The Purpose is to retell events from

Your Own Experience

Write in first person

• I

• Me

• We

• My

Write in third person

• She• Her• He• His

• Their • Him• Them• They

Write mainly in the past tenseAdd ‘ed’ to most words to make them past tense

Introduction

MumDadSisterBrotherTeacherFriendAunty Uncle CousinPolicemanFireman Next door neighbour

YesterdayLast weekLast nightAn hour agoLast yearAt 2.30 pm…

HomeSchoolPlaygroundSupermarketRainbows EndThe Town CentreThe school field

BirthdaySpecial day or eventWeddingHoliday Christmas EasterCeremonies

What was happening?

Write things in order that they happened

• Must be in sequence

• Must be chronological

• Must be in order

Order

• What happened first?

• What happened next?

• What happened last?

The bus arrived ten minutes late and we were starting to get worried that it wasn’t going to come at all!

Eventually we arrived at Auckland Zoo and we all got organised into our teams…

Finally we found the missing group and they were reunited with their team leader. It was decided…

Use connecting words and phrases

• A few minutes later• Meanwhile• Afterwards• Then • Next• Finally• After that• First• When• Later• The next day• After

Use awesome adjectives to help create a picture

The dog ran after me.

The ferocious dog ran after me.

Awesome adjectives

The dog ran after me.

The ferocious dog ran after me.

PleasantDeliciousTenderLovelyGentle Special SweetCuteKind

FineExcellentBrilliantOutstandingTremendousOkayTerrificDazzlingMarvellous AmazingIncredibleGreat

AwfulTerribleDreadfulShockingGhastlyHorrificUnpleasantPoor FrighteningHorrifyingHorrible

GreatWonderfulAwesomeFantasticBrilliant

DepressingMiserableUnhappyDejectedGloomy

Instead of said

• Whimpered

• Interrupted

• Sobbed

• Mumbled

• Squealed

• Asked

• Explained

• Objected

• Warned

• Continued

• Pleaded

• Screamed

• Whispered

• Shouted

• Yelled

• Roared

• Stammered

• Bellowed

• Exclaimed

• Laughed

• Answered

• Replied

• Told• Teased• Added• Raved• Gasped • Yelled • Demanded• Responded• Muttered• Admitted• Moaned • warned

Describe the various feelings of the person telling the story

• Scared

• Amazed

• Stunned

• Saddened

• Joyous

• Anger

• Hatred

• Love

• Anguish

• Confused

• Revengeful

• Intrigued

• Upset

• Empathetic

• Pity

• Remorseful

The End

• State how things went at the end (how did it all end up, what was the conclusion

• Say how you felt about what happened

• Mention something that might happen later to resolve the situation or make it go on

The End

• What was the last thing that happened?

• How did it finish?

I have written in first person by using words like I, me, we, you, she,

he,

I have written in third person by using words like them, they, him, their,

she, her, his

I have written mainly in the past tense using words was, were, saw or

words that end in ‘ed’

I have written an introduction that has told the reader ‘who, when, why

and where”

I have written all the events in order of time that they happened in

I have used interesting adjectives to create a picture for the reader

I have used strong verbs to describe what happened in the story like

scream, plead, shout etc

I have described the feelings of the person telling the story

I have written a conclusion that says how the writer feels, how things

went and have mentioned something that might happen later

Self Assessment