lt4 cpd booklet 2011

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GCE English LiteratureLT4CPD Autumn 2011


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AO3 (Connections) In Essays

No. Example

1. Prospero and Faustus are both magicians who use their

powers to get what they want.

Weak.As

with only

authorial

are prese

2. For those who may be outraged by Prosperos use of his

magic powers in harsh or selfish ways, there is the contrastof Faustus foolish and immoral use of his which helps us

to appreciate that Prosperos authoritarian approach is

fundamentally benign and wise.

Strong. P

illuminatiissues in t

3. Hamlet and Vindice are linked by their missions to revenge

the wrongs done to those they love.

Weak. Sim

about the

placed sid

4. While Hamlets revenge is driven by personal duty but

governed by restraint (Taint not thy mind, nor let thy soulcontrive/Against thy mother aught:) Vindices revenge

against the Duke is wide-ranging and remorseless from the

start.

Strong. H

wracked suggested

contrast o

restraint

5. Donnes sense of wonder and excitement at his mistresss

nakedness (O! My America...) seems all the more intense

in light of Gays cynical, commodification of female

sexuality as the poet announces his intention to try other

products or, as he puts it, Beauties.

Strong. A

are illumi

the cynic

feelings i

6. Donne and Newman write about their faith in God in well

structured lines of verse.

Weak. A

similarity

meaningl

form of th

Signpost terms:

In contrast to

Similarly

In light of

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2. Take any of the strong examples above and develop into a more compincorporating both AO2 and AO4.

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Principal Examiners Commentaries on LT4 Scripts

Introduction

In other years, scripts for CPD have focused upon examples of excellence. This

the opportunity to exemplify the new 5 Band Assessment Grid by sampling a br

work.

Please note: for ease of reference and discussion (in this document only) the tw

identified as 3a and 3b

Script 1

Overview

The relevant focus, knowledge, attention to detail and sophisticated command o

both of these essays deserve full marks. Indeed, in common with a significant nu

full marks seems almost not enough for such a mature performance at A level un

conditions.

Q3

AO Band Mark Comment

1 5 10 A very perceptive and sophisticated discussion of t

with a confident engagement with literary concept

accurate expression.

2 5 10 Confident, apt and expertly integrated textual suppcritical understanding of how meaning is made in p

engagement with subtext

3a 5 5 Highly productive/illuminating comparisons.

3b 5 5 Clear, purposeful, mature and wide-ranging use of

4 5 10 Confident and perceptive discussion of relevant co

interesting work on literary contexts.

Total 5 40

Q9


1 5 10 Particularly well developed argument written wi

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Script 2 Overview

Another very strong performance but falling just short of full marks because the

under AO4 in the second response is Band 4 with a maximum mark of 8.

Q5


1 5 10 From the first sentence we can see a perceptive an

discussion underway clear evidence of flair from t

continues with the writer showing a very sophistica

concepts and terminology as the argument develop

scholarly way.

2 5 10 Detailed critical understanding and consistent eval

technique with a keen awareness of implicit meani

3a 5 5 There are some carefully chosen and illuminating c

explored in some detail.3b 5 5 Other readings are focused relevantly upon the tas

into the argument, suggesting an autonomous read

4 5 10 There is a perceptive discussion of relevant context

into the discussion of the poetry so there are no se

literary writing.

Total 40

Q9


1 5 10 A sophisticated and confident writer with a mature

approach.

2 5 10 Very well deployed textual support and a confident

technique and implicit meaning.

3a 5 5 There are very specific and illuminating connection

3b 5 5 Frequent references to different ways elements of

rather than direct quotation from critics mature a

discussion.

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Script 3 Overview

While the candidates overall performance is uneven both within each essay anthe other, there are very positive elements in the work and plenty to reward. T

assured, confident writing but the script does not have the consistent flair and

which are clearly apparent in Scripts 1 and 2.

Q3


1 3 6 There is some degree of creative engagement withexpression is reasonably accurate and clear if a lit

2 4 7 A good example of the unevenness of the work: th

explanation but the examiner has (rightly) chosen t

on the strength of the best writing under AO2 whic

Band 4 with a sound grasp of implicit meaning and

support.

