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OUTLINING

What?

Plan for your essay

Why?

Help you cover everything

Helps you focus and organize the main points and delete unimportant ones.

Helps you revise and make your essay better. - easier to change an outline than an entire essay.

You can practice with grammar and vocab.

How??a. Big things first – main ideas, medium ideas, small ideas - https://www.youtube.com/watch?

v=OKYPMTyZXFk - :47 SECONDS

3 min. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_oAN_q6AZz8

b. Use your thesis statement and Brainstormingc. For each paragraph, find two main points.d. For each main point, find two supporting points

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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_oAN_q6AZz8

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OKYPMTyZXFk

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OKYPMTyZXFk

ESSAY TOPIC MOBILE PHONES

BODY 1 TOPIC (advantages)

A. (1st main advantage) _____________________________________

1. (example/explain/fact/experience) _______________________________________________

2. (example/explain/fact) _________________________________________________________

3. (result) ______________________________________________________________

B. (2nd main advantage) _______________________________________.

1. (example/explain/fact/experience) ________________________________________________

2. (explain, etc.) ________________________________________________

3. (result) _____________________________________________________

BODY 2 TOPIC (disadvantages)

A. (1st main disadvantage) __________________________________________________

1. (example + fact, etc.) _____________________________________________

2. (example + fact, etc.) ________________________________________________

3. (result) ________________________________________________

B. (2nd main disadvantage) ________________________________________________

1. (example/experience, etc.) ________________________________________________

2. (explain) If ________________________________________________________

3. (result) Therefore, _________________________________________________

Check your BODY OUTLINE (PLAN) Don’t repeat ideas Reason 1 is separate from

reason #2 Reason 1 is about equal in importance to

Reason #2

ideas are complete and well connected Each part is complete

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FP Level 3 Writing – Week 3 - Writing Project Week 2 – PLANNING AND DRAFTINGDEVELOPING THE BODYStep 1 - IDEAS – Now, you should be able to do Step 1 very quicklyTV – Children should watch as much as they want. Do you agree or disagree?TV GOOD TV Bad!

Step 2 – ORGANIZING – Listen to the essay and complete the outline

BODY 1 – TV IS BAD!!

(TS) On one hand, ______________________________________________________________

(SS)

C. (reason 1) Bad for ____________________________________________________.

1. (explain + fact ) __________________________________________________.

2. (explain) __________________________________________________..

3. (result) overweight - health problems. behaviour

D. (reason 2) Gives _________________________________________________________.

1. (example) _________________________behaviour

2. (explain) They should get ideas from their __________________, not ______.

3. (result) if they _____________________________________________________

CS: __________________________________________________________________________

BODY 2 – TV is Good 4

(TS) On the other hand, __________________________________________________________

(SS)

C. (reason 2) ______________________________________________________________

1. (example + fact ) _____________________________________________

2. (explain) ss teaches __________________________and spelling

3. (result) kids who watch Sesame St. do better in _________________________.

D. (reason 2) Kids who watch TV are ____________________________________________

1. (example) some boys are ___________________________________________

2. (explain) If ________________________________________________________

3. (result) Therefore, _________________________________________________

CS: So, TV is not all bad. There are some ____________________________________ aspects, too.

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Mobile s

benefits

brings people togetherpeople can talk from anywhere in the worldpeople working abroad can talk to families at homemakes the world smaller

help people in emergenciestourists stuck in the desertcall police after car accidentsvery useful in a dangerous situation

problems with mobilesvery noisy for others in public places movie theatersrestaurantshospitals, mosquesstressful to others

negative affect on personal lifewasting time on internetdistract from important thingshurt family and personal relationships

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benefits

brings people together

people can talk from anywhere in the world

people working abroad can talk to families at home

makes the world smaller

help people in emergencies

tourists stuck in the desert

call police after car accidents

very useful in a dangerous situation

problems with mobiles

very noisy in public places

movie theaters, restaurants

hospitals, mosques

stressful to others

negative affect on personal life

wasting time on internet

distract from important things

hurt family and personal relationships

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Body paragraph 1 f) Another benefit is that mobile phones can help people in dangerous situations. g) The most important one is that they help to bring people together more. h) On one hand, there are many benefits to using mobile phones. i) As a result, mobile phones have made the world a smaller place. j) For instance, people can talk to each other wherever they are in the world. k) For example, if tourists have car problems in the desert, they can use their mobile phones to call for assistance, so mobile phones are very useful.l)

An example is that people who work abroad can still talk to their families back home any time they like.

