Lesson 29b Remove Irrelevant DetailsLesson 29b Remove Irrelevant Details

Today we will eliminate unimportant sentences from paragraphs to improve their unity.

Irrelevant detail = an unimportant fact that does not support the main idea of a paragraph and should therefore be taken out.

Which sentence in this paragraph does not support the main idea?

My neighbor Wanda is the craziest My neighbor Wanda is the craziest lady in town. She only comes out at lady in town. She only comes out at night to look in people’s windows. night to look in people’s windows. Newspapers from decades ago fill her Newspapers from decades ago fill her living room to the ceiling. Loud singing living room to the ceiling. Loud singing noises can be heard from her house noises can be heard from her house every morning. My other neighbor Jake every morning. My other neighbor Jake thinks she’s weird. A very strange smell thinks she’s weird. A very strange smell is coming out of her garage. Little kids is coming out of her garage. Little kids fear her.fear her.

Which sentence in this paragraph does not support the main idea?

My neighbor Wanda is the craziest My neighbor Wanda is the craziest lady in town. She only comes out at lady in town. She only comes out at night to look in people’s windows. night to look in people’s windows. Newspapers from decades ago fill her Newspapers from decades ago fill her living room to the ceiling. Loud singing living room to the ceiling. Loud singing noises can be heard from her house noises can be heard from her house every morning. every morning. My other neighbor Jake thinks she’s weird. A very strange smell A very strange smell is coming out of her garage. Little kids is coming out of her garage. Little kids fear her.fear her.

Which sentence in this paragraph does not support the main idea?

Disneyland is the greatest theme park in Southern California. Their rides range from thrilling to relaxing, so there is something for everybody, no matter their age. Restaurants of all kinds can be found to accommodate every taste. My cousin prefers Magic Mountain. Each and every “land” has its own theme and feel to it. A day spent at Disneyland is a good day!

Which sentence in this paragraph does not support the main idea?

Disneyland is the greatest theme park in Southern California. Their rides range from thrilling to relaxing, so there is something for everybody, no matter their age. Restaurants of all kinds can be found to accommodate every taste. My cousin prefers Magic Mountain. Each and every “land” has its own theme and feel to it. A day spent at Disneyland is a good day!

Which sentence in this paragraph does not support the main idea?

Cats make better pets than dogs. Not only are cats quieter and less messy, but they also require far less maintenance. While dogs need constant attention and upkeep, cats, on the other hand, are independent and can take care of themselves. Russian Fighting Hamsters also make good pets. Both cats and dogs have their pros and cons, but the cat comes out on top for easiest pet care ever.

Which sentence in this paragraph does not support the main idea?

Cats make better pets than dogs. Not only are cats quieter and less messy, but they also require far less maintenance. While dogs need constant attention and upkeep, cats, on the other hand, are independent and can take care of themselves. Russian Fighting Hamsters also make good pets. Both cats and dogs have their pros and cons, but the cat comes out on top for easiest pet care ever.

Which sentence in this paragraph does not support the main idea?

The L.A. Lakers are the greatest team in the The L.A. Lakers are the greatest team in the NBA. They have won so many national NBA. They have won so many national championship titles it is almost impossible to championship titles it is almost impossible to count. The Lakers stand for determination, count. The Lakers stand for determination, integrity, and sportsmanship. These men are integrity, and sportsmanship. These men are willing to give 100% of themselves to their team willing to give 100% of themselves to their team and work together to achieve a common goal. and work together to achieve a common goal. My dad likes the Lakers but he also likes the My dad likes the Lakers but he also likes the Bulls. Just look to the Lakers for the most Bulls. Just look to the Lakers for the most outstanding team in the entire NBA.outstanding team in the entire NBA.

Which sentence in this paragraph does not support the main idea?

The L.A. Lakers are the greatest team in the The L.A. Lakers are the greatest team in the NBA. They have won so many national NBA. They have won so many national championship titles it is almost impossible to championship titles it is almost impossible to count. The Lakers stand for determination, count. The Lakers stand for determination, integrity, and sportsmanship. These men are integrity, and sportsmanship. These men are willing to give 100% of themselves to their team willing to give 100% of themselves to their team and work together to achieve a common goal. and work together to achieve a common goal. My dad likes the Lakers but he also likes the Bulls. Just look to the Lakers for the most Just look to the Lakers for the most outstanding team in the entire NBA.outstanding team in the entire NBA.

ClassworkWrite a 5-sentence paragraph about any sports team. (Make it up if necessary.) Start with a main idea, then add RELEVANT supporting details.

Gathering Gathering CD’s and and CM's

How to make a “chunk”How to make a “chunk”

One chunk =1:2

One concrete detail

2 commentaries

Prompt: Prompt: write a 1-chunk paragraph about your write a 1-chunk paragraph about your favorite sports team.favorite sports team.

GATHERING CD’s (Facts)GATHERING CD’s (Facts)

Think of 3 or more CD’s that would fit the Think of 3 or more CD’s that would fit the

prompt. prompt. Each must have an ACTION Each must have an ACTION VERB!!!!!!!!!VERB!!!!!!!!!**

**

**(Write facts in RED!)

Prompt: Prompt: write a 1-chunk paragraph about your favorite write a 1-chunk paragraph about your favorite sports team.sports team.

GATHERING CM’S (opinions about your CD)

Now brainstorm 5 or more CM’s for the CD you circled above.

•_Your team_ is ___adjective___ .

• They are ___noun_____.

• They are ____adjective____.

• They are ____adjective____.

(Write opinions in GREEN!)

SELECTING CM’S (opinions about your CD)

Now pick the biggest, most important one below and label it TS in BLUE. The Utah Jazz are horrible every year.

• They are nobodies.

• They lose miserably.

• They cannot get it together.

• They have no skill.

Now circle the best 2

The Utah Jazz are horrible every year.

They are nobodies.

They lose miserably.

They cannot get it together.

They have no skill.

Label this one CM1

Label that one CM2

Which one is left that will make a good Which one is left that will make a good concluding, summing-up sentence?concluding, summing-up sentence?

The Utah Jazz are horrible every year.

They are nobodies.

They lose miserably.

They cannot get it together.

They have no skill.

Topic sentence

Concluding sentence

Concrete detail

commentary

commentary

ClassworkWrite a 5-sentence paragraph about a theme park. (Make it up if necessary.) Start with a main idea, then add RELEVANT supporting details.

Tonight’s Homework

Write a 5-sentence paragraph about a neighbor. (Make it up if necessary.) Start with a main idea, then add RELEVANT supporting details.