FIND YOUR TABLE GROUP. DON’T SWITCH TO SIT WITH YOUR FRIENDS, MY WONDERFUL STUDENTS.

ENGLISH 10 STUDENTS!

WELCOME!

WHO ARE WE? Pd1 & 3

Period 5

WHAT ELSE?THE VIGNETTE ASSIGNMENT DRAFT!

BREAK IT OUT FOR ME TO CHECK THE COMPLETION OF DURING THIS ACTIVITY.

ALWAYS BREAK OUT YOUR HOMEWORK AT THE START OF CLASS FOR ME TO CHECK THAT YOU DID IT. I’LL CHECK DURING THE BELL RINGER ACTIVITY.

Fold the paper at your table so that you have FOUR equal squares.

Label each square

Add Remove

Move Substitute

BELL RINGER ACTIVITY (YOU DO THESE AS SOON AS YOU ENTER THE DOOR)

Write “REVISION” in the center of the paper.

Revision

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NOW – BRAINSTORM WHAT YOU MIGHT DO FOR EACH CATEGORY WHEN YOU REVISE.

Don’t be powerless – you will be writing. A lot. In all your classes.

Work with me on this one.

REVISING FOR IMAGERY AND SPECIFIC WORD CHOICE

TRY IT:Change:We got to the border.

Change:I was happy when I landed in New York.

Change:He helped me with my homework.

Change:We were at the river doing crazy things.

REMEMBER IMAGERY?• sight

• sound

• taste

• touch

• smell

A Winter Nightsight =

sound =

taste =

touch =

smell =

Snow blankets the ground.

Snow gently lands on the roofs hushing the birds, silencing the cars

The flakes melt on my tongue leaving the crisp taste of December

My fingers turn red and swollen, cracking from the cold.

The burning logs of oak perfume the air.

Try it: A Summer Nightsight =

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taste =

touch =

smell =

Showing Engages Readers!Convey the message of who you are.

If you have only 100 words to give that message, every word counts.

Be specific and appeal to the reader’s senses using imagery.

My stomach wasn’t that big yet – no basketball. We still had a month and a

half to go. During the last period, Nurse Harmon and I stood over a note to a

student’s home. Her parents spoke no English and I didn’t know Korean.

Nurse Harmon had a friend who could translate.

Without notice, my son decided that this day was going to be his birthday.

The panic of impending labor set in. Luckily for me, I was already in the

Nurse’s office and she knew how to drive me to Christiana Hospital.

Revise your vignette!

• You are in groups of four.• Each person READS OUTLOUD his or her

OWN vignette.• Each listener offers something that the author

could add, remove, move, or substitute.

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HOMEWORKCourse Description signature sheet – due ___Odd periods – Sept

4/Even periods Sept 5________

Vignette draft due: __Odd periods August 29/ Even Periods Sept 3_________

Vignette Final due: Odd Periods Sept. 6/ Even Periods Sept. 11

Summer Reading essay due: Last day of class in September

Extra Credit assignment due: Last day of class in September.(In October, we begin a different reading project. Woot! Woot!!)