

Nature leads to breathtaking conflicts.•Example: Antonio and Tenerio in the blizzard.•Talk to a partner

•1 minute.

Theme #7


Family leads to filial piety.


•1 minute.

Theme #9


Suffering leads to conflict.•Example: Antonio’s father suffering the loss of his three sons•Talk to a partner

•1 minute.

What do you know about a thesis?


•1 minute.

What do you know about a thesis?

The thesis is the point your paper is trying to prove.

F.A.T.T. Thesis

Include “F.A.T.T.” in your thesis.

•Focus: What is the main idea?•Author: Author’s full name•Title: Poems and short stories use “quotations”•Text: what type of text is it? Short story? Poem?

F.A.T.T. Thesis• Focus: What is the main idea?• Author: Author’s full name• Title: Poems and short stories use “quotations”• Text: what type of text is it? Short story? Poem?

In the article(Text), “Rap the World”(Title) by Dean Young(Author) (Focus) hip hop influenced popular culture through dress, language and attitude throughout the country, specifically with the youth.

Question: What themes are introduced in Bless Me Ultima and how are the themes developed over the course of the text?

Thesis—Rough Draft:

In the Novel, Bless Me Ultima by Rudolfo Anaya, the theme of filial piety causing a loss of identity is developed.

What is missing in the thesis according to the question?


•1 minute.

Question: What themes are introduced in Bless Me Ultima and how are the themes developed over the course of the text?

Thesis—Rough Draft:

Thesis Revision: In the Novel, Bless Me Ultima by Rudolfo Anaya, the theme of filial piety causing a loss of identity is

developed throughout the text by the use of figurative language.

•The previous thesis was missing the “how are they developed over the course of the text.”

Find the following items of “FATT”

1.Focus (main point)

2.Author

3.Title

4.Text

In the Novel, Bless Me Ultima by Rudolfo Anaya, the theme

of__________________________________is developed

throughout the text by the use_____________________.

1. Focus (main point)

2. Author

3. Title

4. Text

In the (TEXT) Novel, (TITLE) Bless Me Ultima by

(AUTHOR)Rudolfo Anaya, (FOCUS) the theme

of__________________________________is developed


• Take out the hamburger/hamburger paper.• Write thesis in the diamond (middle).• Use this template if you need it.

In the Novel, Bless Me Ultima by Rudolfo Anaya, the theme

of__________________________________is developed


Example: Thesis: In the Novel, Bless Me Ultima by Rudolfo

Anaya, the theme of filial piety causing a loss of identity is

developed throughout the text by the use of figurative

language.

Finding Quotes to support your thesis

• Write your thesis in the middle diamond.

• Choose two quotes to support your thesis on the two halves.

Hamburger Hotdog Paper

Writer’s Name: Tommy KimQuote #1

Say: “Oh why did my mother dream for me to be a priest! How would I ever wash away the stain of blood from the sweet waters of my river (Anaya 23)?”

Quote #2

Say: “Why are you thoughtful, Antonio?’ Ultima asked. Usually I was picking up stones to have ready for stray rabbits that crossed our path, but today my thoughts kept my soul in a shroud (Anaya 33) .”

In the Novel, Bless Me Ultima by Rudolfo Anaya, the theme of filial piety causing a loss of identity is developed throughout the text by the use of figurative language.

Finding Quotes to support your thesis

• Allow your quotes to adjust your thesis.

• Make another draft of your thesis, based on your thesis.

• What are your first steps in starting an essay?

Introductions• What do you know about introductions?

• Contains thesis (FATT)

• Main idea

Introductions

• Interesting Statement of Fact– Start introduction with a compelling fact. – Tone of introduction is factual, objective, and

scientific. – Writer is telling reader, “I’m not messing with

feelings. It’s all facts, baby.”– Good for writing that is heavily leaning on

logic • Research papers• Expository papers

Introductions

• Take out a piece of paper.

• Write “1st Draft” on this paper.

IntroductionsInteresting Statement of Fact

Look up an interesting fact about the subject matter of your thesis. My subject: Filial Piety leads to a loss of identity.

-Professional athletes whose fathers were ruthless in their training suffered from depression.

