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Level 2 exemplars and comments
Paper 1
Sample 1:
Part I, Section C, Question 9
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Sample 1:
Part I, Section C, Question 9
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Sample 1:
Part I, Section C, Question 9
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Sample 1:
Part I, Section C, Question 9
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Sample 1:
Part I, Section C, Question 9
Comments
This essay made some valid points about the various forms of duty which Walter and Kitty perform
in the film, but wandered off-topic as it focused on Waddington and Mother Superior. The two
characters certainly play an important role in contributing to the reconciliation of Walter and Kitty.
However, in what way is it their ‘duty’ to do so? This was not clarified in the answer.
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Sample 2:
Part I, Section D, Question 14
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Sample 2:
Part I, Section D, Question 14
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Sample 2:
Part I, Section D, Question 14
Comments
The candidate demonstrated some knowledge of the texts but fell short in showing convincingly
why Dee (‘Everyday Use’) and the narrator of ‘Cathedral’ are the most irritating characters. Her
argument remains largely undeveloped, and would have greatly benefited from specific examples of
exactly how Dee’s arrogance, her preoccupation with her educational background and the narrator’s
want of insight cause annoyance.
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Paper 2
Sample 1:
Section A, Question 1
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Sample 1:
Section A, Question 1
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Sample 1:
Section A, Question 1
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Sample 1:
Section A, Question 1
Comments
(i) The only similarity identified is jealousy. Discusses Cassio’s lack of respect for Bianca but
doesn’t qualify this as different to the other conversation.
(ii) Answer does not address the question asked.
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Sample 2:
Section B, Question 5
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Sample 2:
Section B, Question 5
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Sample 2:
Section B, Question 5
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Sample 2:
Section B, Question 5
Comments
(i) The only difference noted is that (A) is about a sandpiper and (B) is about mushrooms.
Mistakes the actions of the sandpiper as flying.
(ii) Demonstrates a lack of understanding about the effects of imagery. Quotations used are
unnecessarily long and do not really pinpoint specific images.
(iii) Mistakes ‘ly’ and ‘ist’ sounds as assonance. Confusion about ‘similar sentences’ as a poetic
technique. Very weak attempt to support why identified techniques are used.
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Paper 3
Sample 1:
Analytical Study/Review: Secrets in the Enchanting Well Known – The Sound of Music
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Sample 1:
Analytical Study/Review: Secrets in the Enchanting Well Known – The Sound of Music
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Sample 1:
Analytical Study/Review: Secrets in the Enchanting Well Known – The Sound of Music
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Sample 1:
Analytical Study/Review: Secrets in the Enchanting Well Known – The Sound of Music
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Sample 1:
Analytical Study/Review: Secrets in the Enchanting Well Known – The Sound of Music
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Sample 1:
Analytical Study/Review: Secrets in the Enchanting Well Known – The Sound of Music
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Sample 1:
Analytical Study/Review: Secrets in the Enchanting Well Known – The Sound of Music
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Sample 1:
Analytical Study/Review: Secrets in the Enchanting Well Known – The Sound of Music
Comments
The focus of this portfolio is not very clear as it falls between a film review and an analytical essay.
The candidate touches on different aspects of the film like setting, music, camera, and characters,
etc. However, the discussion of these topics lacks originality and critical insights. The candidate
only lists the several places where the film is shot but fails to discuss their significance or how they
are related to the themes or the atmosphere. The same applies to the paragraph on music. It would
be a better discussion if some of the songs or lyrics were analysed so as to show how they reveal the
feelings of the characters or the mood of the movie. The last section on characters is similar in style
to that of study guides. Ideas are repetitive and fail to offer any critical insights. Sketchy
organisation.
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Sample 2:
Extended Essay: The language of food in “Waitress and “The Hundred-Foot Journey”
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Sample 2:
Extended Essay: The language of food in “Waitress and “The Hundred-Foot Journey”
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Sample 2:
Extended Essay: The language of food in “Waitress and “The Hundred-Foot Journey”
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Sample 2:
Extended Essay: The language of food in “Waitress and “The Hundred-Foot Journey”
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Sample 2:
Extended Essay: The language of food in “Waitress and “The Hundred-Foot Journey”
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Sample 2:
Extended Essay: The language of food in “Waitress and “The Hundred-Foot Journey”
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Sample 2:
Extended Essay: The language of food in “Waitress and “The Hundred-Foot Journey”
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Sample 2:
Extended Essay: The language of food in “Waitress and “The Hundred-Foot Journey”
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Sample 2:
Extended Essay: The language of food in “Waitress and “The Hundred-Foot Journey”
Comments
The title of the essay should be rephrased as ‘the use of food as symbols’ rather than ‘the language
of food’ in the two films. The candidate did talk about the symbolic meaning of food, like how food
is used to represent love, nostaglic feelings, etc. However, the discussion tends to recount the scenes
in which food is seen rather than giving a more meaningful discussion of the language of food.
Citation of the language of food is missing. The essay also fails to provide sufficient contextual
information for readers to understand how food is meaningful in the context. The style is descriptive
in general.