LO: Can I draft my Het Steen poem?

Monday 8th February 2021

Mild: 

Use the sentences in your plan to draft your poem.

Make sure you are using examples of:

-Powerful Verbs

-Expanded Noun phrases

Spicy: 

Use the sentences that you have planned to draft your poem. (Make sure you have included verses to explain what you saw and what you heard)

Include examples of:

-Powerful Verbs

-Expanded Noun Phrases

-Similes

-Short sentences For example: bubbling, babbling brook

Year 4: + alliteration

Hot: 

Use the sentences that you have planned to draft your poem. (Make sure you have included verses to explain what you saw, heard, felt and smelt)

Include examples of:

-Powerful Verbs

-Expanded Noun Phrases

-Alliteration

-Similes

-Short sentences

-Onomatopoeia

Year 4: + personification

Monday - This is our zoom lesson so please do not complete until after the zoom call.

· You will need to keep checking back at today’s slip so that each verse has included at least one example from your relevant challenge.

· Use the plan you made last Thursday. Make sure your first draft reflects the ideas you had in your plan. We are not asking you to start from scratch with new ideas.

· Make sure you write in verses. It is very important to keep the structure of your poem the same through out. If you want a reminder, have a look at the WAGOLL below.

WAGOLL

A Walk at Het Steen

As I walked at Het Steen, I saw

A brave hunter with his faithful dog.

Trees gradually losing their summer clothing.

Marshmallow clouds floating gracefully across the sea blue sky

Chimney pots, standing to attention.

As I walked at Het Steen, I heard,

A family of birds twittering excitedly

Gangly, green grass swishing in the breeze

Squelchy mud under my boots

Silvery splashing water droplets bouncing on a rock.

LO: Can I edit an example of a Het Steen poem?

Tuesday 9th February 2021

· Mild:

Edit verse one so that it includes the following:

Powerful verbs and expanded noun phrases.

Spicy: Edit verses one and two so that they include:

Powerful verbs, expanded noun phrases, similes, short sentences (babbling, bubbling brook)

Y4 alliteration

· Hot: Edit the poem so that it has the correct structure, all features in spicy plus onomatopoeia

Y4 alliteration

At the end of today’s zoom we will be going through how to edit the example poem.

After today’s zoom, read this example of a poem about a walk at Het Steen.

A View of Het Steen in the Early Morning by Mr Mackriell

Everybody to edit verse one:

Verse One:

As I walked at Het Steen, I saw a flock of birds flying in the air because they were flying away from the hunter.

Trees swaying in the wind. Then I saw clouds in the blue sky. I also saw trees that moved in the wind.

A scruffy, old dog ready to pounce towards the birds that he could see over the fallen tree.

Hot and Spicy to edit verse two:

Verse Two:

As I walked at Het Steen, I heard the loud bang of a gunshot as the huntsman shot at the birds.

The splashing of the horse and cart as it travelled past the house on its way to market, whilst the man and woman held on so they didn’t fall.

Gentle mooing from the distant cows.

I could hear the squawking of the birds as they flew over my head.

Hot to edit verse three in addition.

Verse Three:

As I walked at Het Steen, I felt the chilly morning air brush past my face.

Slippy mud underneath my boots.

Crinkly leaves that break into a million pieces as I step on them as I walk to the house.

I could also hear the babbling, bubbling brook running through the fields.

Mr Mackriell is very proud of his poem. But, Mrs Chaplin thinks he’s made quite a few mistakes and hasn’t carefully checked to see what structure and features he should have included!

Help Mr Mackriell to edit his poem. Use the features in your chilli slip to help you. You could also look back at the WAGOLL to show you the right structure and shape of the poem.

LO: Can I edit my Het Steen poem?

Wednesday 10th February 2021

Mild: 

Using the editing stations check through your poem. Make sure you have written your poem using:

· Verses

· Expanded noun phrases

· Powerful verbs

Spicy: 

Using the editing stations check through your poem. Make sure you have written your poem using:

· Verses

· Expanded noun phrases

· Powerful verbs

· Short sentences For example: bubbling, babbling brook

· Year 4: + alliteration

Hot: 

Using the editing stations check through your poem. Make sure you have written your poem using:

· Powerful Verbs

· Expanded Noun Phrases

· Alliteration

· Similes

· Short sentences

· Onomatopoeia

· Year 4: + personification

Step One – Print off or download the editing stations. (The PDF version is only 3 pages for printing, there is also a larger word version.)

Step Two – Go back to your draft from Monday. We are going to use the editing skills we developed yesterday to edit our own work.

Step Three – Using the editing stations spend between 5 – 10 minutes on each station. Read the instructions and edit and improve your verses. Make sure you use a red pen or pencil to edit your work.

LO: Can I publish my Het Steen poem?

Thursday 11th February 2021

Rewrite your poem onto paper or type it up on word. Make sure you have used neat cursive handwriting and structured your poem so it looks like the WAGOLL.

If you want to create a fancy border or illustration related to the poem then you can do.

Fun tip – If you can, print off the editing stations and place them round the room. Get an adult at home to time your 5 – 10 minutes as you visit each station.

Today we would like you to write your work up in neat. If you want to show off the typing skills that you have learnt from dance mats then please type it up.

What do we mean when we ask you to publish your work?

Publish – We are asking you to produce the final, neat version of your poem These are the things we expect from a published piece of work:

· Neat cursive handwriting or typed on word.

· Ask yourself the question. Would you want to have this piece of work on the wall for everyone to see?

· You have written in verses

· You have used expanded noun phrases

· You have used powerful verbs

· You have written your verses like a poem not like a story

· You have have used exciting language features like alliteration, onomatopiea, personification.

Picture or border – If you are going to create a picture or border for your poem, it is really important that it helps improve the look of your poem and is something to do with what you have written. Remember the question Would you want to have this piece of work on the wall for everyone to see?

LO: Can I write a short narrative?

Friday 12th February 2021

Mild: 

Using the picture can you write a descriptive setting using expanded noun phrases.

You might want to use the word bank at the bottom of today’s activity to help you.

Spicy: 

Using the structure from the Het Steen poem, can you write a new poem for the picture below. Look back at Monday’s lesson to remind you of all the features.

Hot: 

Free Write – Using the picture below as inspiration, write a poem or story. Remember, if you want this to be a hot piece of writing, you will need to include the features that you have learnt over the last two weeks.

Step 1 – Look at the picture below. Answer these questions to help you explore the picture before you start your writing.

Where is the treehouse?

What is special about this treehouse?

Can you describe the forest that the treehouse is in?

Can your describe the light in the forest?

Can you think of some powerful verbs to describe how the stream is moving/ how the lanterns sway/ how the trees move?

What interesting things can you see in the picture that you might want to include in your writing?

Step 2 – Now use the information that you have collected to support your writing. Make sure you include all the things we have learnt over the last two weeks.

Finally enjoy todays writing and when you have finished, please send it in for us to have a look at.

Word Bank – You may want to use some of this vocabulary in your writing.

winding

shimmering

mesmerised

gorgeous

twisting

towering

leafy

gnarled

flowing

climbing

lush

rotten

balancing

perched

fascinating

immense

twinkling

hanging

alluring

lofty

decorated

dangling

violet

ruby-red

undulating

crooked

ornate

splendid