Attention to Detail

L.O. – To be able to involve a reader by using a lot of imaginative detail.

Nightmares and dreams

• Draw a visual representation of a nightmare or dream you have had.

‘The Nightmare’ by Henry Fuseli

Level 3 Level 4 Level 5 Level 6

Use some adjectives to add interest

Try to entertain your reader and use the same narrator throughout

Use at least three Gothic features

Write clear, simple sentences, begun with capital letters and ended with full stops

Use adverbs and adjectives to add detail

Establish a clear viewpoint (e.g. a narrator) and sense of purpose in your story

Use Gothic features

Control sentences

Develop details using similes or metaphors

Maintain a viewpoint and clear sense of purpose throughout the writing

Use unusual ways of interesting the reader

Maintain a Gothic ‘flavour’

Vary sentences for effect

Use some original and very engaging ideas

Express and explain opinions, attitudes or feelings in detail

Adopt an original viewpoint

‘Grip’ the reader

Vary the Gothic form to be original

Use varied and complex sentences, sometimes starting with subordinate clauses

Level 5Develop details using similes or metaphors

Maintain a viewpoint and clear sense of purpose throughout the writing

Use unusual ways of interesting the reader

Maintain a Gothic ‘flavour’

Vary sentences for effect

Student 1 – Level 5

As I entered the room the moon came out from behind the clouds and flooded the room with a pale, white light. Sarah was lying on the table. She was stretched out, wearing a long, white robe. My heart thumped because she looked dead. Her head was hanging over the edge of the table and one arm was dangling down to the floor.

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Student 2

I knew I was too late. In the moonlight coming from the open window, Jane was draped over the bed in the centre of the room. Robed in a beautiful white gown, her head and arm hung peacefully over the table’s edge, but blood had soaked into her outer robe. Her face and neck had a corpse-like paleness. On her body sat a mean and triumphant demon, his grinning shadow printed grimly on the red curtains behind.