-High-stress private schools in the Valley have the highest rate of teenage drug use.

-In Japan, one is expected to kill themselves in order to preserve the honor of their family’s name.

Introductions• Find one interesting fact about your

thesis, and write it down as your first line of your essay.

Student Volunteers their Subject Matter

• Interesting Statement of Fact• Look up an interesting fact about the subject matter of

your thesis. • Student subject:

Introductions

• Start first sentence with interesting fact• As a class, get me from the first sentence to the thesis:

In Japan, one is expected to kill themselves in order to preserve the honor of their family’s name.

In the Novel, Bless Me Ultima by Rudolfo Anaya, the theme of filial piety causing a loss of identity is developed throughout the text by the use of symbols.

Introductions

• Start first sentence with interesting fact• As a class, get me from the first sentence to the thesis:

In Japan, one is expected to kill themselves in order to preserve the honor of their family’s name.

(Write the gap with students)

In the Novel, Bless Me Ultima by Rudolfo Anaya, the theme of filial piety causing a loss of identity is developed throughout the text by the use of symbols.

Introduction• Scene

• Use 3 out of the 5 senses• Quickest way to emotionally convince the reader• Pure storytelling• Mr. Kim is nuts about this one. But you should learn other

techniques.• Who, what, where of argument.

– Who: People, beings, living creatures– What: Transience– Where: Living rooms, kitchens, schools, anywhere!

Introduction• Take out a piece of paper.

• Label it “Scene Introduction.”

Introduction• Turn in “Scene Introduction” in the back

tray.

Introduction• Scene: Write 3 sensory details about a time you

experienced the thesis: In the Novel, Bless Me Ultima by Rudolfo Anaya, the theme of filial piety causing a loss of identity is developed throughout the text by the use of symbols.

EXAMPLE: MR. KIM WANTING TO BE A SKATER BUT MOTHER WANTING FOR HIM TO BE A DOCTOR. Breakfast scene.

3 SENSORY DETAILS• Sunlight through the window• Smell of bacon and rice• Grip tape snagging on my pants

Introduction• Scene: Write 3 sensory details.The sun was shining through our living room window. (Sensory

detail #1) The smell of bacon and rice permeated the air as my mother was cooking breakfast in the kitchen. (Sensory detail #2) I had just bought a brand new Lance Mountain skateboard, and since school was out, I was ready to ollie, kick-flip, and rail-slide my way to the local elementary school. As I sat down at the dining table with my board on my lap, the grip tape snagging on my pants, (Sensory Detail #3) my mother set my plate down and quickly placed next to the plate a medical dictionary. She said that I would be studying today instead of skateboarding, and from this point on, summer was not about creative expression but dutiful studying of anatomy, as my mother wanted me to become a doctor. It is the reaching that matters more than the attaining.

Introduction• Scene: Write 3 sensory details.Use a student sample of their thesis:

How do you analyze evidence/quotes to support your point?

THESIS: In the Novel, Bless Me Ultima by Rudolfo Anaya, the theme of filial piety causing a loss of identity is developed throughout the text by the use of figurative language.

Say: “Oh why did my mother dream for me to be a priest! How would I ever wash away the stain of blood from the sweet waters of my river (Anaya 23)?”

Mean (What does the quote “mean”?): This passage describes a scene in which Antonio is hiding in the forest while only meters away, Narciso was shot by the men on the bridge, crippling Antonio with guilt and fear from his mother’s dream for Antonio to be a priest.

MATTER (How does this matter to the thesis?):

In this case, Antonio’s filial piety toward his mother’s wish for Antonio to be a priest robs Antonio of his true identity as an innocent child because the future position of a priest forced onto Antonio an adult position of guilt. Antonio has to bear the burden of a priest, a burden he carries to respect his mother. Anaya uses the metaphor of a blood stained river to persuade the reader of the impossible task of erasing guilt which is compared to the impossibility of staining rivers let alone wash the stains away.

Quote #2THESIS: In the Novel, Bless Me Ultima by Rudolfo Anaya, the theme of filial piety causing a loss of identity is developed throughout the text by the use of figurative language.

