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Anticipatory Set: Who do you think a protagonist is in a story?

The Protagonist

The protagonist is whom the story is about. The story is told from the protagonist’s point of view. The major problem in the story belongs to this character. This character must drive the story forward. And, of course, he or she isn’t necessarily the good guy in the story.

The most effective protagonist acts instead of reacts in the story. He or she makes things happen instead of waiting for things to happen to him or her. When he or she reacts, it’s to something out of his or her control. And his or her immediate goal becomes gaining control.

The best protagonist has strength. This attribute can be physical, mental, or moral. This strength is gauged, in part, by the strength of the antagonist and villain in the story.

Often, the protagonist is larger than life. And it’s for this very reason that he or she should have at least one major blemish. By giving the protagonist what’s called a fatal flaw or hamartia, you make him or her likeable and human. The fatal flaw is a physical, mental, moral, or emotional problem that is inside the main character. This flaw is the universal trait that allows the audience to identify with the character’s plight. This flaw can manifest itself in a physical way such as being short or blind or simple minded. The flaw can be moral in nature. For example, it could be the love of money, the addiction to love, blind ambition, or even blind loyalty. The fatal flaw helps the audience to have access to the larger than life hero or heroine on the big screen. The audience identifies with the characters’ weaknesses. The most common fatal flaw among the classical heroes was hubris, the arrogance and conceit that would naturally afflict heroes with great powers and demi-god status.

You want your audience to identify with the protagonist in some way. Here are ways you can get the audience to identify with the protagonist:-Make the protagonist sympathetic- Readers identify with characters they feel sorry for, so make your hero the victim of some undeserved misfortune. We feel sympathy for Harry Potter because he is forced to live under the stairs by his horrific relatives and they treat him disrespectfully.-Put the protagonist in jeopardy- We connect to characters we worry about; have the hero face the loss of something of vital importance.-Make the protagonist likeable- We like people who are kind, loving, and supportive. Other characters in the story like this character also.-Make the protagonist funny -How do you do that? Have them act ridiculous or say ridiculous things or have them do or say the unexpected.-Make the hero powerful- Power is having control over a situation. Audiences like to root for characters who can get the job done. Not only for superheroes, but for anyone who’s very good at what she does.

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Example from Lord of the Flies

Who is the story about? Briefly describe the character.

Ralph is a young boy who is leader of the group of boys on the island until Jack takes over.

What does the protagonist want?

He wants to be saved.

What is getting in the way of the protagonistgetting what he/she wants?

Jack gets in the way when his team of hunters forget to light the signal fire and when he steals the glasses so Ralph cannot make a signal fire.

What does the protagonist do to drive the storyforward?

Ralph gives Jack’s group a speech about the importance of keeping the signal fire going. Ralph goes to get the glasses back from Jack’s tribe.

What is the fatal flaw of the protagonist?

He bullies Piggy.

How can the audience identify with the protagonist?

-Make the protagonist sympathetic-We feel sorry for Ralph when Jack is being a terror with him.-Put the protagonist in jeopardy-We worry about Ralph being saved from the island.-Make the protagonist likeable-We like Ralph because he wants to maintain order on the island.-Make the protagonist funnyThis is not a comedy. Ralph is not funny, but he acts like a kid in the beginning of the story by standing on his head. He is funny when his relationship with Jack mirrors the relationship of a bickering married couple in the beginning of the story.-Make the protagonist powerful- He is powerful because he was chosen to be the leader

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By Yourself

Who is the story about? Briefly describe the character.

What does the protagonist want?

What is getting in the way of the protagonist getting what he/she wants?

What does the protagonist do to drive the story forward?

What is the fatal flaw of the protagonist?

How can the audience identify -Give me one example of when the protagonist is sympathetic.

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with the protagonist?

-Give me one example of when the protagonist is funny.

-Give me one example of when the protagonist is likeable.

-Give me one example of when the protagonist is put at risk of losing something.

-Give me one example of when the protagonist is powerful.

Protagonist Profile HW (Example from Lord of the Flies for Ralph)

All big writers who have published pieces know their protagonist inside and out. They use a profile like this one in order to get to know their character inside and out. When you write your story, you won’t include all of this information. You will pick and choose what you wish to include in your story when you write it.

