mid primary consolidated writing package

Writing an interesting introductory paragraph

30th September 2013

MID-PRIMARY COMPOSITION WRITING TIPS

Let’s review good writing habits and commonly made errors.

COMPOSITION WRITING

HELPING SOMEONE IN DISTRESS

(1) 1st person account – a personal recount (2) Good to begin with a dialogue (D), makes

the writing more dramatic.(3) Use past tense throughout for a personal

recount/ story-telling.

COMPOSITION WRITING

HELPING SOMEONE IN DISTRESS

(4) Write in 4 paragraphs (OCSR)(5) Be realistic about in your story

COMPOSITION WRITING

AN ACT OF VANDALISM

(6) 3rd person account – telling a story(7) A passion for art went overboard,

the kid began to paint the wall.

COMPOSITION WRITING AN ACT OF VANDALISM & HELPING

SOMEONE IN DISTRESS

Commonly made mistakes

(1) He when to school.Went

(2) Went the family went out, … When

COMPOSITION WRITING AN ACT OF VANDALISM & HELPING SOMEONE IN

DISTRESS

Commonly made mistakes

(2) Be realistic – A man was jogging in the park when he ran straight into a bench. He was

blocked by the bench and collapsed over the bench. Is it realistic?

COMPOSITION WRITING

Be realistic. Do you think it is likely that this man, while jogging, ran into a bench accidentally and fell over the bench? GET REAL !!


SOMEONE IN DISTRESS

Commonly made mistakes(3) Always “SHOW”, never “TELL”

TELL: “This was what happened that day…Jim went to get some paint…”


SOMEONE IN DISTRESSCommonly made mistakes

(3)(a) Don’t begin a sentence with “And”

And he found a bottle of spray paint rolling on the floor.

A bottle of spray paint was found rolling on the floor.



(3)(b) Don’t begin a sentence with “So” He was bored at home. So he thought of

spraying some paint on the wall.He was bored at home. An idea came to

him. He thought of spraying some paint on the wall.



(4) “The boy used crayons to vandalise the floor” – does this fit in with 2nd picture?

Always follow the picture(s) (at least one picture) closely.

COMPOSITION WRITING

“The boy used crayons to vandalise the floor” – does this fit in with 2nd picture?Always follow the picture(s) (at least one picture) closely.



(6) Use the 1st person or 3rd person account consistently and correctly in your writing.

Tom was glad his parents had gone to work. I was left alone by myself.

AN ACT OF VANDALISM & HELPING SOMEONE IN DISTRESS

Commonly made mistakes(7) Use past tense consistently for all personal

recounts and story-telling.

apologisedEg He quickly apologise to the police officers

and promised never to do it again.

COMPOSITION WRITING

Writing an interesting introductory paragraph

30th September 2013

Styles of writing an interesting

introductory paragraph!*Revision

Writing tips?

Your aim is to interest the reader and KEEP him/her interested.

How to make our introductory paragraph better??

DialogueDescription of

feelings/weather/state

Adding adjectives/adverbs

Adding similes/idioms

Flashback

Examples: “Mum! Where are my shoes?” yelled Megan as

she realised she was late for school.OR

"What are you laughing it? I'm late for a major exam that determines the rest of my life and the two of you are giggling! You must have

something to do with this!" I yelled in frustration. I guess my tone was nasty as my

youngest brother started crying.

Dialogue

The sun was shining brightly and the birds were chirping cheerfully. It seemed like a day that nothing would go wrong.

But…OR

Perspiration was trickling down the sides of my [WHO] face, every step causes a drop that was dangling at my chin to

splatter on the tar road. It was the day of my PSLE examination.

ORI woke up this morning thinking it was six in the morning. The room was dark, the air was fresh and most importantly, my

trusty clock had its shorter hand pointing at six and its longer hand in the opposite direction.

Description of feelings/weather/

state

I proudly walked down the aisle to collect the wonderful prize. I excitedly looked to my lovable parents, who were cheering happily for me. I gave a broad grin and recalled the day of the stressful competition…

Adding adjectives/adverbs

FLASHBACK!

When she laughed, the sunlight went splashing off her teeth like diamonds in search of adventure. I

was as happy as a lark when I received my birthday present.

Adding similes/idioms

Compiled by Mr Tan based on good ideas

from P34 works

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ATTEMPT A GOOGLE RESPONSE

Be the first 5 to respond correctly to the Google Response and you’ll be awarded with a Dojo

point!. Treat this as a revision for the coming SA2

Paper 1 examination.

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