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FINAL GRADE

75/100

GRADEMARK REPORT

GENERAL COMMENTS

Instructor

Well done. This is a clear and well structured essay. You engage in crit ical evaluation throughout and back your points up with studies ef f ectively, demonstrating evidence of wider reading.

Some of your sentences were a litt le long. This makes your points dif f icult to f ollow. In f uture, try to keep your sentences short to make your points clearer.

In order to improve your mark you could have included a litt le more detail on the methodology used in the studies you use to back up your points.

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Comment 1

Strong rationale

Comment 2

This sentence is quite long. In f uture, try to use shorter sentences to make your points clearer

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Strikethrough.

Comment 4

For example,

Comment 5

Good. Could you detail this task

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Comment 6

I'm not sure what you mean by this

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Comment 7

Good

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RUBRIC: PSYCHOLOGY UG ESSAY

CRIT. EVAL.

EXCELLENT

VERY GOOD

GOOD

SATISFACTORY

NEEDSIMPROVEMENT

POOR

KNOW. & UND.

EXCELLENT

VERY GOOD

GOOD

SATISFACTORY

NEEDSIMPROVEMENT

POOR

WRITING

Very good

Crit ical Evaluation

Evidences "an impressive level of depth...and originality", and/or "considerable crit icaloriginality and insight" and meets criteria f or lower grades [ref er to outstanding 1stmarking criteria]

Some evidence of "original or crit ical thought" and/or "originality and f lair" and meetscriteria f or lower grades [ref er to clear 1st marking criteria]

Has "evidence of crit ical thought about the topic and not simply a reproduction ofstandard arguments" [ref er to 2:1 marking criteria]

Has "reasonably competent but somewhat predictable and lacking in originality" [ref erto 2:2 marking criteria]

Has "litt le appreciation of the debates or the dif f erent interpretations that might bedrawn f rom particular evidence" [ref er to 3rd marking criteria]

The "arguments given are largely unsubstantiated", and/or may "contain no answer tothe question" [ref er to f ail marking criteria]

Very good

Knowledge & Understanding

Demonstrates "commanding knowledge and understanding of the topic" and meetscriteria f or lower grades [ref er to outstanding 1st marking criteria]

Makes "extensive use of primary sources" and/or shows "a thorough understandingand appreciation of the material" and meets criteria f or lower grades [ref er to clear1st marking criteria]

Evidences use of a "wide variety of material" and/or "clear understanding of theissues raised" [ref er to 2:1 marking criteria]

Shows "evidence of reading the basic material f or the topic and a reasonableunderstanding of it, but with some signs of weakness" e.g., signs of conf usion /some lapses of clarity [ref er to 2:2 marking criteria]

This "indicates a very basic understanding of the topic, but has not gone beyondthis" and/or shows "limited scope" [ref er to 3rd marking criteria]

This is "incomplete and inaccurate", and/or may show "minimal evidence ofinf ormation beyond the level expected f rom a lay person" [ref er to f ail markingcriteria]

Good

Writing

EXCELLENT

VERY GOOD

GOOD

SATISFACTORY

NEEDSIMPROVEMENT

POOR

STRUCTURE

EXCELLENT

VERY GOOD

GOOD

SATISFACTORY

NEEDSIMPROVEMENT

POOR

Shows "truly exceptional quality" and meets criteria f or lower grades [ref er tooutstanding 1st marking criteria]

The "standard of English is good with minimal errors" and this is "well presented andproperly ref erenced" and meets criteria f or lower grades [ref er to clear 1st markingcriteria]

The "standard of English is good, and spelling and grammar is reasonable" and "allsources are properly cited" [ref er to 2:1 marking criteria]

The "standard of English is reasonably competent" [ref er to 2:2 marking criteria]

The standard of English was “basic with grammatical and spelling errors” [ref er to 3rdmarking criteria]

The standard of English was very poor; and/or may have "disconnected f ragments"[ref er to f ail marking criteria]

Very good

Structure/ Organisation

Shows "an impressive level of ...clarity", may be "equivalent to…a high qualityPsychology journal" and meets criteria f or lower grades [ref er to outstanding 1stmarking criteria]

Is an example of "a clear structure and developing a coherent argument" and meetscriteria f or lower grades [ref er to clear 1st marking criteria]

Is "well structured, clearly written and well presented" [ref er to 2:1 marking criteria]

Is "reasonably well-structured and the material is coherently presented" [ref er to 2:2marking criteria]

Shows "signs of conf usion, and/or poor organisation" [ref er to 3rd marking criteria]

A "poorly argued answer" and/or "very poorly organised" [ref er to f ail marking criteria]