Body paragraph 2m) For instance, a pop tune can be annoying when it is very loud and coming from someone’s mobile phone next to you. n) Because of this, movie theatres ask their customers to turn off their phones. o) As a result, many people have been disturbed by a loud mobile phone. p) The main problem is that they are very noisy in public places, such as in restaurants or movie theatres. q) Another problem with mobile phones is that some people do not show respect when they are in a private building, such as a hospital or mosque. r) Consequently, mobile phones cause more stress in society.s) On the other hand, mobile phones can cause problems.

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Step 2 – PLANNINGCompelte the outline as I read the essay

BODY 1 – TV IS BAD!!E. health.

1. (explain + fact ) spend several hours just sitting in front of the television.

2. (explain) less time for doing sports, friends.

3. (result) overweight - health problems. behaviour

F. Gives unreal picture of society.

1. (example) be violent, bad behaviour

2. (explain) They should get ideas from their families, not the TV.

3. (result) if they watch the wrong programs, they may copy bad behaviour

OUTLINE FOR BODY 1 IS 69 WORDSHas two clear partsEach part has main idea + facts + examples + explanation + result (conclusion)Final – body 1

On one hand, watching too much television can be bad for children. The most important reason is that television can have a negative effect on children’s health. This is because nowadays most kids watch TV for at least an hour a day and many spend several hours just sitting in front of the television. Because of this, they have less time for doing sports or just playing outside with their friends. As a result, more children are overweight and this can lead to more serious health problems as they grow up. Another reason is that television shows children an unreal picture of society. For example, television programs may be violent or show behaviour that is not acceptable in real life. This is a problem because children now spend less time communicating with their families. Therefore, they learn more about society from television programs, so if they watch the wrong programs, they may copy bad behaviour. I think the bad effects can be very serious if we are not careful

Body 1 is 150 words

E. Learn about world.

1. (example + fact ) Sesame Street – math and spelling.

2. (explain) ss teaches math and spelling

3. (result) kids who watch SS do better in school.

F. Kids who watch TV are more quiet.

1. (example) some boys are noisy and active

2. (explain) If they sit and watch TV, they calm down.

3. (result) less stressful for parents, better family life

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Outline for Body 2 is 67 words

Body Paragraph 2On the other hand, watching television may be beneficial. The main benefit is that children can

learn a lot about the world by watching educational television programs. For example, the American

television program Sesame Street teaches children how to spell and do simple maths. Consequently,

children who watch Sesame Street for a few hours each day may do better at school. In addition,

children who are watching television are usually quiet and well behaved. For instance, many small boys

can be noisy and very active. However, when they watch television, they sit quietly in one place. This is

good because parents now have less time to spend looking after their children, so allowing children to

watch television is a useful way for parents to manage the stress of family life. If the parents are less

stressed, that is good for the children. CS: So, TV is not all bad. There are some positive aspects, too.

Body 2 is 142 wordsevel Three Writing – Sp 2015 (mhl)

BODY PARAGRAPHS

Organizing and Writing Sentences

Topic Sentences Reason Sentences

Type of Essay “2-sided opinion” (advantages and disadvantages)

Example:

Before writing the body paragraphs, the student went through the steps:

Step 1-2: Brainstorm IDEAS (for Intro and BODIES):

Topic #1 (from an exam): More and more women are entering the workplace, but some people do nto agree with this idea. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Discuss both sides

Notes for Introduction (why important / my opinion)

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Important - because culture is changing quickly.

My opinion – I mostly agree, but I can see the other side.

Advantages of Women in the Workplace

Can help family and husband buy things they need

Can use her education More balanced society

Disadvantages of Women in the workplace

Need to save traditions Time away from family She will be too tired from work to be with

her family

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TOPIC – pros and cons of living in the hostel

BODY 1 TOPIC (advantages) –

(TS) On one hand , There are some advantages to living in the hostel

A. (advantage 1) ___________________________________________________________________

1. (explain + fact, etc.) ___________________________________________________

2. (explain) ____________________________________________________________

3. (result) ______________________________________________________________

B. (advantage 2) ___________________________________________________________________

1. (example, explain, etc.) ________________________________________________

2. (explain) ________________________________________________

3. (result) if _____________________________________________________

CS (optional): __________________________________________________________________________

BODY 2 TOPIC (advantages / disadvantages)

(TS) On the other hand, There are some disadvantages to women in the workplace

A. (disadvantage 1) ______________________________________________________________

1. (example + fact, etc.) _____________________________________________

2. (explain) ________________________________________________

3. (result) ________________________________________________

B. (disadvantage 2) ________________________________________________

a. (example) ________________________________________________

b. (explain) If ________________________________________________________

c. (result) Therefore, _________________________________________________

CS (optional): So, ____________________________________________________________________.

