lucy writing- narrative unit
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Writers make New Year resolutions!
• Writers set goals for themselves to write in ways they imagine.
• Writers work hard to reach their goals.
Group Work with writing samples
• A, B, C, and D’s get into groups. • Read the 3rd grade writing sample.
• Jot down on post-its what third grade writers DO and DON’T do.
• When you are finished, join me back on the carpet.
Narrative Writing Goals
• Let’s look at the 3rd grade narrative goals for this year!
- Writing a beginning that introduced the characters and setting. - Telling my story in order using transition words
- Choosing an action, talk, or feeling that would make a good ending.
- Using paragraphs to separate what happened first from what happened later
- Working to show what happened to my characters
- Describing feelings and actions to bring your story to life.
Making your OWN Resolutions!
• On the first page of your writer’s notebook, I want
you to list your writing resolutions for our narrative unit.
• Keep in mind both what third-graders do and don’t do from the samples.
• Think to yourself… “What do I need to work on or get better at in writing?”
Homework: Writer’s Notebooks
• Tonight, at home, I want you to decorate the
cover of your writer’s notebook. This is a way to personalize your notebook. Make it special, because it will hold your writing and it will hold your stories. You can glue or tape pictures or drawings. You can include stickers and stamps. This is your notebook so make it represent YOU!
Dear 3W students and parents, Today we kicked off our writer’s workshop! We made goals for our new year as a third grade writer. Tonight you have a very special project! I would like you to decorate your writer’s notebook. You can paste a collage of pictures, draw pictures to paste on, or print off pictures from the internet. You may also use sDckers! I want you to cover the front of your notebook in your own special way! Please make sure your name is visible on the cover. This is a way for you to personalize your notebooks and make it your own. This notebook is special because it will hold all of your wriDng, your stories, and all your wriDng adventures. If you don’t have the supplies to glue or print. Please let me know and we can find a Dme to complete it at school.
AIer finishing the notebook, discuss possible stories you would want to put in your writer’s notebook. What fun or important events would you want to write about and share with the class? Please return your writer’s notebooks to class tomorrow! Happy craIing! Love, Miss Wolgy
Writers Get Stuck
• Sometimes as writers we get stuck and that’s okay!
• Today, I am going to teach you one strategy you can use whenever you’re having trouble coming up with an idea
for a true story.
Finding Ideas for True Stories
• The first strategy I want to teach you to use whenever you’re having trouble coming up with an idea for a true story is
I Remember.
Strategy 1
I Remember…in your notebook!
1. Write a list of I remembers on the first blank page in your writer’s notebook.
2. Share your “I remembers” with your partner until the timer goes off!
3. Take 3 more minutes to write a few more “I remembers”.
Pick and Develop!
• Pick one of your I remembers from the list.
• Thumbs up when you have one.
• Open your writer’s notebook and start writing your first
true story.
Wrap up!
Today and every day when you write. I want you to remember, any time you get stuck you can always use the “I remember” strategy to help you get started.
Your First True Story
• Celebration
• Let me admire your writing • Give yourself a compliment • Give others a compliment
Writer’s Don’t Have Just One Strategy
• The second strategy I want to teach you to use whenever you are having trouble coming up with an idea for a true story is making a map of
a familiar place.
Strategy 2
Mapping it Out…in your notebooks
1. Think of your house. Draw a picture of the inside of your house.
2. Sketch different things in your house that you have a good memory about.
3. Sketch events that have happened in your house.
4. When the time goes off, turn to a partner and share your house full of memories!
Pick and Develop!
• Pick one of the sketches you made in the map of your house.
• Thumbs up when you have one.
• Open your writer’s notebook and start writing another true story!
Wrap up!
Today and every day when you write. I want you to remember, any time you get stuck you can always use the mapping it out strategy to help you get started.
Writers are like Athletes
• Look at your writing from yesterday
• Count how many lines you wrote
• Goals for today
• Turn to a partner and talk about tricks you might use to push yourself today
Writer’s Don’t Have Just One Strategy
• The third strategy I want to teach you to use whenever you are having trouble coming up with an idea for a true story is think of a person that is important to you.
Strategy 3
Finding Ideas for True Stories
• The “I remember” list
• Mapping It Out
• Think of a person that matters to you
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A person/pet that matter to you…in your notebooks
1. Think of people or pets that are
important to you that you would want to write down.
2. Now list the people/pets in your notebook.
3. Under each event tell a few memorable moments you have had with them.
Pick and Develop!
• Pick one of the people or
pets you listed in your notebook
• Thumbs up when you have one.
