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Darren Shumski

Amold

English Comp.

6 September 010

This weekendwhen I walked into my great grandmother'snursing home I realizedmany

things about he pastand present didn't want to believe. I didn't want to believe that she really

is dying, una-t+*{ldidn't want the time that we have together o finally be coming to a close

,.;Lar€ _with our memories eft afvrha(they currently are. I wanted he present o continue on into the

future, but it will not in the time here o come-but as I walked into the door of her qom it wasi^JVr f € ,.

like walking into the front door of her old apartmentwhen I had first move{GQrwiren I was

five.

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As I walked n that apartment san excited ittle kid, with my older brotherTravis,

didn't know what the day had n store or us. It could beplayingblack ack, war, or various

other cardgames.We couldpossiblybe making cookiesor my personal avorite, solving

l?/crosswordpuzzleslbut who knew/l would have beenperfectly content with any of the options.' t I

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Shepulled out hJr ar of coins, mostly pennies,and dumped t on the table. This meant we

-'rywould be betting on card gamesand then going to the store o purchasegum or whatever else

with our winnings. We divided up about 500penniesand pulled out the deck of cards, he game

was called21, alsoknown as black ack. Handafter handwent by alongwith the time. Pennies

changedhands as dinner time rolled around. That meant we got to help her cook dinner,

whatever we wanted o eat. I loved peanutbutter and elly so I would just make myself one of

thoseand cut up a Granny Smith apple and dip that in peanutbutter also. I don't recall what she

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dused o make for herselfor Travis,but I loved my dirner/She then took us to the store o cash n

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our winnings. I loved gettinga king sizepackof Reese upswhenthey were only a dollar. I

would put them in the freezer ight when we got back. They would be perfectly frozenby the

time "Cops" cameon. Being five I wasn't supposedo watch hat show, but that's what older

relatives are for. We would sit there and watch that until about9 o'clock, then she would make

us all two bagsof popcornbefore America's Most Wanted"cameon. We usuallywould fall

asleep uring hat show. It kind of scaredme being soyoung,but we loved watching t. She

would always get us blankets after we fell asleepand we would spend he night there. In the

morningsshewould get up and make us breakfast,scrambledeggsbacon and toastbeforeour

mom came and got us from her apartment.

{ro^r As I went and satdown on her bed n her nursinghome remembered er beforeshegot

Alzheimer's and dementia.Thoughshedidn't rememberus as we walked nto her room andsaid

"Hello," we cameand ried to makeher as happy aspossible.I broughtup her old record

collectionbecause he oved alking about t. As sheventured nto the conversation went into a

dazeof the first daywhen I was about13 and askedabout hat recordcollection.---'7---

Shebegan o explainhow her atehusbandand shealwaysused o dance o her old

recordcollection,so on that day I askedher o show me somesimplemoves o polkadancing.

Though tough for her to do sheagreed. We put on the first record. Shebegan o explain the

logistics of the danceand the moves. We danced or hours; I wasgettingbetter with eachnew

song hat came on. After shegot tired we sat down and she alked about her late husbandand

her life when shewas a kid, and how different things were back then. She alked abouther time

during World War II and the Cold War. She was a woman who lived through many different



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times of life. She ived throughthe flappers,hippies,and the life of disco, and the birth of rock

with Elvis and the Beatles,but most of all, she oved to dance o polka music.



Darren Shumski

English

R. Amold

20 September 010

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I wrote my memoir about my great grandmother, Grandma Pumpkin." Personally 'm

| ,,lo not a big fan on planning papers. feel like the best way to write a paper s to just dive right in,

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I unlessof course t is a researchpaperor somethingof that nature. I get my ideaswhile I am

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! I Al topic or ideas or moredetails, nd keep hose n mind for later n thepaper. am not a big fan'lD P-i-\,

, ./1',of brainstormingor takingnotesas goeither. Once startwriting thepapert just flows from r / _; \ ur uralr l srurururB ur klrturB uurss as r BU Erursr. \_[ luri l sri lrr wrrurlB urs Papsr rrJusr r

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J\ rw' Also in thebodyparagraphs f my paper includedmoredetailsabouthow all of these

eventswith my great grandmothermade me feel, happy sad so on so forth. Now that I read he

last comment on the evaluationpaper 'm going to go on a rant abouthow I feel about this paper.

I do not like writing memoirs. Personally feel like if I wanted otherpeople o know aboutmy

feelings, or pastI would tell them. I don't like being forcedto write aboutmy pastwhether I'm

comfortablewith it or not (which I am comfortable with this subject; 've come to accept he fact

that my great grandmotherwill not be here for much longer). I am comfortable with my writing

abilities and feel like my actualwork in this paper s very good. I feel like I went very in depth

into this paperand revealedquite a few details hrough the useof imagery. Like I said



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