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BY: PAUL KIM 4MS

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Best Day Of My LIFE One day, my golf teacher gave me a challenge activity which was ‘Beat me in this game’ and the game was who goes longer. Just one thing that came into my mind was I could never beat him.he got in 10th place at Korea’s world golf tournament.I was scared because what if I lose he will also tell me to give something.I was thinking like that because I was sure that I will lose so that's why I thought like that. I practiced day and night I even got in trouble from my mom that I didn’t got home early.When I got to the golf class again I told the teacher to do the game again but I lost again and again.That sunday I went to the golf practicing place with my dad.My dad’s driver skills was way more better than me.It goes higher and farther.I asked my dad how can I improve my golf driving skills.He told me the way so L followed it.He said you need to put the stick little bit lower than other skicks because it is bigger and longer than other sticks.And also he said to have a full swing to the back because I kept stoping at the middle. Couple of weeks later, I was confident at driver .I was able to go farther than I was before!Next saturday I went to the golf class I played the game again.I sent the ball almost the same distance with my teacher.I felt nervous at the start of the game but when I

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got almost same distance I felt really proud.When I went to the golf court I saw a vietnamese guy learning golf.His golf coach was telling the kid to do better than me.The gas was coming out from my nose.My face got red.I wsa mad.I was practicing so hard that I hit 250 balls.Next saturday,I played the game again finally I’ve won!!!!! So he bought me a lemonade. It tasted so good at first. As I put the straw deeper and deeper It tasted salty and saltyer.So I asked the person who was making this lemonade.She said “We Also put salt in it”... I was shocked.DAN~~DAN~~DAN~~~~!!!!!!

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Chan Holmes And The Lost Body

  

“Aha.” said the detective, ”Here’s the clue we’ve been waiting for”,after centuries we have clues of where Sherlock Holmes body is.” 

Chan Holmes thinks that Sherlock Holmes body is at a cave because when he falls off the side of the cliff side into the river he could of grabbed onto something like a branch. 

The next day Chan went to the Reichenbach Falls to investigate about caves that are near or at the Reichenbach Falls.  

 Chan Holmes went to the bottom of the Reichenbach Fall. He jogged to 

the back of the waterfall to find a cave, Chan felt joyful 

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because he found the biggest hint of where Sherlock Holmes body is. 

 

 96 hours earlier…………. 

 Chan Holmes went to a interview and stated “I will be the one to find 

Sherlock Holmes body, mark my words”. That day the news spread all around the world. People all around the world had hope in Chan Holmes. 

 

Back to the present time………..  

 Chan sprinted inside of the cave and he quickly pulled out his flashlight and searched the cave for a grave. After a lot of searching Chan Holmes quickly realised that he found an empty cave. Chan’s heart skipped a beat and tears  

were flowing out of his eyes,he knelt down and looked at the ceiling of the cave and out of anger he shouted “WHY!!!!”  

 Chan Holmes felt like he lied to everyone who had hope in him finding 

Sherlock Holmes body. The next day Chan Holmes was invited 

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to an interview about his progress in finding Sherlock Holmes body. Chan Holmes was brave enough to go to the interview and say “I am very sorry but i didn't find Sherlock Holmes body, please give me time to redeem myself”. That week Chan Holmes got a lot of disappointment and people not trusting him any more. 

 As years flew by  Chan Holmes studied more and more about 

investigation. Eventually Chan Holmes is ready to go back to the Reichenbach Falls, tt has been 10 years since he had been to that place. 

 Chan Holmes drove to the Reichenbach Falls the next day. Chan went 

down to the bottom of the Reichenbach Falls and walked to the back of it.  

Chan Holmes starts to investigate the cave as he thought to himself “this is sherlock holmes, he wouldn't die in a open space, but wait there might be a puzzle to a room. 

  Speaking of a puzzle there were some numbers on the cave wall like 8,10,3 and 6. Chan Holmes was confused but he saw a tiny writing on the wall saying “think about the how many letters does SH have in their name?” Chan Holmes thought to himself “what could  SH stand for?” Chan Holmes had that “ohhhh” feeling, he thinks that SH stands for Sherlock Holmes. Chan thinks about the question for a minute and then he figured it all out Sherlock Holmes has 14 letters in his full name, 8 

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letters in Sherlock and 6 letters in Holmes. Chan tries to push the numbers 8 and 6 on the wall. The wall had fallen down and it surprised Chan holmes. Chan walked through the fallen down wall and spotted bones on the ground. Chan thinks to himself “is this it?” Chan felt accomplished and happy.  Chan Holmes called the police to scan the bones to see if it’s actually Sherlock Holmes by doing a DNA test (if you haven't guessed Chan Holmes is the grandson of Sherlock Holmes).  A few months later the police confirmed that the bones that Chan Holmes found was Sherlock holmes bones. Chan Holmes went to a interview and said “I have successfully found Sherlock Holmes body.     

The End 

    Special thanks to:Ms. Mindy Slaughter, Ms. Nguyen Thao, Akash Ravi, 

Akihiko Ozaki,Adrian Smith and August Husted. Cite:Cover image  

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Everything has a reason   By Celina.S “What should we play? Ooh I know we can play”  “Princess and dragons!Yeah let’s also dress up”  Sally had interrupted Layla once again. Layla felt the anger build up inside her but she kept it back. Sally and Layla were having a playdate and they were dressing up to play princess and dragons.  “Can I be a princess? You always be the princess since we thought of the game” Layla’s mind was picturing what she would do if she was a princess.  “No, now dress up to be my dragon!” Sally said proudly. Layla’s eyes were flaming, her anger swept to her, she couldn’t hold it back but she didn’t want to act like a maniac, so Layla quietly said  “ I want to go home” Layla stood up and walked towards the doors  “ you always want to go home early! Fine then I’ll play by myself” Sally cried, Layla opened the doors and went down the stairs to meet Sally’s mom in the kitchen.  “ Um, Ms Merry, I’m not feeling well, can I go  home?” Layla finished with a weak smile “oh, sure let me call your mother” Ms Merry (Sally’s mom) pulled out her phone and dialed a few numbers  “ Hi Susan, Layla’s not feeling well and she wants to go home,hmm, yes, okay, yup, thanks, your mom will be here soon Layla ” Ms Merry said as she put away her phone. “Would you like to drink anything?” Ms Merry said with a warm smile.  “Water please, thank you, Sally wouldn’t let me come down to drink” Layla said warmly as Ms Merry filled a glass with crystal clear liquid that Layla received. Layla took three huge gulps and finished her water. Ding dong! The bell rang and Ms Mary went to get it. Layla caught sight of a soft kid face with baby blue eyes paired up with golden blonde hair  “Hi Layla, how are you feeling?” Layla’s mom said kindly.  Not feeling well.” Layla said with a sad tone. Layla’s mom led Layla to a small, blue car, Layla jumped in and sat  the back.  “Mom, I don’t want to be friends with Sally anymore” Layla’s mom was surprised to hear this Layla and Sally were friends since they were two and now they were eight.  “Well what did she do?” Layla’s mom asking very curious  “Sally always cuts in never lets me be a princess in fact she never lets me do anything, she didn’t even let me drink water when I was dying of thirst.” Layla was happy she got that out loud. “Well then maybe you and Sally should separate for now until things calm down.    

