Year8Drama

ExtendedResponseAssessmentSupportBooklet

Usethisbooklettoguideyouthroughtheprocessofwritingyourextendedresponse

Contents:

1. Abouttheessaytopic;

2. ResearchMaterial(includinghowtoreferencethesesourcesinyouressay)

3. Developingathesis,essayplanandintroduction;

4. WritingTEEELParagraphs;

5. Writingoptions:

a. ScaffoldedTEEELparagraph(fillintheblanks);

b. TEEELparagraphplan(elaborateonpoints);

c. PersonalTEEELparagraph;

6. WritingaConclusion

7. Submittingyouressay.

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1. AbouttheEssayTopic

EssayTopic:GreekTheatreandCommediaDell’Artebothemploytheuseofmask,explainhowmasksareeffectivelyincorporatedintothesetheatricalstyles.Youshouldrefertoyourknowledge,researchandownexperiences.Whatisthisaskingyoutoconsiderandincludeinyouressay?

• Useofmaskasausefultechniqueincommunicatingdramaticmeaning• UseofmaskinGreekTheatreandwhatpurposemasksservedhere• PurposeofmasksinCommediadell’Arte• Importanceofmasksingeneraltoeffectiveperformances–consideruseofneutral

maskinrehearsalandactortrainingtodevelopthephysicalityoftheactorandcommunicateclearvisualmeaning

SO…thequestionisnotaskingyoutelleverythingyouknowaboutGreekTheatreandCommediadell’Arte…youmustUSEeverythingyouknowtoexplainwhymasksareeffectiveasatheatricaltechnique!

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2. ResearchMaterial

Youarerequiredtorefertoindependentresearchinyourextendedresponse.Thefollowingpagescontainsomerelevantresearchmaterialaswellasthecorrectwaytoreferencethem.Youmayusetheseinyouressay,butyouarealsoencouragedtocompletefurtherresearch.GreekTheatre1In-textreference:

“Greektheatrewasperformedintheopenairinlargeauditoriums”(Roy,2009),sotheuseofmaskwasnecessarytocommunicatecharacters’emotions.

Bibliography/WorksCited: Roy,D2009,NelsonDramaforSecondaryStudents,CengageLearning,Australia.

GreekTheatre2In-TextReference:

Maskswerenecessarytoshow“theageandsexofthecharacteraswellastheirdominantemotion”(Burton,2011).

Bibliography/WorksCited: Burton,B2011,LivingDrama,PearsonAustralia,Australia.

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Commediadell’Arte1In-TextReference:

MasksareessentialinCommediadell’Artetocommunicatethestockcharacterswhobecamewellknownasaresultoftherecognisablemasks(Britannica,2016).

Bibliography/WorksCitedList:

EncyclopaediaBritannica2016,‘Commediadell’Arte’,viewed11September2016,https://www.britannica.com/art/commedia-dellarte.

Commediadell’Arte2In-TextReference:

InCommediadell’Artethecharacterswerepre-definedfortheaudience,they“weretypes”(McDowell1942)–stockcharacterswhosestatusandbasictraitswerealreadywellknown.

Bibliography/WorksCitedList: McDowell,J1942,‘Somepictorialaspectsofearly“Commediadell’Arte”acting’StudiesinPhilology,39,1,pp.47-64.

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NonVerbalCommunicationIn-TextReference:

Whilevocalperformanceisimportant,thephysicaliationofthecharacterisparamountbecause93%ofcommunicationisnon-verbal(Yaffe,2011).

Bibliography/WorksCitedList: Yaffe,P2011,‘The7%Rule:Fact,FictionorMisunderstanding’,Ubiquity.