If you really know who your character is, then you will know what he/she will say and do in your story. Who a person is determines what they say and do.

Brainstorming Technique: If you are stuck in a particular section, use the opposite strategy on a separate sheet of paper. With the opposite strategy, you come up with the opposite of what you want to understand what you do want for your character. For example, I don’t want my protagonist to want to be a magician. I don’t want my protagonist to want a million dollars. Based on what I come up with for what I don’t want my character to want, it can help me decide what I do want my character to want.

1. Name: Ralph 2. Age:12 3. Height: tall

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4. Eye color: 5. Physical appearance: fair hair; “you could see now that he might make a boxer, as far as width and heaviness of shoulders went, but there was a mildness about his mouth and eyes that proclaimed no devil” (5). 6. Hobbies/interests: is happy that there are no grown up in the beginning, is interested in keeping the signal fire going 7. Occupation (Job): leader 8. What he/she wants: he wants to make huts; he wants to have fun; he wants to explore the island; he wants to keep the fire going so that they can get rescued; he wants to be the leader 9. What is getting in the way of him/her getting what he/she wants? Jack’s tribe let the fire go out; Jack wants to be the leader and act like an animal 10. Fatal flaw(What makes this character imperfect, and therefore more human?) : Ralph bullies Piggy 11. What does he/she fear? Ralph fears the “beast”; he fears being a murderer; he fears being killed by the others 12. In what city does he/she live? What is it like? England; “they had lived in a cottage on the edge of the moors” (126). 13. Description of his/her bedroom: NA 14. Special skills/abilities/strengths: listens to others; wants order 15. Family (describe): his father is in the Navy 16. Information about their childhood that effects who they are presently: his father taught him how to swim which is why he can swim now 17. Information about their teenage years that effects who they are presently: NA 18. Favorite bands/songs/types of music: ? 19. Favorite movies/TV shows/books: ? The Boys Book of Trains; The Boys Book of Ships ? (127) 20. Favorite food: likes meat; “when you went to bed there was a bowl of cornflakes with sugar and cream” (127).? 21. Favorite sports/sports teams: ? 22. Pet peeves (what annoys the character): when they boys forget to keep the fire going; Jack 23. Favorite clothing style/outfit: ? 24. Special gestures/movements: ? 25. Speaking style (fast, talkative, monotone): affirming; authoritative 26. Fondest memory: possibly:”and remembering that first enthusiastic exploration as though it were part of a brighter childhood, he smiled jeeringly”(83). Or “even the sounds of nightmare from the other shelters no longer reached him, for he was back to where he came from, feeding the ponies with sugar over the garden wall” (110) 27. Insecurities (what does the character wish he/she could change about himself/herself?): he doubts his leadership skills sometimes 28. Temperament (easygoing, easily angered): assertive 29. Negative traits/qualities: he bullies Piggy 30. Things that upset him/her: Jack; the fire going out; the deaths of Piggy and Simon 31. This character really cares about: he cares about getting rescued and his father ; he cares about remaining the leader; he cares about order on the island 32. Things that make him/her happy: he was happy that there were no adults on the island at first; he is happy he gets to have Piggy as a friend; he is happy being leader; he is

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happy when he eats; he is happy when the fire is going 33. Deepest, darkest secret: ? 34. Other people’s opinion of this character A. What do people like about this character? They like that he used the conch to call them; they like he creates an environment of respect through the use of the conch to speak B. What do they dislike about this character? They dislike that he is not a major hunter although he does hunt; they dislike that he is not as much fun as Jack 35. Dream vacation: not on the island 36. Any pets? ? 37. Best thing that has ever happened to this character: becoming leader in the beginning and being without adults to tell him what to do in the beginning 38. Worst thing that has ever happened to this character: being chased to the death by a group of boys 39. Three words or adjectives to describe this character: strong-willed, brave, wants order 40. If a song played every time this character walked into the room, what song would it be? An upbeat alternative song 41. How will you get the audience to connect to the character?-Make the protagonist sympathetic- We feel sorry for Ralph when Jack is being a terror with him. -Put the protagonist in jeopardy- We worry about Ralph being saved from the island.-Make the protagonist likeable- We like Ralph because he wants to maintain order on the island.-Make the protagonist funny This is not a comedy. Ralph is not funny, but he acts like a kid in the beginning of the story by standing on his head. -Make the protagonist powerful- He is powerful because he was chosen to be the leader42. Overall, how does the character feel about himself/herself? He fights for his survival in the end but he feels he doesn’t have enough power in order to survive; when he was leader he was usually confident in himself 43. What emotional problem will the protagonist overcome in your story? The emotional problem that the protagonist will have to overcome in the story is that he originally feels that people were good but by being on the island he now “wept for the end of innocence, the darkness of man’s heart” (235).