• Open your writer’s notebook and start writing. Remember to push yourself today!
Wrap up!
Today and every day when you write. I want you to remember, any time you get stuck you can always use the think of a person or pet that matters to you strategy to help you get started.
Writers share their goals and writing!
• Let’s look at your goals again!
• Now go to your writing. Did you work hard to meet your goals?
• Share your goals with a partner.
• Talk about how you’re doing meeting your goals.
ü What did you do well? ü What do you need to do better?
Let’s take a peek!
• The “I remember” list
• Mapping It Out
• Think of a person that matters to you
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Writer’s Don’t Have Just One Strategy
• The last strategy I want to teach you to use whenever you are having trouble coming up with an idea for a true story is think of a place that is important to you.
Strategy 4
Finding Ideas for True Stories
• The “I remember” list
• Mapping It Out
• Think of a person that matters to you
• Think of a place that matters to you
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A place that matter to you… in your notebooks
1. Think of places that are important to you that you would want to write down.
Hint: ü Where do you go every day? ü What have you visited in St. Louis? ü Where do you vacation with your
family?
2. Now list the places in your notebook.
3. Pick one from each box and sketch it!
Pick and Develop!
• Pick one of the places you listed
in your notebook.
• Thumbs up when you have one.
• Do you think the rest of you can zoom to your places and write up a storm?
• Write fast and furiously, more than yesterday! Go!
Wrap up!
From this day forward, I want you to remember that whenever you are sitting in front of an empty page, feeling stuck over what to write about, you can use any of the strategies on our list.
Storyteller vs. Reporter Voice A-
Yesterday we couldn’t go outside so we stayed inside and listened to a read aloud instead. But we didn’t hear much and were distracted with dragonflies flying around the room. We continued to listen to the read aloud.
Storyteller vs. Reporter Voice B-
“Listen up, “ our teacher said, as she opened Because of Winn Dixie and began to read. We were so quiet we could probably have heard ants crawling along the floor. Then our teacher lowered the book. We were about to say, “NO! Read it!” But she was looking at a blue of wings that flew between us. What was that? Sam called, “Dragonflies!” And soon enough, we saw them. Now three dragonflies hovered over our heads.
Storyteller vs. Reporter • Which felt more like a storyteller’s voice?
“Listen up, “ our teacher said, as she opened Because of Winn Dixie and began to read. We were so quiet we could probably have heard ants crawling along the floor. Then our teacher lowered the book. We were about to say, “NO! Read it!” But she was looking at a blue of wings that flew between us. What was that? Sam called, “Dragonflies!” And soon enough, we saw them. Now three dragonflies hovered over our heads.
Yesterday we couldn’t go outside so we stayed inside and listened to a read aloud instead. But we didn’t hear much and were distracted with dragonflies flying around the room. We continued to listen to the read aloud
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Storyteller vs. Reporter If you are writing a report, you won’t use a storytelling voice. If you’re writing a true story, a personal narrative (the kind of writing we are doing right now) you need to make sure you are using a storytelling voice, so the reader can experience what actually happened.
But...
Strong Storytelling Voices • Today I want to teach you that to make your
storytelling voices stronger, you try to make a mental movie of what happened and tell it in small detail, bit by bit, so that your reader can almost see, hear, and feel everything.
Come On, Rain!
How was Karen Hesse a good storyteller?
• She didn’t just give us information
• She asked herself, “What was exactly happening?”
• She wrote the exact actions that the people in the story did.
• She wrote the exact words the people in the story said.
Research my story!
• Did I show or tell what happened?
• Did I recall what happened like there was a movie in my mind?
• Can you picture my story?
You try it!
• Remember when we…
• I want you to try to be a storyteller. I want you to story-tell what happened, step by step. Story-tell the movie you see in your mind.
• Turn and talk
• I heard…
You’re a Storyteller… starting NOW!
• From now on, whenever you are writing a story,
don’t just talk about what happened.
• Say exactly what happened first, next, and next by adding descriptive details and dialogue.
• Use your storytelling voice just like Karen Hesse.
• Reread your story-find places where you need to be a better storyteller.
Check, Set, Go!
When people want to get better at something – anything – they check on their progress and set goals for next steps. Today I want to teach you that when a person wants to get better at something – at anything ask yourself, • “How have I grown?” • “What can I do in the future to get better? Then we can work hard toward getting better.
You try it! • Get out your notebooks
• Look at your last piece of writing or best piece
• Read the first item on the checklist. Then read your writing. Note where you’ve done it. If you haven’t that could be a new goal for you.