Check your BODY OUTLINE (PLAN)o Don’t repeat ideaso Reason 1 is separate from reason #2

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o Reason 1 is about equal in importance to Reason #2o ideas are complete and well connected o Each part is complete

Brick 1 – “Big THINSG FIRST

body topics first

(TS) On one hand , there are some advantages to women in the workplace

C. (reason 1) ___________________________________________________________________

1. (explain + fact, etc.) ___________________________________________________

2. (explain) ____________________________________________________________

3. (result) ______________________________________________________________

D. (reason 2) ___________________________________________________________________


2. (explain) ________________________________________________

3. (result) if _____________________________________________________

CS: __________________________________________________________________________


(TS) On the other hand, there are some disadvantages to this idea

(reason 2) ______________________________________________________________

d. (example + fact, etc.) _____________________________________________

e. (explain) ________________________________________________

f. (result) ________________________________________________

C. (reason 2) ________________________________________________

a. (example) ________________________________________________

b. (explain) If ________________________________________________________


CS: So, ____________________________________________________________________.

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Brick 2 –2 separate reasons for each body


E. (reason 1) Women can help their familes

1. (explain + fact, etc.) ___________________________________________________

2. (explain) ____________________________________________________________

3. (result) ______________________________________________________________

F. (reason 2) women can use their education to help their socieies


2. (explain) ________________________________________________

3. (result) if _____________________________________________________

CS: __________________________________________________________________________



(reason 1) time away from families


e. (explain) ________________________________________________

f. (result) ________________________________________________

D. (reason 2) lose culture and traditions

a. (example) ________________________________________________

b. (explain) If ________________________________________________________


CS: So, ____________________________________________________________________.

Brick 3 –for each reason – examples and explanations


G. (reason 1) Women can help their familes

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1. (explain + fact, etc.) things are very expensive these days

2. (explain) if only men are working, it is difficult to support a large family.

3. (result) if women are working the will earn salries.

H. (reason 2) women can use their education to help their socieies


2. (explain) ________________________________________________

3. (result) if _____________________________________________________

CS: __________________________________________________________________________



(reason 1) time away from families


e. (explain) ________________________________________________

f. (result) ________________________________________________

E. (reason 2) lose culture and traditions

a. (example) ________________________________________________

b. (explain) If ________________________________________________________


CS: So, ____________________________________________________________________.

Check your BODY OUTLINE (PLAN)o Don’t repeat ideaso Reason 1 is separate from reason #2o Reason 1 is about equal in importance to Reason #2o ideas are complete and well connected o Each part is complete

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Name: ________________________________ ID: _____________________ Secti

Topic (from an exam): Engish at University, or switch to Arabic?

To what extent do you agree or disagree? Discuss both sides

Notes for Introduction (why important / my opinion)

Important - because many students are affected.

My opinion – I mostly agree, but I can see the other side.

Advantages of English

International language Media Travel Understand the world news Understand the views of other countries

Disadvantages of English

Expensive Must hire teachers Very difficutl for students Takes many years to learn Some students will not be able to go to

university Arabic is easier for students Some subjects do not ned Arabic Arabic will be lost Arabic culture is better than English

Step 2: ORGANIZE ideas into TWO MAIN TOPICS (Body 1 + Body 2)

Body 1Advantages of English

Body 2 Disadvantages of English

International languageMediaTravel

Reason #1 (for BP1):

Educational reasons



DistractingStudents use other programs - -make noises

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More fun.beautiful with good colors and designs – young people are attracted.


Require constant attention – charging – technical knowledge, not all students use them

Step 3: WRITE DRAFT 1 - INTRODUCTION

INTRODUCTION #1:

Can you imagine a life without books? I can! These days, everyone uses books on internet. However,

some people think that paper books are better than e-books. I __________________ with them. In this

essay, I will give two reasons why I think that _____________ are better than _______________ books.

A. INDEPENDENT PRACTICE: Write Topic Sentences for BODY PARAGRAPHS. Use different styles.

Topic : Some people feel that women should not be in the military. Others disagree. To what extent do you agree?

Practice

Write Topic setnces for the fo

Reason sentences practice

For each BODY Paragraph, you will need to give two or more reasons

B. GUIDED PRACTICE: Below are several different styles for Body 1 reason sentences (more convenient). Directions:

1. Underline the clauses in the topic sentence below. (a clause is a group of words with a subject +

verb)2. Write similar sentences for Reason 2 (can help their country)

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Style 1 - example: (Reason 1) Firstly, Women in the workplace can help their own careers.