Protagonist Profile HW (By Yourself for Your Story)

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All big writers who have published pieces know their protagonist inside and out. They use a profile like this one in order to get to know their character inside and out. When you write your story, you won’t include all of this information. You will pick and choose what you wish to include in your story when you write it.


Brainstorming Technique: If you are stuck in a particular section, use the opposite strategy on a separate sheet of paper. With the opposite strategy, you come up with the opposite of what you want to understand what you do want for your character. For example, I don’t want my protagonist to want to be a magician. I don’t want my protagonist to want a million dollars. Based on what I come up with for what I don’t want my character to want, it can help me decide what I do want my character to want.

1. Name: 2. Age: 3. Height: 4. Eye color: 5. Physical appearance: 6. Hobbies/interests: 7. Occupation (Job): 8. What he/she wants: 9. What is getting in the way of him/her getting what he/she wants? 10. Fatal flaw(What makes this character imperfect, and therefore more human?) : 11. What does he/she fear? 12. In what city does he/she live? What is it like?

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13. Description of his/her bedroom: 14. Special skills/abilities/strengths: 15. Family (describe): 16. Information about their childhood that effects who they are presently: 17. Information about their teenage years that effects who they are presently: 18. Favorite bands/songs/types of music: 19. Favorite movies/TV shows/books: 20. Favorite food: 21. Favorite sports/sports teams: 22. Pet peeves (what annoys the character): 23. Favorite clothing style/outfit: 24. Special gestures/movements: 25. Speaking style (fast, talkative, monotone): 26. Fondest memory: 27. Insecurities (what does the character wish he/she could change about himself/herself?): 28. Temperament (easygoing, easily angered): 29. Negative traits/qualities:

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30. Things that upset him/her: 31. This character really cares about: 32. Things that make him/her happy: 33. Deepest, darkest secret: 34. Other people’s opinion of this character A. What do people like about this character? B. What do they dislike about this character? 35. Dream vacation: 36. Any pets? 37. Best thing that has ever happened to this character: 38. Worst thing that has ever happened to this character: 39. Three words or adjectives to describe this character: 40. If a song played every time this character walked into the room, what song would it be? 41. How will you get the audience to connect to the character?A. Make the protagonist sympathetic

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Give an example: B. Make us worry about the protagonistGive an example: C. Make the protagonist likeableGive an example: D. Make the protagonist funnyGive an example: E. Make the protagonist powerfulGive an example: 42. Overall, how does the character feel about himself/herself? 43. What emotional problem will the protagonist overcome in your story?

HW: Look through magazines, newspapers, on the Internet, or in nature to find images and things that represent or symbolize your character. Make a collage of the things you have gathered in order get a visual representation of your protagonist. Real writers do this to help them write dialogue better. They look at the collage and it helps them put words on the paper for the protagonist’s dialogue.

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Anticipatory Set: Based on what you know about the protagonist, who do you think the antagonist is?

The Antagonist

Antagonist= any force in a story or play that is in conflict with the protagonist. An antagonist may be another person, an aspect of the physical or social environment, or a destructive element in the protagonist’s own nature.

This character does not have to be bad in the truest sense of the word. In a love story, the relationship is protagonist-antagonist. The protagonist is the person who falls in love with someone and the antagonist is the person they fall in love with who does not yet love them back. The antagonist creates conflict in the story by being opposite to the protagonist in some way. The antagonist usually creates conflict by wanting something the protagonist does not want. If the protagonist wants to go to New York on vacation, the antagonist should want to go to the Amazon Rain Forest. If the protagonist wants to follow the law, the antagonist should want to break it.