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 From that day when Layla had a chat with her mom she was ignoring Sally for good, every time Sally asked for a playdate Layla would just deny. One day Sally got the courage to say:“ Are you mad at me?” “Of course I am. I’m very mad at you.” And with that Layla stormed off to the lunch hall. Sally bit her lip to stop herself from crying. Days past which turned into weeks 

that turned into months which turned into a year. Sally sat alone at lunches always on the same bench alone. She couldn’t play with anybody. She was weak from crying with the cause of her friendships problem. Sally had seen Layla enjoying herself with someone a lot lately and every time she saw them they had a smile on their face.Sally cried every night in her room, but one night something clicked inside her Sally wanted Layla to feel her emotions, Sally got out her note book and started writing… RUMORS about Layla and tomorrow she was going to spread them. 

       

The next day Sally got up feeling confidence in her body. The first person she saw was Alex, Alex was the coolest person in the school. She wore fashionable cloth her hair were in bouncing curls, her smile was the prettiest thing about her Alex smiled so bright it looked like she  was a cartoon character, perfect.  “Hi Alex how are you, how was your week?” Sally questioned trying not to sound too obvious.  “Oh my week was fine, how about you?” Alex said with her perfect smile. That was exactly what Sally wanted Alex to say.  “Well, my week wasn’t very good, Layla and I just had a playdate and she threw her milk all over me! And the other day the teacher caught her stealing from my cubby!” Sally smirked.  “What?!” Alex was as surprised as Layla’s mom had been when Layla didn’t want to be friends anymore. Throughout the day the rumors had been spread not by Alex but by someone who had overheard them speaking. Sally went home pleased with herself. The next day when she walked into school Sally was told that she had gone to Layla’ house and drew all over Layla’s uniform, Sally as furious, steam coming out her ears. Sally plann 

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ed on going home after her ASA to jot down some more rumors about Layla.    Once again Sally sat alone during lunch time, while Layla played with her new friend. Layla’s new friend name was Lana, Lana had many thing in common with Layla. Lana had noticed the rumors floating around and didn’t feel like she fit in because she felt like she was the cause of the rumors, standing between Sally and Layla. Layla was only with Lana at the beginning but now Layla really like Lana, they had playdates, sleepovers and play together at lunch.   Layla and Sally both had the same ASA at the end of the day, they had drawing. They were the only one’s there, they didn’t want to talk to each other so they both stood in silence. Suddenly there was and electricity cut, since they were in the library the door were electric that meant they were locked inside. Layla thought to herself, this would’ve been fun if Sally didn’t start rumors, but Layla found out she was speaking out loud. “Well you started being friends with Lana just to make me jealous!” cried Sally, Layla had never thought of Lana like that. “No! Lana was new and I was her buddy so I had to play with her, she didn’t have any friends so I kept going, I never used Lana!” Layla cried in tears. Sally was now regretting her thought big time. In the end they found themselves apologizing to each other, by the time they finished the power was back on. Sally and Layla planned a playdate, that they really missed, they were friends again. “Hey maybe Lana can come?” Sally said. “No Lana has horse riding tonight” Layla replied.     “What do you want to play?” Sally said. Layla was waiting for her to cut in, nothing, nothing, “Let's play…” still nothing “princess and dragon” “I’ll be the dragon” Sally said with a smile. Layla was amazed. They played happily until dinner, they raced to the kitchen where the scrumptious aroma hit them. Mouth watering Layla was first to dive in. She always got three refills of the plate, as the turkey was heavenly. Layla smiled. Layla was happy.     

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About the author Hi my name is Celina and I am from Thailand, France and England. I enjoy singing, drawing and creating stories I also love to read. Currently I live in Hanoi, Vietnam, I am always moving every three years. I have a big (annoying) brother named William. So far life is good although I know there will be a bunch of bumps on the road.

  

About the story Sally and Layla, best friends. Sally brown eyes, brown hair usually cheerful, until one night friendship is broken. Layla black eyes, black hair finds another BFF and not caring about Sally one bit. One night rumors spreads. Will they ever be BFF again? Or will they stay enemies? What happens?  

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Five Nights At Freddy  

 Eeeeek!!! It was the strangest sight I’ve ever seen. My body was shaking when I opened the door and I saw that there was an animatronic from “Freddy Fazbear’s pizzeria.” So my  name is Hieu and it all began when I was at home playing a game called “Five Nights at Freddy's.” It was the new popular game that my friend “Manny” recommended me to play. So on the main menu of the game I saw a button saying “real life experience.”I thought it was part of the game so I clicked the button. But suddenly there was a brightly light appeared and then later I opened my eyes, saw that  I was glued still on to the chair. The thing I could see were buttons, doors, a radio and a stick that had a tag saying “Frog Destroyer.” Suddenly I heard a voice coming from the old radio saying “Welcome to Freddy Fazbear Pizzeria, here your job is to scare away the animatronic with the frog destroyer. Then I the radio broke, then it stopped and there suddenly was a walking sound and I heard frog croaking. Out of nowhere the animatronic was in front of my face. I then randomly, grabbed whatever I could feel and it was the Frog Destroyer stick so I wave the stick around and the 

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animatronic said “Aprl fool’s day now please don’t hit me” and I was curious so I unmasked and the person inside was my friend Manny. But the light flashed again and I was back home. So he said it was a prank and he worked with the creator of the game to help with the prank. From now on I learned to never trust my friend manny ever again.  

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By:Meina

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If You Try You Can Do It!!

One day there was a girl called,Emily. She was bad at playing football. She was bad at football and she wanted to go to the competition. After school she got a teacher who taught her football. Everybody said` You can’t do it you are bad at football.” But Emily got better and better.She got even better than her friends. She did not want to show other people her worst football. In 1 week it was the football big contest. She was in the blue team. In the red team there were 11 people on blue team there were 10 people. They need to do there best. Emily did what she learned and she dribbled through the field. And scored 1 time. We were in a panic. We and the other got 5 points. Now 6 points. We finally got 2 points. Then it was time. Emily thought her group could win. On the big field she was standing there lony. She wished she could compete the contest again. She remembered that there is another competition with the same group, on next month. She got even better and better. She even learned about teamwork. She was very comfortable of her skills. But everybody said”You lost last time you can’t do it. If you don’t like football you will never make it.” Emily felt horrible. But she kept on trying hard. She liked football now! It was almost the competition. 1 week later… The competition was today. Emily’s heart was beating so fast. She was already on the big soccer field, with her group. She thought her heart was going to pop out. The game started. She kicked the ball and scored 5 times Her group was winning. Emily;s group was good at defending. Then the time was over. They won! She could not believe. Her friends or enemies could not believe, because they did not want Emily’s group to win. Emily could not believe what was going on. Her enemy's stomped away. Hated both of the teams now. Emily’s mom ran to her and hugged her. And Emily got the gold prize. It is a gold medal!!

The End   

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I want a dog for…? Last Saturday, in the morning, my family went to a pet shop and buy a dog. When we were there, there were so many animals there that I want to adopted, some thing had caught my eyes. It's a small, fluffy poodle. I had started to play with it and I thought the dog like me so I decided to get a poodle but I don’t have enough money for a dog and everything else that dogs need so we have to went back to our house.   I have to worked hard every day for my mom and my dad. 

 After a week,  I finally got the money. Next saturday, I went to pet shop and bought a poodle. The dog’s fur is brown so I called him Coffee. He is 1 year old so he is 

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very young.  I took care of him everyday. I still have some money left so I bought him everything else that he need. 

