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Morgan Adair

ENGL 106

Cover Letter

4-3-12

For assignment number five, I revised two of my previously completed assignments. The

first assignment I revised was assignment two, a movie critique on a documentary called Grizzly

Man. One of the more minor improvements that I made to this movie critique was that I added a

header with page numbers and my last name to the top of each page. I added this header because

it was a requirement that I failed to meet on this assignment and also because page numbers take

away the problem of the paper somehow getting out of order. The second improvement that I

made to this critique was that I fixed a lot of minor grammatical errors. I had underlined Jungle

Book and Grizzly Man (both movie titles) in my original critique, but when I revised it, I

changed the underlining to italics. I also added some commas where they were needed, added

semi-colons around “one of which was Mr. Chocolate” on page number three, and I also added

hyphens to “future-oriented” on page three and to “bear-like” on page four. I also reworded

some phrases throughout this critique to make it easier for the reader to understand what I was

trying to say. Along with the minor grammatical corrections, I edited this critique to give it a

more formal, academic tone because at times it seemed like I was having a conversation with the

reader. I had used the word “well” as an introductory word to sentences a few times, and I

removed this because this was very informal. I also fixed a few contractions I had formed. By

giving my critique a more academic tone, I believe that it will be taken more seriously by the

reader. At the top of page five where I am talking about the fact that the bears began to assume

that all humans were safe, I mentioned the interviewee in the documentary that had said this.

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The final correction that I made to this assignment was on my Works Cited page. I originally

titled it “References”, so I changed the title to “Works Cited”, as it should be. I also did not have

my sources in alphabetical order, so I rearranged them so that they would meet this requirement

as a correctly organized Works Cited page.

The second assignment that I corrected was assignment number three, the photo essay.

The only correction that I made to the actual photo essay was that I added a picture to the

introduction and conclusion pages. I added a photo to each of these pages because these were

the only two pages in the photo essay that did not have some sort of photo, and lacking a photo

made them less exciting and seem out of place when compared to the other pages. Since the

introduction and conclusion page consisted of more writing than the other pages, I decided to set

the added picture as the background layer so that the writing could overlay the picture. For the

introduction page, the picture that I chose was a stack of books. I chose a stack of books because

I thought this would be a general way to start the essay but still shed light on the studying aspect.

I chose a person falling asleep as the picture for the conclusion page. I thought this would be a

funny, yet fitting way to conclude this essay. It reinforces the fact that ever since I have been at

Purdue, I study a lot more, and the amount of studying that I do can be very tiring. As far as the

rationale paper for the photo essay goes, I just made a few grammatical corrections such as

adding hyphens and commas, and I added a header with page numbers and my last name to the

top of each page. My movie critique required much more revision than my photo essay, but with

the revisions that I made, I believe that both of these documents are now much more

professional.