Conflict Types Conflict- Conflict is a problem in the story that needs to be solved.

Conflict is the essence of a story. Without it, the story is boring.

-Man versus ManAnimals fight over obtaining food, securing space (territories, home ranges), and providing safety for their family matters.When valuable resources such as space, food, and mates are at stake, animals can be aggressive-that is they fight or threaten to fight. When aggression occurs in group-living species, and individuals interact with each other many times, we can measure dominance hierarchies (rank orderings of the individuals) in such groups. In the simplest case of group living-when animals live in groups of three-we might have individual 1 winning the majority of its fights with individuals 2 and 3, individual 2 winning the majority of its fights with individual 3, and individual 3 losing the majority of its fights with individuals 1 and 2. In that case,

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individual 1 would be top-ranked or alpha member of the hierarchy, individual 2 would be the second ranked or beta member, and individual 3 would be third ranked or gamma member of the hierarchy.Where an individual places in a dominance hierarchy has both proximate and ultimate implications. Individuals at the top of hierarchies often have access to more food, more mating opportunities, and safer territories than individuals at the lower end of hierarchies.

This animalistic man versus man conflict is seen when Jack has to kill Ralph in order to stay alpha forever on the island.

-Man versus The Self Man Does Not Want to Face/The Self Man Fears in the Form of Another Character

-Man versus NatureNature means anything that is natural like tornadoes, hurricanes, and fires or connects to nature like a fairy or an alien.Many of our problems with animals are territorial. Even today elephants and tigers kill humans if they’re forced out of their natural habitats.

- Man versus Self (internal conflict)Internal conflict is when there is a problem going on in the character’s mind. It’s when two opposing desires are fighting it out in a character’s mind. The character has to look at two options and decide upon one. For example, should I date Yule (the rich one) or should I date Herman (the funny, loving one)? Should I study for the test and get an “A” or should I go out and party and not study for the test but be accepted by my peers for going to the party? -Man versus Society/ A Societal ProblemThe nature of life is growth, expansion, exploration. To fit into society we must curb our natural impulse towards total expansion of Self and the indulgence of all our desires. People or situations who throw off these constraints are intriguing because they manifest our deepest drives. The eternal battle between Self and Others is the conundrum of civilization. When do we demand our due? When do we sacrifice for others? The allure of evil may well be the allure of doing just as we desire, without having to consider anyone else’s well being. - Man versus DeathIn man versus death, a character’s life is put at risk.

Some Antagonist Types

Unplanned Antagonist

This type of antagonist will say “I never meant for things to end up like this.”

Wrongdoer Antagonist

Generally the portrait of an evil person. Almost always, this type of antagonist is more interesting than the protagonist. In most cases, this type of antagonist must receive a punishment at the end of the story to satisfy the audience’s need for justice.

Seen as Innocent Antagonist

The audience is often caught saying to themselves “Oh! He did it!” This type of an antagonist is the staple of murder mysteries and whodunits.

Off The Wall These are the over-exaggerated weirdo antagonists.

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Unoriginal Antagonist

The toughest type of antagonist to write yet the most common one found in stories. This type of antagonist is not colorful, has little originality, does not ask for forgiveness, and offers the audience no big surprises. They are, simply stated, realistic.

The Internal Antagonist

This is the mental side of the protagonist that gets in the way of him achieving his goals.

Antagonist as a Symbol of One of the Seven Deadly SinsHave your antagonist be a blending of two of the seven deadly sins.

Pride- the quality of having an excessively high opinion of oneself or one’s importanceEnvy-a feeling of discontented or resentful longing aroused by someone else’s possessions, qualities, or luckAnger-a strong feeling of annoyance, displeasure, or hostilityLaziness/Sloth-reluctance to work or make an effort; lazinessGreed-intense and selfish desire for something, especially wealth, power, or foodGluttony- habitual greed or excess in eating

Group AntagonistsToo many people are never given the chance to be individuals; many others are afraid to do so lest they incur the wrath of others or fail in their efforts. Our animal nature tends towards herding and hive mentality. Our human nature tends towards individuation. Our spiritual nature tends towards group consciousness: working for the greater good without sacrificing the self. Our group-think nature stops us from rising above the animal level. The core premise of the Hero’s Journey is the individual separating from the tribe to create something new. The Matrix is an example of the individual (Neo) breaking out of the collective. In Lord of the Flies, Jack breaks from the group in order to rule according to his will and not the will of Ralph and Piggy.

