Assignment 29Draft 1 Audience feedbackTom Glasgow

Criticism 1 This shot here when shown to our target

audience there have been several complaints that this shot is not clear when introducing the characters but sets the scene well.

Criticism 2 There is a problem with this shot here as

the framing is poor and you cannot show our whole body.

Criticism 3 There is another criticism this shot here

is not really clear that this is the antagonists point of view also the dialogue from joey you cannot here due to the distance that the camera is away from him and a few sound errors caused by the wind.

Criticism 4 This part is all filmed in one shot, there's

no shot variation. Also framing again is an issue which occurs through out this draft.

Criticism 5 This shot here there is no use of a tripod

so therefore the shot is shakey and the quality is reduced.

Criticism 6 Again framing is poor here and quality is

poor this can only be improved by re-shooting this shot again

Criticism 7 This shot here again is poor quality and

there is a huge continuity error where the point of view shot jumps forward while walking.