  But then, he started to scraped things in the house  so he have to go out in the garage. The day after, I noticed he was barking very loud because something strange is going on. When saturday come, he started to pushing  the bicycle down because he want to go inside and warn my family about the strange thing was going on inside the house. My mom heard a smash sound in the garage she saw Coffee with all the bicycle down in the floor. She was surprised. Coffee have no more choices. He have to stay in the cage for the rest of the day.

 

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 One night, my whole family was sleeping inside our room, my mom forgot to close the kitchen door so Coffee smelled a very strange air smell. He barked and barked very loud until someone woke up and turned off the gas 

bottle and woke everyone up.  He had warned us from the air gas so we gave him a second chance.  Now I will always remember that I should give human or animals another chance so they can prove what they can do. 

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July Saves Everyone By: Catalina  Once in a kingdom far away there is a tale told. It’s starts with a folly king and prince, they were known for trouble and charming the ladies. Until one day they did something bad to the witch and found out that they were cursed with no luck for EVER, but the king and prince didn’t care about luck. All they cared about is fame money and charm.   One night under the darkness, the king and prince were mad and wanted revenge, so they snuck in the witch cottage. The floor went  “RRRRRRRRRRREEEEEEEEEAAAAAAKKKKK!!!” they quickly  grabbed the potions and ran right out the witch cottage. As they crept in the woods and went as fast as they could, they could hear Midnight the witch screaming and throwing fireballs at them.   When they got to the castle they checked to see what potions the grabbed, they had grabbed poison, love,power,mind control, and richness. The king thought and and wanted to steal the crystals they ran to the cottage Midnight pretended to be asleep but rose up and zapped them with a frog spell ZZZAAPPP!!! They plopped on the floor and quickly hopped away. They were very tired, they found a bush to rest in.    In the morning they got up and started to hop around. As they tried to find the castle. As they rested by the old oak tree. By the Old Oak tree was a girl, her name was July. She was washing clothes in the lake. The prince and king yelled and screamed for help. July could hear little voices from the old oak tree. She decided to investigate where the little voices were coming from. She checked behind the bush and saw two little frogs. She chuckled and said Hello Bob and king. She put them in her basket.    The kings tummy was grumbling, He asked July for a berry. She said Yes your majesty as she chuckled. She plucked a berry, But the berry got big. July dropped it as it was gett got so big it was the size of July, Then it popped! When the smoke cleared the… GODMOTHER! Came out. She dusted off glitter on her sleeve. July! How are you! Said the godmother. Just then the wind said July You are THE ONE! But is she the ONE? Asked the godmother. The wind blew a breeze through July’s Hair and she knew she had to save them.    They ran to the Midnight’s cottage and met a small cat on the way she was by the door, she was a small orange cat. July named her Mimi. they got to the Midnights cottage. She was 

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waiting for them, As they crashed in there was a major battle. Zaps from left to right. July had an Idea she was shooting ice spells that turn you into an ice block. July saw a mirror, She grabbed it and when Midnight shot a spell at July she blocked it WWWAAAAPPPPWWWWIIING! The spell went back at Midnight, She had turned into an ice block. The king and prince turned into there normal selves. They repaid her with money and food for her family.                                            Everyone lived happily ever after.   

                            THE END ! 

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Monster Attack!!!!! By: Akash 

  

  

 Hieu         Jack              Bob 

  

   Fat Monster 

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 Monster Attack!!!!! Bob ran through the shops into the road.There were monsters attacking Earth.There were buildings falling and people panicking. Bob and his friend Hieu were running as fast as they could to safety.While they were running a fat monster was chasing them. They were running so fast they overtook Usain Bolt.They were panicking and freaked out.The monster trapped them and they were eaten.Hieu was so scared he screamed until he ran out of breath.Hieu is an ordinary kid who enjoys life.Bob is a kid who likes to go on adventures.They heard a radio warning and went outside to check what was happening and they were chased. 

 

When they were in the monster's stomach, Hieu punched Bob 10 times for no reason. Bob just threw a rock at Hieu and Hieu fainted. He put a rope around Hieu’s waist and towed Hieu smelled the waste and woke up. They found themselves in the middle of the desert.  Bob was so horrified he ran 

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around the desert trying to find water. Hieu just followed Bob as he just woke up. Bob was nervous.His hair stood up and he felt like he had a tummy ache.Bob said he was going to live here forever if he didn’t come home.It was night time and they were sleeping until a light woke them up.They found this weird factory.Bob was so scared he fainted.Hieu just threw sand at Bob face and he woke up.Hieu and Bob were so excited they sneaked into the factory.They saw all of the monsters that they were eaten by in this factory. 

 They found out that they can ride this monster and go back home.They saw this monster leaving the factory so they quickly hopped on.As the monster was running they started to see home.Bob was so reliefed he started dancing and singing.Hieu was happy as  he could meet his family again.The quicker the monster went the more they could see home.When the monster arived at the city they hopped of and 

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ran straight to home home.Bob was so happy he continued dancing and singing.The only problem was they could not find their parents.Bob was so happy he did not notice that.Hieu was nervous if the monster will eat them or not.Hieu spotted this monster proof house that was full of people.Hieu was suspicous if it was a factory or a safe house.Bob was to happy Hieu had to shake out all of his happiness until he was normal.Bob knew nothing so Hieu dragged Bob to the monster proof ouse.Bob was so shocked on how tall it was for everyone.They decided to enter the house and look for their parents.Hieu entered and saw that each person had their own cubical to stay away from the monsters.Hieu asked the person who was incharge if Jack Manhead was there.The assistant brought them to the 30th floor.Hieu saw his parents and ran towards his parents.They were so happy they decided to have a huge feast for dinner.Bob’s parents could not be found so Hieu’s family decided to adopted Bob. 

 

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No Bully !      One sunny day , the whole school went to the water park . They were all excited except for one person and that was Carly . No one likes her because she is dirty and smelly . Everyone bullied her and excluded her , she was lonely .   When everyone arrived at water park , they all ran into the pool except for Carly . She was just sitting on the bench looking at everyone swimming . She felt lonely and she felt angry to everyone . The teacher asked her “ Why are you not swimming ? It’s fun !” Carly answered “ I don’t want to …” 30 minutes later , it was almost time to go back to school . maya was walking around then saw Carly . Maya walked to her . Maya asked “ Why are you not swimming ?” Carly didn’t answer . Maya pulled Carly into the pool . Carly was swimming fast . No one knew she was good at swimming . Everyone wanted to learn swimming from her . She felt proud of herself . She was happy . One by one they learnt swimming from her .   When they went back to the school . Everyone liked Carly and no one bullied or excluded her anymore . Carly was very happy . When the school has finished and everyone was going back to their house , Carly was happy because 

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all her friends were going to her house with her and went back to their own house when Carly went in . Carly told everything that happened to her that day . Her mom and she was crying in happiness . Her mom said “ You are the best person for me .”                               ­ Happy Ending ­ 

  About the Author : David Lee is from Korea . He is a very good reader and he wrote a lot of good stories . For example , ‘Big Baby Pop’ or ‘No Bully’. He now , lives in Hanoi , Vietnam and he goes to United Nations International School (UNIS) . He is only 12 years old. He is a young , good writer . 

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!!Super lol!! 