3a 3 3 The connections are generally clear.

3b 3 3 Some use is made in the argument of different pos4 3 5 Knowledge of contexts is mostly implicit but fairly p

glimpsed in word choices such as mistreated child

the biblical ark. There are also some explicit refere

the essay which are not examined in detail and the

criteria for Bands 4 and 5.

Total 3 24

Q7


1 5 9 A clear, relevant focus from the start sets the tone

just enough evidence of emerging flair and confide

edge into Band 5.

2 4 7 There is sound analysis of the plays and some neat

which contribute to the sound discussion of techniq3a 4 4 There are some purposeful and specific connection

page 3 has some good examples which are shape

specific task.

3b 4 4 A clear and purposeful use of specific other reading

points about different ways of reading.

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Script 4 Overview

Once again, this is an uneven performance with some high quality moments. Tsolid Band 3 script. The response to Shakespeare is frequently awkward and the

relevance but the essay on Milton is a significantly better performance still a

expression but with some interesting exploration and sound analysis.

Q8


1 3 6 Clear and reasonably accurate expression (althougwith clear creative engagement at times.

2 3 5 Although the essay is largely plot driven, there is su

language, form and structure (sometimes focused i

technique) to edge into Band 3.

3a 3 3 There are a number of clear and appropriate conne

these tend to be statements rather than fully exam

3b 3 3 Clearly makes some use of other specific readings,

not to make this the basis for purposeful discussion4 3 5 There are Some specific points which demonstrate

significance of contexts.

Total 3 22

Q2


1 3 6 Engages task and texts in a relevant and creative w

expression but it is generally clear and accurate.

2 4 8 This is the strongest element of the essay: some so

evaluation at times which has been neatly and effe3a 2 3 Links are valid and appropriate but not closely exam

3b 4 4 Some clear and purposeful references to other rea

importantly they are carefully selected and shaped

4 3 6 A clear grasp of relevant contexts but not develope

Total 3 27

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Script 5

Overview

An interesting script which could form the basis of productive discussion with c

or another the performance is very uneven and the second essay is often poorly

the focus and textual support which could be expected in a literary essay. On th

response to Blake is poised, confidently expressed and seems to relish the oppo

textual analysis.

Q3


1 5 9 There is just enough confidence, sophistication and

squeeze into Band 5 - some occasional lapses so n

2 4 7 A purposeful and detailed discussion of technique a

3a 4 4 Links are sound, purposeful and specific.

3b 4 4 .Frequent suggestions that poems might be read in

the use of speculative language This could be....4 4 7 A sound appreciation of social and religious contex

Total 4 31

Q8


1 3 5 There is some creative engagement and the essay argument is limited.

2 2 4 While there is some awareness of implicit meaning

technique there is a distinct lack of analysis of the l

text.

3a 2 2 Some valid links are suggested but there is a lack of

support.

3b 2 2 Claims for other possible readings are mostly quite

unexamined.4 2 4 There is an awareness of historical contexts but po

asserted.

Total 3 17

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Script 6

Overview

Once again, an opportunity to discuss a script which is unbalanced and with bet

might have been a full grade better at award. A lot of time has been spent on th

although the focus often wanders and points fail to gel and one suspects that

had to be hurried through in a much shorter time. The response to Donne is oft

demands of the question because, one suspects, the candidate has a body of kn

material which will be included whatever the question! In some ways, the focu

second essay but there is not time to develop the promising points which are st

developed.

Q2


1 3 5 There are flaws in the expression but it is generally

evidence (despite prepared materials) of creative e

enough for Band 3

2 3 5 Poems are sometimes explained rather than analys

essay manages some discussion of technique and m

3a 4 4 There are some purposeful and sound connections

discussion of seduction which lifts this aspect of the

3b 4 4 A determined attempt to bring in the views of othe

purposeful for Band 4

4 2 4 Some broad connections to relevant contexts are m

acknowledged but little detailed development of p

Total 3 22

Q7


1 2 4 While there is an attempt to get the work into focu

almost feels it would have been better to start the

There is some attempt to engage, but simply not e

creative engagement and sustained, relevant discu

out of Band 2

2 2 3 Some useful textual support but very little opportu

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