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3. DevelopingaThesis,EssayPlanandIntroduction

ThefirststepinplanningyouressayresponseistodevelopyourTHESISSTATEMENT.Yourthesisstatementis:

• Yourownargument,NOTthequestionreworded;• Linkedorconnectedtothequestionbutinterpretsthequestioninanoriginalway• Themainpointoftheentireessaywhicheverybodyparagraphwilllinkbackto• Aconceptthatcanbebrokendownintoavarietyofcomponentswhichwillhelpyou

developyouressayplanOnceyouhaveathesisstatementyouwillbeabletobreakitdownintoavarietyofcomponentswhichwillformyourargumentmap.Youshouldalsomakesureyouconsidermajoropposingargumentstoyourthesisstatementbecauseyouwillneedtoaddressthisinyouressay.Forexample:

Nowwehaveathesisstatement,essayplanandawaytoovercomeacounterargument,allofwhichrespondstothequestionrelatingtotheimportanceofmaskinGreekTheatreandCommediadell’Arte.Turntothenextpagetoseehowallofthisisthenusedtocomposeaneffectiveessayintroduction.

Thesis:Masksarevitaltoaperformer’ssuccess.

Component1:Theyenableemotionstobeclearlycommunicatedto

largeaudiences,asinGreekTheatre

Component2:Theyallowforeffectiveand

quickcharacterisation,particularlyinthecreationof

stockcharacterslikeinCommediadell’Arte

Component3:Trainingwithneutralmasksinrehearsalsallowsactorstodevelopeffectivephysicalitysotheactorcommunicates

characterclearlyinperformance.

Counterargument:Actorrelyonmorethanjustphysicalperformances,their

vocalisationisalsoessential.

Resolution:Whilevocalperformanceisimportant,researchindicatesthat93%ofcommunicationisnon-verbal(Yaffe,2011),suggestingthattheactor’sphysicalportrayalofcharacterisparamount.

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WritingtheIntroductionWhenwritinganintroductiontoanessay,weusetheacronymTAGasaguide: T–ThesisStatement

A–ArgumentMap–outlinethekeycomponentsofyourthesisstatementthatwillbeexploredinthebodyofyouressay.G–GeneralStatement–astatementtogiveanoverviewofyourtopicandovercomeanyobviouscounterarguments.

Example:Masksarevitaltothesuccessofperformersintheeffectiveportrayalcharacters.ItisclearfromadetailedexplorationofGreekTheatrethattheuseofmasksinperformancecanassistsactorscommunicateemotiontolargeaudiences.Successfulcharacterisationdependsonmasksinsomeinstances,suchasinCommediadell’Arte,becausestatusandcharactertraitscanbeintroducedusingthistheatricaltechnique.Additionally,theuseofmaskinrehearsalandactortrainingcanhelpanactortocraftappropriatephysicalitywhichisessentialtoasuccessfulperformance.Whilenotallactorswillwearamaskineveryperformancetheyeverdo,noristhephysicalperformancetheonlyelementtoasuccessfulact,researchclearlyemphasisestheneedforaccurateandclearcommunicationofdramaticmeaningthroughvisualmeans.

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4. WritingTEEELParagraphs

Thebodyparagraphsofyouressay,whichwillexplorethevariouscomponentsofyourthesisstatement,shoulduseTEEELasachecklistofcontenttoinclude.TEEELisanacronym:

T–TopicSentence–introducethecomponentofyourthesisstatementthatthisparagraphwilldealwith;E–Example–provideanexampletoemphasiseyourpointE–Explain/Analyse–explaintheimportanceofthepointthatyouaremakinginrelationtothediscussionareaandyourthesisstatement–WHYiscomponentofyourthesissoimportant?E–Experiential–youmust,inDrama,writefromyourownexperienceofseeingormakingDrama–whatfromyourexperiencehasproventhispointortopicsoimportant?L–Link–youmustcompleteyourparagraphbylinkingtothequestion,toyourthesisstatementandtothenextTEEELparagraph(thelastsentenceshouldprovideanicesegueintothenextone).

