“PROGRESS SO FAR” FEEDBACK:By Josh Davey

I have now shown multiple members of the target audience my progress so far, which is almost a rough-cut, it’s just lacking a soundtrack and some scenes are not in place correctly.

Feedback (Positives)

• It’s appealing as it features multiple conventions within it

• It’s a conventional trailer, just lacking some important elements

• Psychological elements were present – which depicts the protagonist’s mental state well

Feedback (Negatives)

• It appears to be one scene places after the next• It’s slow in places• Some scenes are long and bore the viewer slightly• Editing needs improving• Distorted audio from wind

Improvements

• Improve the editing of scenes• Make it so it’s not just one scene played after the

previous• Add more flow to it with less uninteresting build up• Include conventional soundtrack• Add in transitions, more captions, film information

and release information

Overall

Overall, the content was found very appealing by the target audience, but it is lacking certain elements that keep it from being fully conventional, mainly being within two of the four technical areas, Editing and Sound.

This has given me ideas on how to improve my production as I advance into the first draft.