tuesday, january 28

TUESDAY, JANUARY 28 Begin working on your Bell Work for today Pick up both papers by the door

Take out: Two papers to take notes.

After today this won’t be you!

REVIEW Thesis Order of paragraphs How to insert quotes

BACK TO BASICS

FOLLOW THE

OUTLINE!

EXAMPLE PROMPT:Write a four paragraph essay describing your

two favorite foods.

(We are only going to put the sentences in order.)

MY FAVORITE FOODS ARE… Pizza Ice Cream

THESISMy top two favorite foods are pizza and ice

cream.

ORDER OF BODY PARAGRAPHS Depends on the thesis! My top two favorite foods are pizza and ice

cream.

1. Pizza2. Ice Cream

ORDER OF SENTENCES IN A PARAGRAPH

ORDER OF SENTENCES IN A PARAGRAPHTopic Sentence Concrete Detail Commentary Commentary Conclusion

TOPIC SENTENCES

TOPIC SENTENCE Your topic sentence must include the first

topic of your thesis.

My top two favorite foods are pizza and ice cream.

TOPIC SENTENCE One of my favorite foods is pizza.

Why? My top two favorite foods are pizza and ice

cream. Pizza is the first food listed in the thesis.

PARAGRAPH #1: PIZZA Topic Sentence about Pizza Concrete Detail about Pizza Commentary about Pizza Commentary about Pizza Conclusion about Pizza

TOPIC SENTENCE BODY PARAGRAPH #2 Another one of my favorite foods is ice

cream.

Why? My top two favorite foods are pizza and ice

cream. Ice cream is the second food listed.

PARAGRAPH #2: ICE CREAM Topic Sentence about Ice Cream Concrete Detail about Ice Cream Commentary about Ice Cream Commentary about Ice Cream Conclusion about Ice Cream

ORDER OF SENTENCES IN A PARAGRAPH Topic SentenceConcrete Detail Commentary Commentary Conclusion

CONCRETE DETAIL AKA

Facts Support Text Support

CONCRETE DETAIL Quotes Paraphrasing

EXAMPLEYou are reading an article about a court case

written by a reporter named Larry Johnson. He is talking about why the lawyer, John Smith,

thinks that the man is guilty of his crime.

Author: Larry JohnsonLawyer: John Smith

CONCRETE DETAIL WITH QUOTES Never simply drop a quote into a paragraph:

“The man is guilty due to the fact that the police found the knife in his car” (Johnson).

USE TRANSITIONS! WRITE THESE IN YOUR OUTLINE. Person you are quoting name + Verb

John Smith suggests… John Smith argues… John Smith compares… John Smith demonstrates… John Smith points out that…

INCLUDE A TRANSITION John Smith argues that “the man is guilty due

to the fact that the police found the knife in his car” (Johnson).

TELL US WHO YOU ARE QUOTING… Why are they important? Are they qualified?

This tells us why we should listen to them Fill in the blank:

John Smith, _____________, suggests that…

YES!!John Smith, the lawyer in the case, argues that “the man is guilty due to the fact that the police found the knife in his car” (Johnson).

PARAPHRASING Definition:

Restate what the author says in your own words. No quotation marks are necessary

You must still cite the source

TRY IT! Quote:John Smith, the lawyer in the case, argues that “the man is guilty due to the fact that the police found the knife in his car” (Johnson).

EXAMPLE: Quote:John Smith, the lawyer in the case, argues that “the man is guilty due to the fact that the police found the knife in his car” (Johnson).

Paraphrase:The lawyer in this case claims that this man is guilty (Johnson).

NO… Do not put the person who is talking in the

quotes:

John Smith, the lawyer in the case, argues that “the man is guilty due to the fact that the police found the knife in his car” (Smith).

IN TEXT CITATIONS In-Text Citations tell the reader where you got

the information. It gives the author credit!

If you came up with a good idea, wouldn’t you want people to know it was yours?

IN-TEXT CITATIONS WITH QUOTES1. Find the author’s last name

Johnson2. Put the last name in parentheses

(Johnson)3. Put it behind the quote

“this is an example quote” (Johnson)4. Put the period after the parentheses

“this is an example quote” (Johnson).

WHAT’S WRONG WITH THESE QUOTES?• “this is an example quote.” (Johnson)

Why? Period is in the wrong place

“this is an example quote (Johnson).” Why? Quotation mark is in the wrong place

IN-TEXT CITATIONS FOR PARAPHRASING1. Find the author’s last name

Johnson

2. Put the last name in parentheses(Johnson)

3. Put the period after the parenthesesThis is an example paraphrase (Johnson).

WHAT’S WRONG WITH THESE PARAPHRASES?“This is an example paraphrase” (Johnson).

Why? You don’t use quotes unless it’s the exact words from a

text.

This is an example paraphrase. Why? You must still cite the source

ORDER OF SENTENCES IN A PARAGRAPH Topic Sentence Concrete DetailCommentaryCommentary Conclusion

COMMENTARY Your own opinion on the concrete detail.

Don’t use I/Me/We/Our

EXAMPLE: John Smith, the lawyer in the case, argues

that “the man is guilty due to the fact that the police found the knife in his car” (Johnson).

Example commentary: There is no other reason that man should

have had a knife in his car. If he did have a reason about why the knife

was in his car, he should have explained it to the jury.

PRACTICE Look at your outline.

PRACTICECreate an argument for or against allowing cell phones on flights. Explain how it would impact

the experience of the flyer. Include textual support.

THESIS Cell phones should be allowed on flights

because (opinion on why it would be better) and (second opinion on why it would be better).

Cell phones should not be allowed on flights because (opinion on why it would be worse) and (second opinion on why it would be worse).