 By: Ola 

 Super lol saw something he looked closer. IT WAS BADY!!!  How did he go away from the police station! I can’t figure it out now,i have to go to him and ask him some questions! “said Super LOL” Hi little Bady! “Said Super LOL” Hi little LOL!”Said Bady” You are bad man Bady!“Said Super LOL”  Idc i can do whatever i want! “Said Bady” And no one can stop me!!! Muuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuhahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! “Said Bady”  BYE “Said Bady” Bady flies away  noooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!  “Said Super LOL” i lost him i am gonna use my power to try finding him!“Said Super LOL” Same time: i am soon done with the robot... almost done... and...done! Bady:Muuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuhahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! NO NO ONE CAN STOP ME! “Said Bady” 

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Bady flies up and kills everybody!   Super lol knew it! but he was to late! how is  super lol gonna take him to the police station! Super lol flies!  I found you! Super lol:and now i have build a new police station where no one can get out!“Said Super LOL”   But first you have to catch me! “Said Bady”   I already did look.“Said Super LOL” Walls was build up to  The police station! Done with you and now making people “Said Super LOL” 

Doge power I am making! 

People “Said Super LOL” 

THE !!!END!!! 

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The Opposite Life By: Clara Welty

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I came to, to find a long white hallway with doors on either side and a poster that read elmwood volleyball tryouts.” weird I thought I was at school I suddenly felt something was very wrong and as got up i realized was right. I started walking in direction of room 302, my classroom and then out of the blue a girl with red hair and freckles burst through the doors, it was Jenna my biggest rival, well my only rival but still. “What are you doing here.” I said narrowing my eyes “hey Ella” she said in a very sweet voice the total opposite from her usall sneer. “What” I jumped in surprise I need to find Maya (my BFF) I thought. I started running long big strides up ahead I saw golden curls and stunning blue eyes,” Maya!” I cried I ran ahead and hugged her when I let go,grinning from ear to ear I added “ What's up?” But all I got in response was “Let go of me” I looked at her stunned slowly backing away like you would on a bear, I turned around and started running. I thought what is happening well Jenna was my rival now she‛s acting like my BFF and Maya is acting like Jenna then I got it I was in a world where everything was opposite. So I thought who could I talk to. It had to be someone weird who stays out of the way and someone who might believe me. Then I had a brain wave. The oldest person in town it was...Olga Miler but my after thought was are you crazy Ella are you out of your mind Olga‛s house is a three hour walk away and obviously I couldn't drive I was 11 years old so I decided that I would have to walk so I went to the canteen to stock up. I grabbed doritos,choco pies and some peaches and I started of the first hour was ok but after that i felt beads of sweat falling down my nose.So stoped and opened up the bag of doritos and started to munch and then I kept going when I got there my heart was beating like the loudest drum you would ever encounter I knocked on the door after waiting some time the door opened “oh hello Ella dear would you like to come in”yes thankyou” I said “now what‛s the matter dear” she said well I think came into a world where everything is opposite I ended not expecting an answer but she did say something what she said was you need to find the necklace and befriend again. I gasped said thank you and hurried out the door now I knew what I had to do. If you don‛t understand when I was 10 my best friend was Lily and in 4th grade we got into a fight. It was about her thinking that i had got her into summer math camp but I honestly hadn't.But Lily didn‛t believe me so she had grabbed my necklace and hid it in her closet.So all I had to do was go to her house and I knew nobody was home because Maya was at school and her parents both have afternoon shiftes at the grocey shop down the street.So I set off. On the street I felt a cool breeze of autumn tingle my spine for once in a long time I felt calm but then I remembered and my shoulders tightened up ahead I saw I medium sized house painted white and green it was Maya‛s house i ran towards it and headed to the backyard, climbed over the fence and opened the back door (the doors never locked I ran in

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flinching every time the the stair creaked or moved I finally got to a room where it expecting someone to jump at me at any second but nobody did. I crept through the house heading upstairs opened Maya‛s room it was like the midday sky all blues and whites I rummaged through the desk not finding anything etesp an empty hershey bar “Eww!” I cried holding it at arm's length and dumping it in a blue and white trash can (of course).I went to the closet I scanned through it finally finding a hidden drawer in the depths of it I tried to open it but it didn‛t budge I thought what could open it and then I got it her diary so I went back to the snow white desk I looked through it finally finding what I needed a bobby pin I went back to the closet stuck the bobby pin in the keyhole and twisted turned and squeezed but nothing happened finally after what seemed like hours and hours of working my head of but was really only 1 min. It opened inside was her diary,songbooks,and her locket! I pranced around the room bursting with pride I had done I had found it I scooped it up and right when I touched it I heard soft music almost like a lullaby and then I landed on something comfy. I opened my eyes to find white walls with heaps of books and every stuffy imaginable. I wooped out with joy I was home! I got out to pick out a outfit glad to have a change of clothes I finally settled on a blue lace top with white tights and black flats ran down the stairs yelling “mom,dad i‛m going bye!” I grabbed a granola bar from the table,picked up my neon blue backpack and headed out the doors. I started on the 15 minute drive I took out the granola bar eating it on the bus.When I got there I threw the empty wrapper away. I went inside the school opening the big doors a burst of cool air blew in my face I started walking towards my classroom when I saw it I opened the door I saw my teacher brown hair brown eyes and a blue dress hi Mrs.Tam I said.I sat down

When it was lunch time I opened the doors and was surrounded in a crowd of kids and teachers.When I go out I sat down at Lily‛s usual table. When she didn‛t notice me I nudged her she turned around smiling but when she saw me it turned into a frown.What do you want she asked. I answered, here holding out the necklace” i‛m sorry for getting you into math camp if you want I can go to english camp you know i‛m bad at it “she finally cracked a smile which made me smile” friends again” I asked friends she said.

 

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Rock Girl By Saoirse Quinn

Chapter 1 Once upon a time there was a Rock named Batgirl who was protecting Rock Veal. One day there was a big explosion and everybody ran away. Batgirl tried to ask all the rocks to help but they did not listen to her because they were too scared. Then the Mayor of the Rock Veal said to Batgirl: “HELP! We are being attacked” Chapter 2 So Batgirl had to help them, she quickly ran and got a rope to tighten it to the tallest building in the rock village then she jumped and jumped and she got the monster, she tried to tighten the monster up.

Unfortunately the monster broke through the rope to escape. At that time Batgirl quickly got down and used her super rock power to get him down to the ground.

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Chapter 3 Her friends Rocka and Rockena said to her “I wish we could be like you”. Then they asked her if they could help her in her mission to save the Rock World. Batgirl said YES to their request and she added “But only one mission”. The two girls happily nodded their heads and said YES. The next day Batgirl stayed in and she was asleep. After all she did save the Rock world. Suddenly there was somebody screaming too loud that wake her up in panic.

She immediately called for help and asked “Where am I?” When she saw her friends, she asked them “What did you guys do?” Her friends replied “We did nothing”. Batgirl reacted “YAHA! Really? You girls just wanted to save any rocks” “No, we were trying to sleep because we were so excited” the girls said. “Oh, but SORRY I do not want to be your friend anymore” Batgirl angrily stated

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Chapter 4 Batgirl saved the day. Wow! She rushed to her friends and said “I did it again” “I thought you did not want to be our friends” her friends said “I am sorry I said that. Come on! Let‛s go!” Batgirl said to them “No. You said that we will never be friends so Bye!” her friends replied “I am really sorry, please forgive me” Batgirl begged the girls “OK” said the girls Then they went out for ice cream and become good friends ever to work together to save the Rock World.