• Go to the next item on the checklist. Reread your writing again for that item. Note where you’ve done it. If you haven’t then that could be a new goal also.
• Repeat with all items on the checklist.
Wrap Up! Today we have learned to assess and set goals. Remember to ask yourself, “How have I grown?” Going forward you are going to want to think about what you can do to meet your goals.
Things you know by heart
• Turn and talk! Go! • What words to you know by heart?
• Did you know that half the words kids write are the same thirty-six words?
• Sometimes we just don’t do it…in our writer’s notebook!
Writing Words Correctly… as we go!
We need need to invent way to remind us to spell correctly the words one almost knows by heart. We need to add to our goals:
I am going to take a second to spell correctly the words I
almost know by heart.
Strategies to help us
• Think about ways you can remind yourself to correctly spell words you know.
• Turn and talk • How will you remind each other and check on
each other so this actually happens?
• Turn and talk
• Share
Wrap Up!
Do you think it would be a good idea to spend every minute of today thinking about spelling?
NO WAY!! As writers that is just one of our jobs to do while you are writing. You should always ask yourself while you are writing, What do I need to do next? Should I add on or change that entry? It is always ok to pause and you write and ask, “Does that look right?”
Share
• After collecting stories for awhile, writers reread them and finds one that for some reason snags their attention.
• Then writer’s rewrite that story.
• Put a star by the entry you that you would want to publish
• Congrats on your seed idea!
Pick a Seed Story
• After collecting stories for awhile, writers reread them and finds one that for some reason snags their attention.
• Then writer’s rewrite that story.
• Put a star by the entry you that you would want to publish
• Congrats on your seed idea!
Connection
• Turn and talk to a partner. • Tell them about the story you chose. • Switch
• When we story-tell a story
before we write it, we remember a lot more stuff!
• Most writers don’t just pick
an idea and then BINGO!, write the book.
• Just as a choir rehearses for a concert, writers rehearse for writing.
• One of the best ways they
rehearse a story is to story-tell their story– and to do so repeatedly in lots of different ways.
Rehearse, Then Write!
Watch Me!
• Robert Munsch said he NEVER wrote a story until he told it at least 100 times!
• Watch me as I rehearse my story out loud.
• Hmm…How did it start? ( I always ask myself that question)
Your turn!
• I want you to rehearse your story just like I did
• Tap the different pages of your notebook to tell your bit by bit.
• Help your partner be able to create a movie in their mind
Sketch it out!
• Sketch your story in order
• Then rehearse your story on your own, touching each picture as you come to that part of the story.
• Do it again and again and again!
• Today, you are stretching and storytelling– not writing
To Write a True Story
• Find story ideas that are important to you
• Make a mental movie of what happened
• Include dialogue and detailed actions
• Remember your narrative writing goals
• Rehearse for your writing by storytelling the story repeatedly
Fast and Furious
Today you’ll write fast and furious, writing the same
story as yesterday but better
To Write a True Story
• Find story ideas that are important to you
• Make a mental movie of what happened
• Include dialogue and detailed actions
• Remember your narrative writing goals
• Rehearse for your writing by storytelling the story repeatedly
• Write a flash draft, writing fast and furious, eyes on the mental movie
Your First Draft
Remember: - Retell your story bit-by-bit - Include your EXACT actions - Keep your eyes on the story - Really imagine the story
Inquiry
We are going to investigate the question:
What does Karen Hesse do to make
Come On, Rain! so powerful and meaningful?
What Hesse Did to Make Her Storytelling Voice SO GOOD?
u She put in exact words of what people said Ø DIALOGUE Ø “Is there thunder?” Mamma asks. “No
thunder,” I say u She wrote how people talk
Ø Breathe, murmur, whisper Ø Other words than said
u She used descriptive details Ø ice-chilled glass
What Hesse Did to Make Her Storytelling Voice SO GOOD
u She told the story bit by bit Ø Mama sinks onto a kitchen chair and
sweeps off her hat. Sweat trickles down her neck and wets the front of her dress and under her arms. Mamma presses the ice-chilled glass against her skin.
SomeDmes runners are so focused on their pace they forget their surroundings. Kinda like wriDng yesterday!
You were wriDng FAST and FURIOUSLY!
SomeDmes runners we need to
S…L…O…W DOWN! So they don’t miss important parts – Just like writers!
Storytellers are like Runners
BUT
Revising
Revision is NOT about fixing errors!
ü It is about adding more to the
heart of the story. ü It is about making changes to
make your story better.
Telling the story bit by bit
Are you? Reread your story and see if you are telling your story bit by bit
Use the check-list. How are you doing?