Say: “Oh why did my mother dream for me to be a priest! How would I ever wash away the stain of blood from the sweet waters of my river (Anaya 23)?” Mean (What does the quote “mean”?): This passage describes a scene in which Antonio is hiding in the forest while only meters away, Narciso was shot by the men on the bridge, crippling Antonio with guilt and fear from his mother’s dream for Antonio to be a priest. MATTER (How does this matter to the thesis?): Ultimately, Antonio’s filial piety toward his mother’s wish for Antonio to be a priest robs Antonio of his true identity as an innocent child because the future position of a priest forced onto Antonio an adult position of guilt. Antonio has to bear the burden of a priest, a burden he carries to respect his mother. Anaya uses the metaphor of a blood stained river to persuade the reader of the impossible task of erasing guilt which is compared to the impossibility of staining rivers let alone wash the stains away.

Hamburger Hotdog Paper

Writer’s Name: Tommy KimQuote #1Say: “Oh why did my mother dream for me to be a priest! How would I ever wash away the stain of blood from the sweet waters of my river (Anaya 23)?”


MATTER (How does this matter to the thesis?): In this case, Antonio’s filial piety toward his mother’s wish for Antonio to be a priest robs Antonio of his true identity as an innocent child because the future position of a priest forced onto Antonio an adult position of guilt. Antonio has to bear the burden of a priest, a burden he carries to respect his mother. Anaya uses the metaphor of a blood stained river to persuade the reader of the impossible task of erasing guilt which is compared to the impossibility of staining rivers let alone wash the stains away.

Quote #2Say: “Oh why did my mother dream for me to be a priest! How would I ever wash away the stain of blood from the sweet waters of my river (Anaya 23)?”


MATTER (How does this matter to the thesis?): In this case, Antonio’s filial piety toward his mother’s wish for Antonio to be a priest robs Antonio of his true identity as an innocent child because the future position of a priest forced onto Antonio an adult position of guilt. Antonio has to bear the burden of a priest, a burden he carries to respect his mother. Anaya uses the metaphor of a blood stained river to persuade the reader of the impossible task of erasing guilt which is compared to the impossibility of staining rivers let alone wash the stains away.

In the Novel, Bless Me Ultima by Rudolfo Anaya, the theme of filial piety causing a loss of identity is developed throughout the text by the use of figurative language.

Introduction• Take out your introduction (Statement of fact and

scene)• Take out your say-mean-matter hamburger/hotdog

paper

Introduction• Take out your 1st draft• Take out your say-mean-matter hamburger/hotdog

paper• Take out your 13 moves list

Introduction• Take out the essay “Naming Body Parts and Lies”

by Johnny Depp.

Introduction• Writing can be reduced to a series of moves. Let’s see

what kind of moves Mr. Kim has!

Expository Essay Moves• Take out the essay “Naming Body Parts

and Lies” by Johnny Depp

• You will highlight each move

• I will call on you

• Read the first three words of the sentence for each move.

Expository Essay Moves

Underline and number each of these moves:

1. Transition INTO thesis.

2. Thesis Paragraph #1

3. Introduction to quote

4. Say #1

5. Mean#1

6. Matter#1 (Includes fig. Lang., symbol, plot) Paragraph #2

7. Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph

8. Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence)

9. Say #2

10.Mean#2

11.Matter#2 (Includes fig. Lang., symbol, plot) Paragraph #3

12.Transition into last paragraph

13.Restatement of thesis/connection to rest of world Paragraph #4



2. Thesis



2. Thesis


4. Say #1



2. Thesis


4. Say #1

5. Mean#1



2. Thesis


4. Say #1

5. Mean#1

6. Matter#1



2. Thesis


4. Say #1

5. Mean#1

6. Matter#1



9. Say #2



2. Thesis


4. Say #1

5. Mean#1

6. Matter#1



9. Say #2

10.Mean#2

11.Matter#2


13.Restatement of thesis

Expository Essay Moves:Copy these moves and check them off as

you write.1. Transition INTO thesis.