The End

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SPY - X

By: Adrian Smith 4MS

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PART 1

Hi! I’m Rob. [Wait a second, John, change the font!] Okay, let’s start over. Hi! I’m Robinson, but you can call me Rob. This is my family: Me, 14. My sister Myra, 8. My Mum Lily, 27. My Dad Steve, 30. We are the Elsoons. We live in Texas U.S.A., at a spy agency, named Xxx‐xxxxxxx‐Xxx. I’m a G‐Tester. Can’t tell you what that means. Bla‐bla‐bla. You might think, “Wow!”. Nope. I get about one mission every 2 or 3 months. Sure, I’ve got a high‐tech bike. But I can only go up out of the ground once a week, for only an hour at a time. Bad life.

PART 2

Okay, I went over that last part and it sounded like I was boring you to death.Look, this is the first time I’ve done this in the 14 years of walking on earth. I’ll try to go past the boring past, and describe the interesting parts. On with the story. So, one day I was relaxing in my room listening to Stitches by Shawn Mendes. It was my favorite song. Ba‐Beep!

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I checked my iPod. It was a coded message for me. “Mum! Dad!”, I called out, “I got a coded message!” They came rushing into my room. When we eventually (10 minutes!) decoded it, we read it [Do NOT call me Mr. Obvious, John. (John’s recording this)]. I grinned. “Love you! Bye!”, I called out as I ran from the room.

PART 3

I pulled on the suit. “Woah!”, I exclaimed, “This is so light.”

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The Suit was an Invisibility Suit, and it moved. Not me, it [Maybe I was in disbelief, John]. All I had to do was think the movement, and the Suit did it. Hmmmm…. I jumped up to the roof, holding on to a spotlight. “It has suction cup boots!”, called Ms. Gabriella (the briefing coordinator), looking somewhere to my right. Once I had gotten used to the feeling of the Suit, I said, ”’Kay, Ms. G! I’m ready to go!” “Come on down then, Rob!”, She called back, grinning. I did a quick front flip, landing with my feet on the ceiling. I walked over to the wall, somehow keeping my back straight as I made my way down the wall. “This thing is epic!”, I said as I pulled off the helmet. “Uhhhhh……….” “What?”, I asked, ”Oh.” It must’ve looked pretty weird, my head floating midair. I took off the rest of the Suit. “Here:”, said Ms. G as she passed me a bag, “Keep your stuff in here.”

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“See you!”, I called out to Ms. G as I ran to the Bike Garage. It was a long rectangular blue and white room. In the corner was the lift. It had a bike holder, and ended up in an old grocery store.

PART 4

I rode along, whistling a tune. I knew exactly where the Invaders’ base was. I had been there 3 times along this route. However, this time I had to go through the roof (I usually just hack the door). I knew that I only had 2 hours to stop them. As soon as I arrived at the base, I hopped off my bike and grabbed my bag. Then I set my hologram function to on, and activated the auto‐pedal function, saying, “Bike Garage, row 7, holder 2.”

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Yep. Voice recognition. I pulled on the Suit, instantly turning invisible. “Where’s the base?”, I wondered, “Ah, there it is.” I walked over to the skylight. I peered inside. It was a dark black lit by the 13 yellow‐tinted skylights. I hated this place. I forced a smile. I was gonna show them who’s boss [Okay, okay. John told me I can’t say ‘gonna’. Improper grammar, he said.] I walked quietly over to the nearest skylight. I quietly crushed the lock with my index finger and thumb. I grabbed my bag and lowered myself down through the skylight.

PART 5

I landed silently on the floor, checking my watch. 1 hour and 10 minutes left for me to accomplish my mission. I crept, silent and invisible, along the corridors. Finally, after 3 dead ends, I reached a door. It read,

EXPERIMENT CHAMBER NOW CONTAINING:

LASER GUN Okay. I felt my stomach do 5 flips. [No, John, I don’t hold a GWR for most stomach flips!] I put my ear to the door, listening.

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There were probably 1 or 2 people in there. I readied my BB gun with sleep darts. Here goes. BANG! I kicked down the door. “Well, well, well….”, said Sheung Le, “You can tell me the location of your base, or you can be the first subject of my new laser gun.” How he saw me, I don’t know. Probably the Suit malfunctioned at the last moment. I gulped. “Kill me.” I tried to accept the fact that I was going to die. I couldn’t. As I looked back on my life, a memory popped into my mind. The Spy Code:

Never Lie Never Tell

If You Have To, You Can Die

As Sheung Le fastened me to his laser gun, BANG! And then, “HANDS UP”, yelled Mom, Dad, and Myra all in unison. Sheung Le put his hands up. Then he did the only sensible thing: he fled.

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“Come on.”, said Dad softly. When I got onto my bike, Myra said, “Race you!” “Sure!”, I hollered back.

PART 6

After that, everything sort of went back to normal. Myra turned 9, and started training to be a G‐Tester. I graduated from training school. So now I’m a fully qualified G‐Tester. If you liked this recording, then you can read my next recording. _______________________ ~⍕⌘⍕~______________________  

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AUTHORS NOTE

This is a true recording recounted directly from Robinson Elsoon, and recorded by John B‐ Oops! John doesn’t want me to say his last name. I am very lucky to get my hands on this recording. If I’m lucky, then I’ll be able to publish a second recording. If possible, I’ll do different parts from different points of view.

ACKNOWLEDGEMENTS

● Cover Page: (Texas Outline) (Family) ● iPod ● Bicycles

Special thanks to: Ms. Mindy Slaughter, Ms. Nguyen Thao, Akash Ravi, Akihiko Ozaki, Hien Nguyen, Timothy Law, Chanathan Saisa‐Ard, August Husted. Programmes Used: Google Drawings, Google Docs,

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Stuck In School 

By: Emma M. Andersen 

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Stuck in school  

Once me and my friend Meina, Meina was from Japan and I am from Denmark. We both had ASA it was swimming it was from 3:30 ­ 4:30. But one day we missed the BUS. We tried to call our parents  by the ES office but nobody took the phone. Then we we heard BANG it sounded like a door smacked, we heard  voices  2 people. We hid in a dark room as dark as the night sky it  was a scary room. The door open slowly it was it was… ” Emma wake up it’s time for school. “ said a voice I hear every day. I opened my eyes It was my mom. I brushed my teeth you know all the normal stuff,  I went to school. In the end of the day I missed the BUS with no body except for one of my best friends Celina. We were a bit scared, suddenly I said quietly “ I had this dream last night.” Celina said surprisingly “ Really? You did.” 

I replied “ Yes” “What happened?” Celina asked  “ I was in the ES office with meina then we heard someone coming. We hid in a dark room that was a scary room it was as dark as the night sky. Then I woke up.” I replied “Wait this is just like my dream because I heard someone coming just like my dream, I’m in the ES office with a friend just like my dream, and we both were scared.” Suddenly my fingers were shaking, my forehead was wet. A pecal of of fear went down my spine.  Celina said “ok­” 

“ Wait … shhh …”I interrupted  “someone is coming.” We listened. Suddenly I said in a shocked voice “ let’s hide in that room” We ran quietly to the room. Without warming the door opened slooowwwly, the door squeaked open it was it was … “Ms. Thao” We both said.  Ms Thao said surprisingly “Celina, Emma. What are you doing hear?” I answered “We missed the bus.” “Ohhh” Ms. Thao said “let me drive you home on my scooter.” Celina answered “okay” Ms. thao said “So who lives closest.” Celina and I both said “Emma does” I interrupted “I live in T3­3.” “Okay, I will drive you there on my scooter.” Ms. thao said politely. When I came home I hugged my family then Celina went home to her house. 

