REVISIONS-A LOOK BACK

* Persuasive Essay Revisions

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You will need a sheet of paper. Fold and tear the paper lengthwise.

Use one piece of tape to make “extensions” to your draft.

Introduction-Your attention please! How does the beginning capture the

reader’s attention? ( What device? )

How can you strengthen this? ( Do you have more than 5 sentences in the introduction? )

REQUIRED On your ‘extension’- Add/change at least

two sentences to make improvements to your introduction.

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Introduction:What is the issue? What is the opinion

statement? Does the introduction end with a clear statement of

opinion?

Body- YOUR SUPPORT

Are there at LEAST 2 body paragraphs? ( If not, you need more)

What is the first reason of support? What examples or evidence did you provide? Did you use tools of persuasion? ( See persuasion handout) Each paragraph needs a minimum of 8-10 sentences.

Do you need to add details to make your argument stronger? Can you add examples or facts?

Body- WORD CHOICE

CHOOSE AT LEAST 5 WORDS TO REPLACE WITH 5 MORE INTERESTING WORDS.

Use a thesaurus.

Are there words that are unnecessarily repeated?

BODY- Sentences

Are all sentences complete? Do you need to combine any to make them clearer? What transitions can you add?

Conclusion

Does the conclusion summarize your opinion with a STRONG concluding statement or a call to action?

Can you make use of a device?

NOW……

Make a clean copy of your paper IN PENCIL. DO SO NEATLY!

Some general tips

Use standard English. NO text speak.

• Write in the third person unless otherwise directed.

• Avoid slang terms, clichés and colloquial expressions. Use formal language.

Objectives and Results

Objectives Course objective 1 Course objective 2 Course objective 3

Results Expected results

Skills developed Skill 1 Skill 2

Vocabulary

Term One Definition A Definition B

Term Two Definition

Term Three Definition

Procedures/Lecture Slide

Add procedure here Step one Step two

Graphs/Charts 1

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Project

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Conclusion

Add your conclusions here.

Questions/Discussions

Question One Discussion Discussion

Question Two Discussion

Questions Three Discussion