16 October, 2011

Human Resources Department ABC Company Limited Address 1 Address 2 Address 3 Application for the post of Assistant Manager, Procurement (Ref: XXX)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I was very interested to see your advertisement for an Assistant Manager, Procurement in CTgoodjobs.hk on 14 October, 2011.

As you will see from my CV, I am currently Senior Purchasing Officer to the Purchasing Manager of a jewellery company. I have had 10 years’ experience in the purchasing and customer service field, gaining valuable experience in supplier management, manufacturing and customer service. I thoroughly enjoy my work and am very happy here but that the time has come when my experience in purchasing has prepared me for the responsibility of full supplier management.

I shall be pleased to provide any further information you may need and hope I may be given the opportunity of an interview.

Yours faithfully,

MaryMary Chan

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