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The Purple Guy’s Curse   In 1987 there was a little pizza restaurant named “Freddy Fazbear’s Pizzeria” . Now this is no ordinary pizzeria ,it had animatronics.There were two animatronics, one golden bear named Fredbear and a golden bunny named Sprinngie.They sang, they danced, and even ate! But nobody noticed Fredbear’s sharp teeth.In the pizzaria there was a gang that would make fun of the new people who came to freddy fazbear’s. One night a kid named Nick came into the pizzeria.”HEY STUPID!”shouted the leader of the gang.”WHO!” said nick through gritted teeth.”YOU, LOSER!”replied the leader.”YOU'RE THE LOSER!”Nick shouted”WHAT DID YOU SAY?!!”the leader said,and with that the leader snatched Nick's waist and knocked his head on Fredbears head Bad Timing. Nico’s head seared with pain. He felt like he was bleeding on his forehead. “AAAAAAHHHHHH!!”,Everybody in Freddy Fazbears screamed.After that Freddy Fazbear’s Pizzeria was shut down for good. 5 days later a man in a purple suit,with a sharp smile,and a security police badge came on the stage.He brought out a laptop and went to work with Fredbears wires. “ It's no use, gotta get my own ones”. “BANG!”.The purple guy put Fredbear and Springie into a abandoned storeroom.Next to purple guy brought out 3 animatronics (a-ni-ma-tron-ecs).There was one bear named Freddy,a bunny named Bonnie,and a chiken named Chica. Then he started fidgeting with the wires.The purple guy knew at 12:00pm that the Animatronics would haunt Freddy Fazbears Pizzaria.As he fidled with the wires he mummbled “REVENGE!...”.The next day a post spread as fast as lightning, saying “FREDDY FAZBEAR’S PIZZERIA Reopening!”. But no one knew the owner: The Purple Guy. When the old owner knew about the reopening he took the job of the night guard (not even knowing the owner) 10:00 The night office did not look so cozy

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The Disappearance

Written by Timothy Law

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The Disappearance Chapter 1 The Devil

EKKKKKK!!!!!!! I saw something, I couldn’t believe I saw. At the door was a half human half demon.His

clothes were ragged and dirty. His skin was brown and rough.The devil was holding a knife.

I was walking back as the devil was walking towards me, THUMP, I hit the wall. ‘I am going to die” I thought. My parents were out, just me in the house. Then my friends

burst in ‘Hi Ja…………’Then the devil disappeared.

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Chapter 2 The Search

‘Jack, what was that?’ my friends Will and Amy said in unison.

‘Don’t know’ I replied ‘should we report it? Will asked ‘no, I don’t want anybody to get hurt, we will solve it.’

‘Will are you in?’ ‘yes’ Will replied ‘Amy?’ ‘yes’

I was doing my least favorite thing to do, in the forest looking for the devil, at midnight. I was with my friends, Will and Amy. Then I heard footsteps. ‘stop’ I said. No

footsteps. ‘ why did you tell us to stop?’ asked Amy ‘ I heard footsteps.’

We will walking ‘ARRHHHHH’ then we fell In a hole. In the hole was a long hallway. There were candles stuck on the walls. I looked up, there was no longer a hole,

just the dirt ceiling. ‘ Weird’ I thought.Every step I took forward it's felt colder and colder . Then I heard a

scream. ‘ARRHHHHH’ screamed Amy. I turned to see if Amy was ok. I look behind me, Amy was gone!

‘Run’ We ran following the sounds of footsteps. ‘Which way’ I asked Will ‘left, there are no sounds on the right.’ he answered. We turned right right left right left then

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left. It was a dead end. Then Will screamed ‘Amy’s D…….DEAD!’I was shocked, on the floor was Amy. Amy skin was pale, her eyes were wide with fear. Then Amy

disappeared. Amy was DEAD.

Then we heard footsteps, we ran and turned left. It was a dead end with the devil. I kicked the devil and it

screamed and dropped it’s knife.I picked the knife and Stabbed the devil in the heart . The devil screamed in pain and burst in flames. Then the flames turned into ashes and blew away. Amy was gone, Amy was dead.

‘I coming for you Amy’

A few day later I had a weird dream about Amy in the underworld trying to get out. ‘I am going to find you

Amy’ I said to myself, ‘one day’

R.I.P Amy

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The Mask Man

Written by Akihiko Ozaki

Special thanks to: Ms.Mindy and Ms.Thao

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“Don’t move!” The mask man shouted. We were terrified.”Go in here!” Another mask man shouted. We went in. Then we were... This is what happened to me. I woke up and ate breakfast. Then I went to school. Just like normal. After school was finished, I rode a car. I was going to have a camp with 4 friends. Chan, Arian, Manny and Alex. Alex’s dad was driving the car. When we were driving, 3 mask men came. They had guns. Then they kidnapped us. We were forced to go in a van. When we arrived, They forced us to go in a room. “What should we do?” said Chan. “If there was some way to escape here…” said Arian. I was surprised that everyone was so calm in this situation. We were in a room with a iron wall. On the top, There was a hole. There was a trapdoor on top of the hole. There are some food and water. There was also a clock. In the meantime, the parents were worried. Alex’s dad texted “I will send a message when we arrived at the camping field.” But there wasn’t any message. They told that to the police. They searched the camping field but there was nobody. We were starting to panic. The food and water were half used. That means we could survive for about 5-6 more days. In the meantime, the police had found the van. It was at about 10 km away from the camping field. When they went in, there was no sign of humans. The parents said nothing. They just waited for a good news. Some parents thought they had already died but they didn’t believe that. We were making the plan because Alex’s dad suggested so. One plan was simply going out by opening the trapdoor. In order to do that, We needed to climb. Another plan was simply waiting without wasting energy. Then our food lasts longer. “I think we should go with the first plan.” I said. “But it will take a long time!” said Alex.”Ok. How about this - Who votes for the 1st idea?” said Alex’s dad. Me, Manny and Alex’s dad raised their hand. “For the 2nd?” Arian and Alex raised their hand. “Why did Chan didn’t vote for both of the idea?” Alex complained. “Because I didn’t like both of them.” “Wha..” “Stop asking questions Alex. 3v2. We are doing the 1st idea.” Alex’s dad said. Alex didn’t say anything. He just slumped at the corner.

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3 days after we were caught, there was a phone call to my mom. The culprit probably used the voice changer so my mom didn’t know who it was. The culprit said “If you want your kids back, you need to give us $6,000,000. If all 6 families payed $1,000,000, It will be ok. Put the money at 48B, Trolo.” She immediately told that to the other families and the police. We were starting with the plan. I was opening the trapdoor because I was the only one that could easily fit in the trapdoor. There was a little bit of space so I stepped there. I tried to climb and open the trapdoor but it was impossible to open the heavy trapdoor. Then, another thing has happened to me. I couldn’t go back to the place where everyone was because the dirt covered the hole. Everyone asked “Are you ok?” So I shouted “I am ok! Don’t worry about me!” Actually, I was panicking. The trapdoor couldn’t be opened and going back to where everyone will take a long time so I came up with another idea. Digging the stone right next to me with a sharp stone. At least it was better than opening a heavy trapdoor. I told Alex’s dad about that idea and he replied “Ok. Just do your best. We all are counting on you.” So I started it. It was extremely long. While everyone was sleeping and eating, I kept digging. The longer it took, the less chance I will die out of hunger. I needed to survive. I thought time was forever but I killed all the feelings and kept digging. I don’t know how many days had past. I saw a dim of sunlight. After that, I had a little bit of power. After another day or so, I opened a hole to go through. I didn’t told anything to Alex’s dad because they were sleeping. I got out. Next, I went to the nearest house possible but I needed to walk like 5 km. I was at the middle of dying or surviving. When I finally came to a house which a old women had lived, I told I was kidnapped and where we are caught and she let me sleep and eat some food. When I woke up, 3 days had actually past. A lot of people was watching me. Lots of cameras are photoing and videoing me. This happened to my 4 friends. They were terrified that I didn’t reply to their questions. They all thought that I am dead and we had no hope. We couldn’t escape. We were all dieing because of hunger. They even had enough energy to move but Alex’s dad thought that “Maybe Garroth escaped.” but he didn’t have enough energy to say it.