Exiled from cliques, wounded egos can strike back in school shootings.

Antagonist Suffering from an Inferiority ComplexAccording to Adler ‘we all experience feelings of inferiority, since we all find ourselves in situations we wish we could improve.’ We deal with our feelings of inferiority through compensation, the natural inclination to succeed in other areas in order to cover our lacking in the areas in which we feel inferior. Just as a blind man will compensate for his lack of sight by developing a superior sense of hearing, the individual compensates for his inferiority complex by developing in the areas of life in which he can feel superior. Consequently, the instinctive reaction to an inferiority complex ‘will always be a compensatory movement toward a feeling of superiority.’ Jack, after not being elected leader, develops an inferiority complex as the plot continues to the point of wanting to kill Ralph in order to feel superior to him.

On the Topic of EvilSome traditions say the battle between Lucifer and Archangel Michael was the battle between intellect and emotion. Emotion won and humans have been manipulated by it ever since. Lucifer, which means ‘light-bringer’ in Latin, brings critical thinking skills: the ability to assess situations and motives, foresee consequences, and make informed decisions. Faith is an emotion that takes the place of knowledge and is a powerful tool to control the unthinking masses.

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Oppressive societies control communications, burn books, close schools, and kill intellectuals. If people lack information and critical thinking skills, you can better control them through fear.

Antagonist Example from Lord of the Flies

Ralph want to be leader and Jack wants to be leader at the same time. This creates conflict between the two of them frequently.

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The protagonist wants The antagonist’s desires oppose the protagonist’s desires. Because of this, conflict is created.The antagonist wants

By Yourself (for your story)

The protagonist wants

The antagonist’s desires oppose the protagonist’s desires. Because of this, conflict is created.

The antagonist wants

Internal AntagonistI doThe protagonist wants What is happening in the protagonist’s mind that stops him/her from achieving his/her goals? How might the protagonist change his/her perceptions so that he/she can conquer the internal antagonist?

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You do (for your story)The protagonist wants What is happening in the protagonist’s mind that stops him/her from achieving his/her goals? How might the protagonist change his/her perceptions so that he/she can conquer the internal antagonist?

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Antagonist Profile for Jack in Lord of the FliesAll big writers who have published pieces know their major antagonist inside and out. They use a profile like this one in order to get to know their character inside and out. When you write your story, you won’t include all of this information. You will pick and choose what you wish to reveal in your story when you write it.


Brainstorming Technique: When you get stuck and don’t know what to write, brainstorm ideas on a piece of paper. Listen to music to inspire ideas. Just listen to music and let the music inspire ideas.

Directions: Complete #1-41 for you antagonist, who will be a person. A story can have many antagonists, so do this for your major antagonist.

1. Name: Jack 2. Age: 3. Height: tall 4. Eye color: light blue 5. Physical appearance: “inside the floating cloak he was tall, thin, and bony; and his hair was red beneath the black cap. His face was crumpled and freckled, and ugly without silliness. Out of his face stared two light blue eyes, frustrated now, and turning, or ready to turn to anger” (17). 6. Hobbies/interests: singing, hunting 7. Occupation (Job): chapter chorister; becomes chief later 8. What he/she wants: to be chief 9. What is getting in the way of him/her getting what he/she wants? Ralph was voted chief 10. Fatal flaw(What makes this character imperfect, and therefore more human?) : he is sadistic 11. What does he/she fear? He fears the beast and not having power 12. In what city does he/she live? What is it like? They live on the island 13. Description of his/her bedroom: NA 14. Special skills/abilities/strengths: can sing a C sharp; “while the most obvious leader was Jack” ; is a good hunter 15. Family (describe): not much known 16. Information about their childhood that effects who they are presently: was the leader in the choir and continues to establish himself as leader in the present 17. Information about their teenage years that effects who they are presently: NA 18. Favorite bands/songs/types of music: choir music? 19. Favorite movies/TV shows/books: ? 20. Favorite food: piggy 21. Favorite sports/sports teams: hunting 22. Pet peeves (what annoys the character): not being a leader of the group 23. Favorite clothing style/outfit: he likes wearing special things on his head to establish himself as ruler 24. Special gestures/movements: his movements are harsh 25. Speaking style (fast, talkative, monotone): speaking with arrogance