Yes? Starting to? Not yet?
Overall Rubric
Rate yourself! Where are you on the rubric?
1? 2 ? 3? 4?
What do you need to work on?
Tell your partner!
Read My Writing
• What did I do well?
• What part do I need to tell bit by bit?
Box it! and Make it better!
Paragraphing Matter
We don’t want readers eyes to FLY by our words that we write. We need to organize our writing.
-Bookshelf vs. Pile of Books
When to Start a New Paragraph
When there is a new subtopic
When time has moved forward
When a new person is speaking
Let’s Look at Our Sketch!
Each bit is a new subtopic.
Each bit would be a
perfect time to start a new paragraph.
Let’s Look at Our Sketch!
Each bit is a new subtopic.
Each bit would be a
perfect time to start a new paragraph.
Reading My Writing
-Where did I make a new paragraph?
turn and talk
-Are there places I need to make a new paragraph?
turn and talk
Let’s Write!
Writers, today I want you to remember to look for places a new paragraph might help your reader.
Use this mark in your writing to remind yourself to put a new paragraph there.
Transitions Matter
Good writers use transition words to help move the reader from one thought to another, from one idea to another.
Transition Rubric
Narrative Writing
Transition Rubric
ExpertI put my pages in
order.
I also used words such as and then,
and so,
I told the story in order by using words such as
when, then, and after.
I wrote my story in order by uses
phrases such as a little later and
after that.
I showed how much time went by with words and phrases
that mark time such as just then and
suddenly ( to show when things happened
quickly) or after a while and a litter later (to show when a little
time has passed).
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1 2 3 4
- When time passes/changes - A new event in the story - More information about a topic
- Introduce a contrasting idea
Bridging Ideas with Transition Words
Remember, good writers include transition words to help readers go from one idea to another. Using words like a little later or after awhile help readers become alert to what is going to happen next!
Transition Words
What is a Lead? What is a lead? The first sentence(s) of your story.
What is the purpose of a lead? To HOOK your reader, to grab their attention, to make them want to keep reading!
Action Lead This lead gets the reader quickly involved in the story by starting with an exciting event or some kind of action.
Action Lead Boring Better
I lost my slipper at the ball.
My head turned toward the clock. It was almost midnight. I scrambled down the stairs as fast as I could. That’s when it happened. My slipper was lost forever.
Talking Lead Boring Better
The slipper fit my foot perfectly.
“I can’t believe it! It fits perfectly,” I said to the Prince with a smile.
Sound Effect Lead
This lead begins with sound words. This creates a dramatic effect that makes your reader want to find out what the sound is.
Sound Effect Lead Boring Better
My Fairy Godmother made me a beautiful gown.
Woosh! All of a sudden my old, raggedy dress turned into a beautiful gown.
3rd Grade Checklist
- In the beginning, I told who my characters were and what the setting was in my story. - I told the beginning of my story using an action or talk
Narrative Writing
Lead Rubric
ExpertI tried to make a beginning of my
story.
I thought about how to write a good
beginning and chose a way to
start my story.
I chose:- an action-talk-setting
I wrote a beginning in which I helped readers
know who my characters were.
In the beginning, I also wrote what the setting
was in my story.
I also included:-an action-talk
I wrote a beginning in which I not only showed what was
happening and where, but I also gave some clues to what would
later become a problem for my main character.
I also included:-an action-talk-setting
1 2 3 4
Let’s Look at My Writing
-Do I tell who the characters are in the beginning? -Do I tell you the setting? -Do I begin my story with an action, talk or sound to hook my readers?
Let’s Look at Examples
-Do they begin their story with an action, talk or sound to hook their readers? -Do they tell who the characters are in the beginning? -Do they tell you the setting?
You Try It!
1. Action- 2. Talk- 3. Sound Effect- starting off with sound words
My head turned toward the clock. It was almost midnight. I scrambled down the stairs as fast as I could. That’s when it happened. My slipper was lost forever.
“I can’t believe it! It fits perfectly,” I said to the Prince with a smile.
Woosh! All of a sudden my old, raggedy dress turned into a beautiful gown.
What are Quotation Marks?
1. They are used to show someone’s EXACT words.
2. They go before and a,er a person’s words
Why Dialogue Matters
We use dialogue in our writing…
- to add detail - to re-live a scene - to show our characters interacting
3rd Grade Checklist
- I used dialogue correctly using commas and quotation marks.
- Look at your writing. What would you rate it?
You Try It!
Remember:
Dad asked, “Please, put your coat away.”
QuotaDon Marks BEFORE and AFTER someone’s exact words Comma