2. Thesis


4. Say #1

5. Mean#1

6. Matter#1



9. Say #2

10.Mean#2

11.Matter#2


13.Restatement of thesis

Introduction1. Take out your first draft, using “statement of

fact” introduction or “Scene Introduction”.2. Take out your say-mean-matter

hamburger/hamburger paper3. Take out your “Transitions Catalogue”4. Take out my essay “Naming Body Parts and

Lies”5. Take out your 13 moves list

Move #1• Write a transition from your introduction into your

thesis.

• Sample you can steal: “This type of __________went beyond (Location of scene) and exists in all forms of literature. ”

Introduction• Write your thesis and transition into your thesis after your

introduction:• Example:

The sun was shining through our living room window. The smell of bacon and rice permeated the air as my mother was cooking breakfast in the kitchen. I had just bought a brand new Lance Mountain skateboard, and since school was out, I was ready to ollie, kick-flip, and rail-slide my way to the local elementary school. As I sat down at the dining table with my board on my lap, the grip tape snagging on my pants, my mother set my plate down and quickly placed next to the plate a medical dictionary. She said that I would be studying today instead of skateboarding, and from this point on, summer was not about creative expression but dutiful studying of anatomy, as my mother wanted me to become a doctor. Although her intention was admirable, they did not reconcile to what I was passionate about, what my identity was about, which was creative expression, whether physically through skateboarding or verbally with creative writing. But I struggled ahead, against my own identity, and toward my duty to my parents. . (Move #1 Transition to Thesis) This type of struggle went beyond my own living room and exists in all forms of literature. (Move #2 Thesis) In the Novel, Bless Me Ultima by Rudolfo Anaya, the theme of filial piety causing a loss of identity is developed throughout the text by the use of symbols.

MOVE #3, PARAGRAPH #2!• Introduce quote “move”• Use the following templates:

– The theme of ___________ is first demonstrated when __________________, “(Quote)”.

– (Character’s name) first demonstrates the theme of ___________________ when he/she_______________.

Move #4 – 6 (2nd paragraph)• (Move # 4) “Oh why did my mother dream for me to

be a priest! How would I ever wash away the stain of blood from the sweet waters of my river (Anaya 23)?”

(Move # 5) This passage describes a scene in which Antonio is hiding in the forest while only meters away, Narciso was shot by the men on the bridge, crippling Antonio with guilt and fear from his mother’s dream for Antonio to be a priest.

(Move # 6) In this case, Antonio’s filial piety toward his mother’s wish for Antonio to be a priest robs Antonio of his true identity as an innocent child because the future position of a priest forced onto Antonio an adult position of guilt. Antonio has to bear the burden of a priest, a burden he carries to respect his mother. Anaya uses the metaphor of a blood stained river to persuade the reader of the impossible task of erasing guilt which is compared to the impossibility of staining rivers let alone wash the stains away.

Move #7 & 8• Transition “move” into paragraph #3• Use the following template:

In addition to (your theme) occuring (briefly describe what is happening in say #1)__, it also occurs during_(briefly describe what is happening in say #2).

Paragraph #3: Moves 9-11Say: “Oh why did my mother dream for me to be a priest! How would I ever wash away the stain of blood from the sweet waters of my river (Anaya 23)?”


MATTER (How does this matter to the thesis?):

In this case, Antonio’s filial piety toward his mother’s wish for Antonio to be a priest robs Antonio of his true identity as an innocent child because the future position of a priest forced onto Antonio an adult position of guilt. Antonio has to bear the burden of a priest, a burden he carries to respect his mother. Anaya uses the metaphor of a blood stained river to persuade the reader of the impossible task of erasing guilt which is compared to

Paragraph #4: Moves 12-13

The theme of (Your THEME) not only occurs in (whatever your

previous paragraph was about), but it also occurs in all

aspects of life, including (Bring back your scene or fact here,

and connect it to a larger statement about the world, using

pronoun “us”)

Due tomorrow:

Hamburger/Hot Dog paper

1st Draft of Essay, Hand written

Essay Rubric• If you are finished, turn in the following,

stapled:

1. Your Essay

2. The rubric, graded by your partner (attach the paper your partner WROTE on)

Finish!

DO NOT write your name.

Do NOT write the questions.

What was most difficult about writing this essay?

Turn it into the tray in the back.

expository essay expose: verb—make (something) visible, typically by uncovering it

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