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26. Fondest memory: cutting a pigs throat? 27. Insecurities (what does the character wish he/she could change about himself/herself?): he wishes he could change the fact that he is not leader 28. Temperament (easygoing, easily angered): angry “Jack settled the question for them with that contempt in his voice that could sound so funny and so final” (94). 29. Negative traits/qualities: he is evil 30. Things that upset him/her: he is upset that Ralph became leader and because Ralph is leader he wants to destroy him and take his power 31. This character really cares about: being the leader 32. Things that make him/her happy: hunting 33. Deepest, darkest secret: he knows that the beast was Simon but lies to the group to get them to fear the beast so that way he can control his tribe further 34. Other people’s opinion of this character A. What do people like about this character? They like that he has fun and that he takes the boys hunting and that he kills pigs B. What do they dislike about this character? They dislike that he is evil or “a terror” 35. Dream vacation: the island they are on? 36. Any pets? no 37. Best thing that has ever happened to this character: becoming leader 38. Worst thing that has ever happened to this character: not being elected leader 39. Three words or adjectives to describe this character: bloodthirsty, domineering, cruel 40. If a song played every time this character walked into the room, what song would it be? Any song by Blotted Science 41. Overall, how does the character feel about himself/herself? He feels he needs to have power all the time

HW: Look through magazines, newspapers, on the Internet, or in nature to find images and things that represent or symbolize your character. Make a collage of the things you have gathered in order get a visual representation of your antagonist. Real writers do this to help them write dialogue better. They look at the collage and it helps them put words on the paper for the antagonist’s dialogue.

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Name: Date: Period: Antagonist Profile HW (By Yourself for Your Story)

Due: All big writers who have published pieces know their major antagonist inside and out. They use a profile like this one in order to get to know their character inside and out. When you write your story, you won’t include all of this information. You will pick and choose what you wish to reveal in your story when you write it.


Brainstorming Technique: When you get stuck and don’t know what to write, brainstorm ideas on a piece of paper. Listen to music to inspire ideas. Just listen to music and let the music inspire ideas.

Directions: Complete #1-41 for you antagonist, who will be a person. A story can have many antagonists, so do this for your major antagonist.

1. Name: 2. Age: 3. Height: 4. Eye color: 5. Physical appearance: 6. Hobbies/interests: 7. Occupation (Job):

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8. What he/she wants: 9. What is getting in the way of him/her getting what he/she wants? 10. Fatal flaw(What makes this character imperfect, and therefore more human?) : 11. What does he/she fear? 12. In what city does he/she live? What is it like? 13. Description of his/her bedroom: 14. Special skills/abilities/strengths: 15. Family (describe): 16. Information about their childhood that effects who they are presently: 17. Information about their teenage years that effects who they are presently: 18. Favorite bands/songs/types of music: 19. Favorite movies/TV shows/books: 20. Favorite food: 21. Favorite sports/sports teams: 22. Pet peeves (what annoys the character): 23. Favorite clothing style/outfit:

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24. Special gestures/movements: 25. Speaking style (fast, talkative, monotone): 26. Fondest memory: 27. Insecurities (what does the character wish he/she could change about himself/herself?): 28. Temperament (easygoing, easily angered): 29. Negative traits/qualities: 30. Things that upset him/her: 31. This character really cares about: 32. Things that make him/her happy: 33. Deepest, darkest secret: 34. Other people’s opinion of this character A. What do people like about this character? B. What do they dislike about this character? 35. Dream vacation: 36. Any pets?

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37. Best thing that has ever happened to this character: 38. Worst thing that has ever happened to this character: 39. Three words or adjectives to describe this character: 40. If a song played every time this character walked into the room, what song would it be? 41. Overall, how does the character feel about himself/herself?