(Reason 2 – help their families) Secondly, Women in the workplace can help their familes.

Style 2: (Reason 1) The first major reason is working women get job opportunities.

(Reason 2 – support their families _______________________________________

______________________________________________________________

Style 3: (Reason 1) The first reason for this opinion is working women have can help their careers.

(Reason 2 – encourage more balance in society) ___________________________________________________________________

______________________________________________________________

Style 4: (Reason 1) (more convenient) The first advantage of eBooks is they are more convenient

(Reason 2 – more fun) ____________________________________________________

______________________________________________________________

Can you think of another style?

(Reason 2) ____________________________________________________

______________________________________________________________

(Body 2 TS) ____________________________________________________

______________________________________________________________

1. Thesis: There are some disavantages to letting Children watch a lot of TV..

Reason #1: ___________________ Reason #2: ____________________

Reason #1 Sentence:

___________________________________________________________________________

____________________________________________________________________________Reason #2 Sentence: ___________________________________________________________________________

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____________________________________________________________________________

2. Body topic: There are advantages to not eating meat..

Reason #1: more affordable Reason #2: healthier

Reason #1 Sentence:

___________________________________________________________________________

____________________________________________________________________________Reason #2 Sentence: ___________________________________________________________________________

____________________________________________________________________________

3. Body topic:: __________________ ___ advantages to _______________________.Reason #1: __________________ Reason #2: ________________________

BP1 Topic Sentence:

___________________________________________________________________________

____________________________________________________________________________

BP2 Topic Sentence: ___________________________________________________________________________

____________________________________________________________________________

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Example of Outline –MOBILE PHONES (2-sided) Introduction

General Background (SHOW that the topic is interesting and Important!!): Technology is very important

(Support for General Background):

_______________________________________________

_______________________________________________

_______________________________________________

Explain the Exact Topic (Use the exam prompt and give both sides):

_______________________________________________

_______________________________________________

Thesis (Your opinion + how many BPs):

There are many reasons why I believe that phones are important,

in this essay…..

Body Paragraph 1

TS - Main reason (one hand): or (+ Main reason)

or

Reason _________________________________________

SS - Supporting ideas:

contact with people

________________________________________

________________________________________

CS – Result/Paraphrase of the Main reason: ________________________________________________

Body Paragraph 2

TS - Main reason (other hand): or (+ Main reason)

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or

Reason _________________________________________


_______________________________________________________________________

_______________________________________________________________________

CS – Result/Paraphrase of the Main reason: ________________________________________________

Conclusion

Paraphrase the thesis statement:_______________________________________________________________________

Main ideas from the bodies:

_______________________________________________________________________

_______________________________________________________________________

Suggestion, Advice, or Prediction:

_______________________________________________________________________

Example Answer

TOPIC:

Example of Outline – (2-sided)Introduction

1-General Background (SHOW that the topic is interesting and Important!!):

Technology is very important

(Support for General Background) – more specific:

Need technology for business and communication, etc.

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Mobile phones are the most common form of technology seen anywhere in the world. Many people think they are a good thing, and some believe they are a bad

thing. What is your opinion of them?

Mobiles are most common technology in the world.

2- Explain the Exact Topic (Use the exam prompt and give both sides):

Many people think mobiles are a good thing, and some believe they are a bad thing.

3- Thesis (Your opinion + how many BPs):

I believe that phones are important, but there are some disadvantages also

in this essay I will look at two sides of this issue, and give my opinion.

Body Paragraph 1

1-TS - Main reason (one hand): or (+ Main reason)

BENEFICIAL because help us communicate

2-SS - Supporting ideas:

contact with people – family and friends, esp. if they are in other countries.

emergenices – at school or out on the road

news - internet

3- CS – Result/Paraphrase of the Main reason: stay connected

Body Paragraph 2

TS - Main reason (other hand): or (+ Main reason)

-- mobiles can be a nuisance


Noisy in public places - Public transport, cinemas, restaurants Waste time – people get additted Distracting for drivers – may cause accidents

CS – Result/Paraphrase of the Main reason: can create some problems for society and individuals

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Conclusion

Paraphrase the thesis statement: Mobiles are good, but there are some harmful effects

Main ideas from the bodies:

Help make the world a smaller place Can be distracting and bothersome

Suggestion, Advice, or Prediction:

Should keep using them, but be careful

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