The tone of the writing fits the purpose and

audience.

The writer and the reader have a powerful

connection.

The writing is expressive.

SHAMPO is used.

The writer takes memorable risks.

The writer is confident, energized, and

passionate about the topic.

SimileHyperboleAlliteration

MetaphorPersonificationOnomatopoiea

Foldable, Idioms Book, SHAMPO Activities

Do you know what Ryan did last weekend? He went to the beach with his family. First, Ryan built a huge sand castle. Then, he collected seashells and rocks. After that, he went swimming with his brother. Ryan had a wonderful time at the beach.

QuestionsDoes this passage have good voice? Explain.What can be done to improve the voice of this passage? ActivityWork with a partner to rewrite the passage using voice

Yesterday, Erica went to a pumpkin patch with her family. She picked out a huge, orange pumpkin to take home. It weighed over 15 pounds! Erica stumbled as she was carrying it to the car. Do you know what happened next? She dropped the pumpkin and it splattered all over the ground. Erica yelled, Oh no! 

QuestionsDoes this passage have good voice? Explain.Identify some examples of good voice in the passage.What can be done to improve the voice of this passage? ActivityWork with a partner to rewrite the passage using voice. 

Ideas ◦ Choose a memory as your main focus. Use your Memory Bank!

Organization ◦ Choose one of the planning strategies from your organization

foldable. Voice

◦ Add SHAMPO Add to your Memory Bank or finish a previous

story once you have finished planning. Do not begin your rough draft!!

Brilliant BeginningMighty Middle

Excellent Ending

Brilliant Beginning

Idioms Describe setting Describe character Show action Dialogue (talking) Questions Shocking Suspenseful

Example 1

Example 2

Example 3

Example 4

Idioms Describe setting Describe character Show action Dialogue (talking) Questions Shocking Suspenseful

Mighty Middle

Show action Idioms Details and images Dialogue (talking) Transitions Logical sequence

Excellent Ending

Show action Idioms Details and images Dialogue (talking) Question Belief Give closure

Example 1

“Yes,” I said. “Isn’t it pretty to think so?”

Example 2

I lingered round them, under that benign sky; watched the moths fluttering among the earth, and trees; listened to the soft wind breathing through the grass; and wondered how any one could ever imagine unquiet slumbers for the sleepers in that quiet earth.

Example 3

But wherever they go, and whatever happens to them on the way, in that enchanted place on the top of the forest, a little boy and his bear will always be playing.

Example 4

And so, as Tiny Tim observed, God bless us, every one!

Example 5

He waited for someone to tell him who to be next.

The open Curtain

Show action Idioms Details and images Dialogue (talking) Question Belief Give closure

Ideas ◦ Choose a memory as your main focus. ◦ Use your Memory Bank!

Organization ◦ Choose one of the planning strategies from your

organization foldable.◦ Brilliant Beginning◦ Mighty Middle◦ Excellent Ending

Voice◦ Add SHAMPO