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About a day later when they saw the rescue team, they thought that they were angels. Alex’s dad thought that his thinking was not wrong. When they were rescued, only Alex’s dad had conscious. The culprits surrendered themselves because they knew they couldn’t escape. They were so surprised that they ran away from that room. They were actually pro kidnappers and they kidnapped a lot of people and got money. The reason they kidnapped the kids was that they were running out of money because they lost at gambling. Our school was famous that the students are rich. When we came back, my parents were so shocked. My mom almost fainted. Later, I knew that all my friends’ mom was like that when we came back. When we came back to school, we were the most famous people at the whole, gigantic school. We were told to come to the principal's office. Ms. Mindy, the principal said “We will congratulate you for your courage. We will have a pizza party.” When she told the same thing at the assembly, The whole school was crazy. “We get to do a pizza party! We get to do a pizza party!” everyone sang very loudly. I have learned an important lesson. “Never Give Up.” I still could remember this story even though 2 years had past.

The End?

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By: Hoang Anh Bui

  

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The peacock In the forest, there was a peacock.He was most beautiful bird in the forest.One day, the peacock went out to find food. The other animals said “hey peacock come and play with us”.The peacock don‛t care what the other animals said and walk away.When he on the way home, the blue bird ask”can I have little bit of your feathers, I really need it because my sister is really hot and I need your feathers to make a fan”.The peacock said “who do you think you are! There are a lot of things in the forest that you can use to make the fan for your sister.Do you want to use my feathers to make the fan because it beautiful?, I will never give it to you, go away”. The blue bird said “you are to selfish, you have a lot of feathers and you don‛t use it so why you don‛t share with everyone? If you don‛t share it so no one in the forest will play with you.You will be the loneliest animal in the forest”.The blue bird go away and tell his friend about what was happening there.All the animals decide that when the peacock come they will just do the same thing like when the peacook did to them and will not play or talk with the peacook anymore. The next day, when the peacock come to that place again all the animal just do the same thing like when the peacock did to them. The peacock go and ask

  

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Mr monkey. He ask “ why I am really beautiful and no one want to play with me? Mr monkey said” they don‛t want to with you because you are to selfish. You should say sorry to all the animals in the forest and give each one a little bit of your feathers”.The peacock ask himself” How can I be happy if I give my give my beautiful feather to them?, why they don‛t ask the others bird for a little bit of feather and why they ask for my feather?. When he go home, the blue bird ask “Can I just have a little of your feather?, It don‛t have to be very big”. The peacock think in his head, he think that if he give the feather to the blue bird so he will not the loneliest animal in the forest anymore so he just pull his feather and give it to the blue bird. The blue bird really happy, he told his friend about it and from now the peacock it not the loneliest animal in the forest anymore.

  

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 The Trip   

 

    This is a true story believe it or not  It was about 2003 when my uncle Brian was cycling from Thailand to Hanoi.  My uncle always was a bit overweight so this was his chance to lose some fat.  He cycled and cycled. For the first couple of days its was fine but one night everything went wrong. It was about 9pm He was worn out. So he  went in a little house next to a rice field. 

 

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2 hours later   Someone was poking him in the stomach he unlocked my eyes.  It was this man with a scar under his left eye and a broken teeth also a pimple on his right nostril. For a split moment  He thought he would throw him out but for some reason the stranger  wanted Brian to follow the stranger. But He had a bad feeling about this and he usually never would do such thing but this time he took the risk. So I took my bicycle with me and walked a few kilometers. We passed rivers mountains  and more. At last we ended up in this little village then ended in this little house. There were three people a old man a lady and a girl. First he showed him the three people were he needed to go. I used my hand signals and my map. After he showed them where he needed to go we ate. There was soy/sticky rice pig ears. After they ate he went to sleep on the floor with a thin old blanket with holes. 

 

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  One Hour Later.   Ay what are you doing’! The old man smacked him in the face .  His cheek turned as red as flames. Then in a shivering move the old man pointed at a man who had a green uniform so he didn't worry because he thought he was a cop. So they had to eat again. After they ate we talked about were he needed to go. Then he heard a click. You wouldn't believe if i told you, he had a gun. He wasn't sure if it was a 45 or a magnum, but it sure was a gun. He pointed it at me and want    ed my Brian’s money and if he didn't give him it Brian would be  D E A D you heard me dead. He was sweating from top to bottom. So while he took his money he kicked him in his nether regions. Then Brian stormed down stairs and took his bicycle.   “RRRRRRRAAAAAARRRRRR” PROF PROF he heard gunfire. Brian’s heart was pounding sweat landing on my shirt. He was paddling as fast as a F­4 jet. He hid i this little laine for about 20 minutes. “Phewf I think I lost him’’ “I definitely not staying here”. So as fast as he could he cycled.  When he came out of the village he thought to himself where am I. Brian 

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looked at his map. “WOW! i'm so close to the airport”. “I can  Buy a airplane ticket for fifteen dollars and i have 30, because he didn't check my bicycle. “I can now get there twice as fast as I used to”.So he bought the ticket and went on the plane at 3:20. So he to his bicycle apart and went on the plane with propellers. He  sat on one seat next to the window and nobody sat next to him. Then he saw a attendant walking past with a lock and then she put it on the door. “Wait what kind of airline is this puts locks on the door tiny hole in the window and plastic on the seats with holes in them. So for the whole 2 hours and ten minutes Brian had to take deep breaths and didn't know whether to laugh or cry. Brian landed at 5:30 in the morning in the international airport of hanoi/ Noibai Airport. Brian was at his brother's house  at 6oclock on a Tuesday and he was suppose to be there on a saturday. So when he arrived he got his room and unpacked his stuff. “ SPIDER!!!!!!!!!!!!” screamed  Brian. Brian's brother Soren sprinted upstairs to get the big fat ugly spider but instead they ran around the room for the rest of the night.  Never trust strangers  The End  

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The Wizard Fault By : Hien Nguyen 4MS 

 

  

      

