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Lauren Raker

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14 October 2014

Who am I, the Writer?

I kick my shoes off, stare at my computer screen, and brainstorm a million difforent ideas

in my head. What is going to be the title of this paper? Where da I begin? What do lwrite

about? How do say what I need to say without it being confusing? How can I get my audience

to relate to what I am saying? These kinds of thoughts seem to be never ending. I always write#wrK

in my room; that way there are less distractions. I can still hear all of the noise, if there is any,

outside, but with my door closed, the noise isn't as loud and nobody bothers me. Sometimes, if I

cannot concentrate, I listen to music to get a good rhythm to write to.ir\t\s

In high school, I was the kind of writer that always had writer's block. I was given

prompts that sometimes I couldn't relate to; therefore, writer's block consumed me. I would sit

at my desk watching the hands on the clock ticljust thinking how I could put my spin on a topic

that I really didn't know anything about. I wasn't allowed to listen to music when I wrote papers

during school hours, so I couldn't really ever get into my groove on paper. When I wrote papers

in class, there was always a time limit. For me to write a solid paper, I need ample time. I need

to be able to revise and edit my work as many times as I feel necessary. In college, I consider

myself a freedom writer because I have more freedom as a writer. Yes, I am given topics, but

//"-thltopics assigned are broad. I can put my own spin on the topic and interpret it however I

wpnt In college, I have noticed that I am a more relaxed writer, and writing a paper is actually

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different ideas.

What is strength? According to Google, Strength is a good or beneficial quality orc}.

attribute of a person or thing. Aqrwriter, my strengths vary from paper to paper, it just depends

on the topic. For instanco, ffiy Literacy Narrative was a paper that was easy to write because I

wrote about softball and memories. I've played softball for eleven years, so I pretty much know

everything there is to know about it. Memories are easy to write about if you can remember

what happened in a specific moment of your lifetime. With that said, I am a strong writer when I

write about my hobbies and past memories. Grammar is also a strength of mine. I had a really^amazing teacher my freshman year of high school. Her name was Ms. Simmons, and Ms. he;fl,

&immons taught me nothing but grammar. Every single day, I would come into her class, roo*lr{,At*i1-""\)number 133, and correct all the sentences that she had written on the board. That is how I I Yumber 133, and correct all the sentences that she had written on the board. That is how I f Y V

became an expert in grammar *u"tu"'y-'l i ^S-^rs a writer, I guess my biggest challenge is writing about myself. So far, this essay hasC'St

been a struggle. I tend to think so negatively about myself that I just can't ever think of anything

good to say, or in this case good to write. Writing about my strengths was a bit of a challenge.

I've never had very good confidence in anything I do whether it's writing or riding a bicycle.

Elaborating on a specific point I bring up is also a challenge for me. Sometimes, I just say what I

want to say but never actually go into detail about a specific point. This tends to make my

sP$ love reading rfwn]3;r"*. I appreciate that other writers have different%t'rr*

perspectives. In retum, other writers' perspectives give me a difFerent outlook on my papers aoO ) twhat I've written about. It gives me brand new ideas that I can use in my own work. It also 1$'

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papers uninteresting to readers. I need to practice more with writing so I can hook the readers

and make them want to read more of my work.

When I write, I want to make the reader feel what I felt r,vhen I was writing. I try to write

with a lot of emotion in my papers to make the readers more engaged. I try to make my points

clear and concise and easy to follow along. I want my papers to have a good flow and rhythm to

them. I want the peoplqtfl-d] read my papers to be on the edge of their seats and motivated to

read paragraph after paragraph.

I think writing is a good way to express yourself whether you're mad, sad, or happy. I

know when I am mad I whip out my diary and write about all the tenible things that happened

that day until it's all out of my system. That makes me feel a lot better because I can "murder"

the page with my words of hatred. I also write when I'm really happy. When I'm happy, I write

about how great my day was and everything that happened because I want to remember every

little detail about how awesome my day had been. I may even doodle or draw flowers on the

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When I talk about writing, I mostly talk about gmmmar and punctuation. When I was in

high school, that's what the English teachers pushed their students to do. I don't want to say that

the English teacher didn't care about the content because they did, but they really enforced

grammar and punctuation. I have noticed that when we do peer observations in Ms. Ingram's

class I have looked at other things like the flow of the paper. When we wrote the two different

drafts for our Literacy Narrative, Geeng, Olivia, and I discussed how to combine both drafts,(,together. We helped each other figure out which paragraphs we needed to take out and the order

that the rest of the paragraphs needed to go in to make each other's paper flow better.

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My favorite geffe to write in would probably be romance. Most of my diary is about myfitl-

bo1&iend and'I and the dates we have been on, the places we have been together, and how I feel

about him. I love romance. Romance is my favorite genrc in general. I love to watch romantic

TV shows, read romantic books, watch romantic movies, and take romantic walks in the park. If

paper. When you get engaged to someone, that's when your "topic" is assigned. Your topic is

the wedding, and a wedding is nothing more than a story that the soon-to-be husband and wife

have planned, edited, and revised over a period of time.

To be able to plan a successful wedding, you will need to come up with ideas and

brainstorm; the same thing has to happen if writers want to write a successful story or paper.

Were is the wedding going ta be held? Wo are the bridesmaids and groomsmen going to be?

Wat kind offood is going to be served? What time is the wedding going to take place? How

are tlte bride and groom going to payfor the weddingT All of these are questions that we ask

ourselves as writers r,r,'hen we write a story. In other words, what is the setting af the story? Who

are the main characters? When is the story going to take place? How are we going to make this

story come alive? Wat are the specific details in the story that made everything came together

to form a masterpiece? As you can see, writing a paper or a story is not much different than

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