Example:Asuccessfulperformancereliesonanactorclearlycommunicatingacharacter’semotionandmaskscontributetothisinapositiveway.FromstudyingGreekTheatreandperformancesfromasearlyas400BCitisevidentthatmaskswereagreatwayofconveying“thedominantemotion”(Burton,2011)tolargecrowdsinthetraditionalGreekamphitheatres.Theireffectivenesshasnotreducedinmodernperformances.AlthoughoriginalGreekperformanceswereperformedtocrowdsreachingnumbersaround20000andmoderntheatreshaveanaveragecapacityofaround1500,theideaofthemasktoconveyaccurateemotionandcharacterisstillverymuchrelevantwhenconsideringareasofstagemakeupandspecialeffectsmakeup.Whilenolongercraftedfromwood(Roy,2009),thismodernconceptofthemasktoallowemotiontopenetrateheavystagelightsandreachbeyondtheorchestrapittothesomewhatdistantaudienceisanexampleofthevitalityofmaskinperformanceandhowmoderntheatremaintainsstronglinkstoitsroots.IfoundtheuseofmaskinmyperformanceofanexcerptfromAgamemnontobeextremelyusefulinportrayingtheprideoftheprotagonistbecauseitwasanexpressionthatIdidnotneedtomakewithmyfacebutwhichIwasabletopresentthroughbodylanguagewhichIemphasisedandmadeclearerasaresultoftheemotionalclarityofthemask.Thesuccessofmyperformancewasverymuchduetotheeffectiveintegrationofmaskasabuildingblockformyphysicalcharacterisation.

ThisparagraphwilllinknicelyintothenextparagraphwhichwillbeabouttheuseofmaskinCommediadell’Artetodevelopphysicalcharacters.

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5. WritingOptions

Yourworkupuntilthispointshouldhavehelpedyoudevelopaclearthesisandintroduction.Younowhavethreeoptions:

a. Completeyourthreebodyparagraphsusingeachoftheseactivitiestohelpyou;

b. Useaselectionoftheseactivitiestohelpyoustartorplanyourbodyparagraphs;

c. Writecompletelyoriginalbodyparagraphsifyouarefeelingconfidentenoughtodoso.

Itisokaytosubmitanessaythathasbeendevelopedusingthesesupportactivities,however,itisbesttoelaborateonwhatyoudevelophereinordertodeviseanoriginalresponsethatismorelikelytoreceiveahighergrade.PARAGRAPH1–ScaffoldedParagraph(GreekTheatre)FillintheblankstocompletethisTEEELParagraph.Masksareextremelyusefulinconveyingclear________________.Thiswasthemain

purposeofmasksintraditional________________Theatreperformances–toconveya

character’s________________emotion.ItwasessentialforGreekactorstowear

________________inordercommunicateaccurate________________andemotiontothe

largeaudiencesoccupyingtheoriginal________________whichhelpupto

________________spectatorsinthe________________.Whileitwasnotinfrontofa

crowdofthatsize,myexperienceperformingan________________oftheGreekplay

________________provedtheusefulnessofmasksinhelpingactorsdevelopappropriate

________________.Visualcommunicationaccountsfor________________ofwhat

audiencesunderstand(________________),suggestingthattheuseofmaskinthisinstance

is________________tothe________________anactor’s________________.

WORDBANK: success theatron masks Greekperformance amphitheatres dominant emotions 20000 Essentialexcerpt Agamemnon 93% character physicalisation Yaffe,2011

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PARAGRAPH2–ParagraphPlan(Commediadell’Arte)ElaborateontheTEEELPlantowriteacompleteParagraph(eachsectionCANbemorethanonesentence)T–TOPIC

• VisualcommunicationandstatusofstockcharactersinCommediadell’Arterelyonmasks

………………………………………………………………………………………………………………..………………………………………………………………………………………………………………..………………………………………………………………………………………………………………..

E–EXAMPLE• Theimprovisationsandplotsrelyonthestatusrelationships(giveexamplesof

particularcharactersandhowthisisimportant)………………………………………………………………………………………………………………..………………………………………………………………………………………………………………..………………………………………………………………………………………………………………..………………………………………………………………………………………………………………..………………………………………………………………………………………………………………..