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Ahhh ! As we scream watching Insidious a horror movie . There was my friend AJ (August) was having a sleepover at my house . Then we heard a knock  we were so scared but AJ was brave enough to open the door then he did it was just Harwy Pooter .  He gave us a weird looking clock then he disappeared  . We expected a magical clock because it's from Wizard Harwy Pooter but it wasn’t . Then we said in unison , “ THIS IS A STUPID CLOCK NOTHING BUT TRASH ! ”  . But a few seconds later we heard a knock then together we opened the door it was a pizza delivery FOR FREE ? . We were so excited ! Later we asked ourselves ,“How and why we got pizza ? ” . Then we heard a whisper , “ Me the clock that Wizard Harwy Pooter gave you , by the way my name is Ken ! I am a genie , clock version . I will give you infinity wishes . ” .We were freaking out and we wished for everything Xbox , PS4 , Apple technology and everything that was new in 2016 & 2015 .   Then the next morning we woke up , we heard a “ BOOM ” and gun noises , we are so scared . We went  outside and after a second opening the door ,we said with a face with fear , “ OMG . We are at the Vietnamese and American war ! . ” We shut the door quickly then we wonder how did we time traveled to the past at 1970 . But no worries we still got Ken . “ Oh no ! Ken ran out of power Hien ! How do we go to the present  ? ” , said AJ .  “ Then we have to find a way to recharge Ken AJ . ” I said with disappointment . Then we tried to ask Ken , “ Ken how can I recharge you ? ” . Ken replied , “ Get t­low ten b­power ­ bullets error and push it error i­low in my ­ bac­err error . ” .  Then we did what Ken told us to do . While the war was happening me and AJ was  pretending to be a soldier so we could get bullets but we still have to fight  . After day to day we got one bullet one by one each day . After we got enough bullets we pushed the 10 bullets in Ken’s back then BOOM ! Thank god we escaped from the nuke . Lucky right ?  Sca doosh ! We woke up , we saw every thing was coloured aqua . Then we went outside to see what was happening … After a second we realised that we were in the future . “ What ? Why aren't we in the present ? Why are we here ? ” , asked AJ . I replied “ IDK (I don’t know )? Don’t ask me ask Ken . ” Then Ken said , “ I think I am brokk ­ en hhee ­ lp err­orrr , shut down ! ” . So we brought him to the genie clock shop ,the employee’s face was blue and deformed, we asked his name then he replied , “ Hello I am Ranny , nice to meet you . ”  We stood in awkwardness then we ask Ranny the genie , “ Can You fix Ken for me ? ” Ranny replied , “ Yes sure the cost would be 50000 $ please  . ” We were frightened then we said , “ Can you fix Ken and we will pay after please ? ” Then Ranny said , “ Yes , sure! ” . After Ranny fixed Ken , We imediantly time traveled to the present and we did not pay Ranny .  

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 We were fine at the present but it travled us to the night were me and AJ heard a knock . We both stood up and said to Harwy Pooter , “ GET OUT NOW ! ” . Then evrything went to normal  , after then we learned that Do Not  acept gifts from stangers and don’t call things stupid and don’t be greedy !    

 

      

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                                 Tryouts                            By Beeke   Emma Costa rushed to the office. This was her last chance to sign up for the volleyball team and she needed to at least try to get in the team. Even though she knew her family wasn’t going to approve of it, she would sign up. She was brought out of her thoughts by a cluck of the mouth. Emma whirled around expecting to see the principal. Instead she saw a mirror of herself. Copper hair, hazel eyes and light skin. Her twin sister, Mia.“Why are you running in the hallway?” She asked her eyebrows raised. “ None of your business!” Emma spat back. She knew Mia didn’t care about breaking school rules. Mia glared at her. “Don’t even try signing up for volleyball. You’re going to fail at tryouts.” She looked at Emma one more time then stormed off. Emma bit back her lip to keep her from crying. She hated Mia. Mia said Emma was clumsy. Now was Emma’s chance to prove her wrong. She ran the rest of the way to the office and rammed the door open. Mrs.Lee was sitting at the desk with a paper in front of her. It read: Volleyball Team Sign Up. Emma grabbed a pen and scrawled down her name and class, then left the office. Then she remembered assembly had already started.Emma sprinted across the hallway and into the theatre.  . . “And the volleyball tryouts will be next week. Good evening and I hope to see you next Friday” the principal finished. On his last word the school raced out of the room. Emma was among the front of the crowd. She had to practice for tryouts. She had to prove Mia wrong.   “You signed up for volleyball!” Her father roared after Emma had told him about what she did. Emma’s father didn’t like her doing sports. But unlike Mia, she was honest. She had to admit that she was trying out. “Our family doesn’t do sports!” Her father exclaimed. “Your mother would not be proud!” “You’re right. I wouldn’t and I’m not.” Emma’s mother said as she came in. She turned to Emma. “You’re too clumsy to do any sports.” 

 

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Emma’s mouth fell open. “Clumsy! I am not clumsy!” “Yes you are, Cupcake.” Her mother answered. Emma could feel tears welling up inside her eyes. “W­why does everyone I know hate me for this. All I did was sign up for volleyball.” Just then the sound of the doorbell rang through the air. “I’ll get it.” Emma murmured. She opened the door to find her best friend Morina standing outside. “Emma, look, I don’t think you should tryout for volleyb­” Emma slammed the door in her face. As she came back into the living room she found that her parents had gone, leaving a note behind.It read: Dear Emma, We’re at Foodshop 45. We decided that we’ll give you one chance at vollyball. But only one. Your parents, Derick and Daisy. Emma looked up from the note feeling relieved. Sadly, the note didn’t change the fact that everyone was against her. She sighed. She wouldn’t just have to prove Mia wrong. She would have to prove everybody wrong. Everybody.     Emma wiped sweat from her brow. She had been hitting a volleyball up and down for at least an hour. Her muscles hurt and her lungs felt like rubber. She was in an abandoned garden about a mile away from her house. She didn’t want her parents to find out she was practicing for volleyball and this place was perfect. It had a tennis net. If Emma went on her knees she could use it as a volleyball net. She used an old soccer ball for the volleyball. Her hair was tied up in a ponytail and she was wearing sports clothes but Emma still knew this was nothing like playing in a real volleyball court, wearing real sports uniform. But that didn’t stop her from practicing. Arms out, thumbs together, squat, up over and over again. Over time, her arms started feeling like lead.Then her legs went numb. Her abdomen felt loose.Eventually her whole body felt weak. Emma could barely move. She stumbled out of the garden. Emma didn’t know how she did it, but she made it to her house. The moment she got to her room the world turned black.   

 

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Emma looked up from her desk groaning. For the last few days she had practiced for tryouts. Now it was Friday. She had found out that assembly was canceled so this was her last class. Her ears were waiting for the ring of the schoolbell. Then a sound went through her ears. Emma sprinted to the gym and skidded to a stop in front of the door. She was late. The other girls had already gone inside. At least they hadn’t started. She followed the girls into the gym and followed the instructions from the Coach: “Seperate into two teams and play the game.” As  they started the game Emma redid what she had been practicing. Down, squat, hit, overhead, underhead, push, lift, jump. She was on a roll. Her team was winning ten to zero. A loud beep signaled the end of the game. The Coach would announce who had made it in the team. The girls moved to the bleachers paying attention to the Coach. “Kristie Meyer” he said. “Layla Code, Maya Polo, Aloa Hoff. Emma Costa.” Emma’s heart was beating ten times faster than usual. She couldn’t stop smiling. Her ears blocked out all the sound. Finally she calmed down and zoned in again.  . . . “ and the captain is Emma Costa.” Emma didn’t know that she could be happier. But she was. Then she saw Mia. Mia was looking at the ground, sulking. She hadn’t made it in the team. Emma walked to Mia and said: “I’m sorry” “Don’t be” Mia answered. “I’m happy for you.” she continued. Emma grinned. Maybe having a twin sister wasn’t so bad. “Hey Emma, I’m sorry for doubting you, on a happier note, good job.”Morina said  Emma’s smile widened. She knew her parents would be proud of her like everybody else. Because she hadn’t given up. 

 About The  Author     Beeke is a normal 4th grader. She lives in Hanoi Vietnam and has a cat named 

Frieda. She loves to write, read and draw. Beeke loves how this book turned out and hopes to make a sequel.