Oliver Smith’s Attempt at spotting referencing mistakes within a piece of text and bibliography.

BA (Hons) Sport Business Management

Referencing Exercise

The way in which sport is represented in the British media has a profound effect on how people’s perceptions are shaped (Briggs and Cobley 1998, Panorama 1995). In the Wrong order In a game such as football, fans’ identities, attitudes and behaviour can be seriously influenced by what is represented in various tabloid newspapers such as The Sun (1994, Blain and O’Donnell). Date in the wrong place An example of this is the media representation of the England v Germany game in Euro 1996, with emotive headlines referring to war, encouraging people to see it not just as another football game (Jackson 1997, quoted in p165 of Hubbard 1999) Page Number in the wrong place. This can thus be viewed as a contributing factor in the trouble that ensued between the two sets of fans. This nationalistic style of reporting is quite common within the tabloid press (Thomas 2000). Comma after Thomas

Media coverage is also influential in forming opinions on crucial issues within the game. Fullbrook’s (‘Foreigner policy is killing us’, 2000) Title not needed article on the problems created by the introduction of foreign players into the English game is another example of how public opinion may be swayed by reporters. This article indicates that the lack of success of the national side can be laid at the feet of those players not actually playing for the country. It is not only in football that this type of nationalism can be seen. After Michael Schumacher’s triumph in the 2000 Formula 1 world championship, the Daily Star reporter John Murray (2000) focused upon the efforts of the British technical brain behind the victory rather than on the driver himself: “Michael Schumacher’s backroom crew proved that British is best as the technical supremo Ross Brawn guided the German ace to victory in the Australian Grand Prix winning with a landslide victory” Quotation should be indented as it is more than a line (2000: p43). It is questionable whether this report would have mentioned the British influence had Schumacher not been successful.

It is also noticeable that, in the sports media, coverage of women’s participation is often overlooked (Caudwell 1999a).Comma needed after Caudwell More sophisticated analysis of women’s sport and leisure participation has emphasised the different leisure experiences encountered by women (Hargreaves, Kelly, Marie and Minogue 1986).Should be Et al as more than three authors During a conference at Leeds Metropolitan University, Powell noted that the lack of coverage given to women’s football was

symptomatic of the problems faced by women’s sport Less than a line so no need to indent (1998: p24)

in trying to gain the necessary exposure to promote participation for young women. In addition, Caudwell (1999) B missing after date as it is second time Caudwell has been used asserts that male-dominated media sources often present a skewed picture of the reality of women’s football participation. As a response, the government, via the Department for Culture, Media and Sport (DCMS) is working with other relevant organisations to raise the profile of the sport in the UK

(http://www.culture.gov.uk/sport/professional_sport/womens_football.htm). Website not needed with the text

Bibliography

Blain, N No full stop after initial & O’Donnell, H. Game Without Frontiers: Football, Identity & Modernity, Aldershot, Arena. 1994 Date in the wrong place

Cobley, P & Briggs, A Authors names in wrong order and full stop missing after initials (1998) The Media: An Introduction, New York, Addison Wesley Longman.

Caudwell, J. (1999a) Men, Modernity and the Media, London, Falmer Press Full stop missing at the end

Caudwell, J No full stop after initial(1999b) Women’s football in the United Kingdom Title doesn’t need to be underlined as its a journal, Journal of Sport and Social Issues, 23 (4) pp.390-402.

DCMS (2003) Women’s Football [Internet], London, Department for Culture, Media and Sport. Missing URL link

Fullbrook, D Full stop missing(2000) Foreigner policy is killing us, 11th November, p.26 in Daily Star. In the wrong order, daily star should be before the date

Hargreaves, J et al All authors need to be listed in the bibliography(1986) Sport, Culture and Media, Cambridge, Polity Press Full stop missing at the end

Thomas, P. (2000) Nationalism and sport, In: Carew, J. Gonzales, K. and Santos, H. (eds.) Sport and Society, London, Polity Press, pp.134-151. Jackson, D. (1997) Images of sport, London, Routledge. quoted in Hubbard, Y. (1999), A Game of Two Halves, Harlow, Longman. No comma is needed after the date

Murray, J. (2000). ‘Schu’s Brit of alright’, Daily Star, 9th October, p.43.

Sport and the Media. Panorama. (1995), BBC, 21st January, (video:VHS). Location is missing

Powell, H. (1998), Representation of women’s football in: Totten, M. (ed.) Proceedings of the 3rd Football Media Conference, August 12-14, Leeds UK, Leeds, Leeds Metropolitan University, pp.23-31 Missing full stop at the endBibliography not in alphabetical order