E–EXPLAIN/ANALYSIS• Explainwhyclearstatusisessentialtoconveyingclearcharacter–relateto

intentionsandactionsofthecharactersonlymakingsensebasedontheirstatusandrelationshipswithothercharacters.

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E–EXPERIENTIAL• Explainhowtheuseofmaskinyourassessmentperformancemeantyoudidnot

havetospendtoomuchtimeintroducingcharacters–whywasthisthecase?………………………………………………………………………………………………………………..………………………………………………………………………………………………………………..………………………………………………………………………………………………………………..………………………………………………………………………………………………………………..………………………………………………………………………………………………………………..………………………………………………………………………………………………………………..………………………………………………………………………………………………………………..………………………………………………………………………………………………………………..………………………………………………………………………………………………………………..………………………………………………………………………………………………………………..

L–LINK• Linktothereasonmasksareessentialtosuccessfulperformances,howtheyhelp

createphysicalcommunicationofcharacterandhowanactorcanusethemtomakethecompleterepresentationofacharacter(wewillbelinkingtotheideaofneutralmasksinthefinalbodyparagraph).

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PARAGRAPH3–SentenceStarters(NeutralMasks)UsethesentencestarterstodevelopacompleteTEEELParagraphPerforminginthestyleofCommediadell’Arteemphasisestheimportanceofanactor’s

physicalityandtheuseofneutralmasks…………………………………………………………………………….

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Forexample,anactorcoulduseaneutralmaskinrehearsalforaplayinorderto……………..

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Thephysicalitydevelopedwhilstwearingtheneutralmaskwillbenefittheactorintheir

finalperformancebecause………………………………………………………………………………………………….

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Whiletheactormaynotusethemaskintheactualperformance,theuseofneutralmasks

inrehearsalfurtherproves………………………………………………………………………………………………….

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6. WritingaConclusion

Whenwritingyourconclusion,youshouldnotintroduceanynewidea.Thepointoftheconclusionisto:

• Summariseyourmainargumentpoints(componentsinbodyparagraphs)withaquickrecapofeachpoint

• Proveyourthesisstatementcorrectandovercomemajorcounterarguments• Provideadirectanswertothequestion

YoucanusetheacronymSTAasaguidetowritingyourconclusion.Planyourconclusionhere:S–Summarisemainpoints

Throughouttheatrehistorymaskshavecontributedtothesuccessofperformers.In

GreekTheatremasksareusedto……………………………………………………………………………….

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andinCommediadell’Artemasksallowfor……………………………………………………………….

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Anactordoesnotneedtousemasksinperformancesinorderforthemtomake

themamoreeffectiveperformerwhichisevidentthroughtheuseofneutralmasks

in……………………………………………………………………………….………………………………………….

T–RestateThesisasbeingprovenTheexplorationofthesepointsprovethefactthat………………………………………………..

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A–AnswerquestiondirectlyThesuccessofperformersbenefitsfromtheuseofmaskwhichhasenabledsuch

effectiveincorporationintotheatricalstylessuchas……………………………………………..

……………………………………………………………………………….…………………………………………….

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7. SubmittingYourEssay

Nowthatyouhavecompletedyouressay,whetherusingthesupportactivitiesornot,youneedtosubmitthefinalassessmentcopy.Youmustsubmityouressayastypedworddocument:DONOTsubmitthisbookletasyourassessment.DONOTsubmittheextendedresponsescaffold.Itisokaytohaveusedthesetodevelopyouressay,buttheycannotbesubmittedformaking.Youwillsubmitacleantypeddocumentwithsize12font.Youmusthandahardcopyofyouressaytoyourteacherinclassontheduedate.Makesureyouhaveprinteditout.Youcanprintatthelibraryinthemorningbeforeclass.