HW: Look through magazines, newspapers, on the Internet, or in nature to find images and things that represent or symbolize your character. Make a collage of the things you have gathered in order get a visual representation of your antagonist. Real writers do this to help them write dialogue better. They look at the collage and it helps them put words on the paper for the antagonist’s dialogue.

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Dialogue in a Short Story

Variations on the Word SaidContend-to state somethingAssert-to state somethingInsist-to state something firmly and oftenMaintain-to declare to be trueState-to express something in wordsDeclare-to state something

When a character says something in a paragraph, use the following formula:-“Words words words,” he said. OR- She said, “Words words words.”

Example from “Seventh Grade” by Gary Soto“I think it works,” Michael said. He scowled and let his upper lip quiver. His teeth

showed along with the ferocity of his soul. “Belinda Reyes walked by a while ago and looked at me,” he said.

I do:

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We Do:

HW: By Yourself:

When writing dialogue, begin a new paragraph to show a change in the speaker.“Words words words,” Thomas said.

“Words words words,” Franklin blurted.

“Words words words,” Thomas agreed.

Example from “Seventh Grade” by Gary Soto

They shook hands, raza-style, and jerked their heads at one another in a saludo de vato. “How come you’re making a face?” asked Victor.

“I ain’t making a face, ese. This is my face.” Michael said his face had changed during the summer.

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“What classes are you taking?” Michael said, scowling.

“French. How ‘bout you?

I do: We Do:

HW: By Yourself:

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If it is clear who is speaking, you don’t have to write he/she said before or after dialogue.

Example from “Seventh Grade” by Gary Soto

He looked sheepishly at the teacher, who was erasing the board, then widened his eyes in terror at Teresa who stood in front of him. “I didn’t know you knew French,” she said. “That was good.”

I do: We Do:

HW: By Yourself:

If you interrupt dialogue with he said/she said and then the speaker continues on with that same sentence, don’t capitalize the first word of the continuing dialogue.

“You begin a sentence,” he said, “continuing on with that same sentence now.”

Example from Where the Red Fern Grows by Wilson Rawls“We can leave here early on the morning of the twenty-second,” he said, “and barring

accidents, we should make the camp ground in plenty of time for the grand opening.”

I do: We Do:

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HW: By Yourself:

When in third person narration, italicize inner dialogue. Inner dialogue is when a character is thinking to himself/herself.

They look nothing alike, he thought. He should have known Giselle was not Ariana.

If you are using first person narration, you do not need to use italics to show inner dialogue (when a person is thinking to himself/herself)

Name: Date: Period: Dialogue Review 1

Directions: Put the quotation marks and the comma where they belong in the paragraphs below

1. I’ll never be good at sports she fumed one rainy day as she lay on her bed gazing at the shelf

her father had made her to hold her awards. I wish I could win something, anything, even marbles.

2. Her father looked at her mother and then back at his daughter. When is it, honey?

This Saturday. Can you come?

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We can leave here early on the morning of the twenty-second he said and barring accidents, we should make the camp ground in plenty of time for the grand opening.

4. Correctly write dialogue between 2 characters below.


Directions: Put the quotation marks and the comma where they belong in the paragraphs below1.

I did it! Lupe said under her breath. 2.

You, honey? Her mother knew Lupe was no good at sports.

Yeah. I beat Alfonso at marbles, and he’s pretty good.




1.That ain’t my style said Casey.

2.

So you think I should talk to Mrs. Gaines? she asked the teacher. She would know about ballet?

She would be a good bet the teacher said. Then added Or the gym teacher, Mrs. Garza.

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1.He watched her on the sly. As she turned to leave, he stood up and hurried to the door, where

he managed to catch her eye. She smiled and said Hi, Victor.

He smiled back and said, Yeah, that’s me. His brown face blushed.

2. In English they reviewed the parts of speech. Mr. Lucas, a portly man, waddled down the aisle,

asking, What is a noun?

A person, place, or thing said the class in unison. Yes, now somebody give me an example of a person—you, Victor Rodriguez.


Name: Date: Period:

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Dialogue Assessment1. Put the quotation marks and the comma where they belong in the paragraphs below.

Victor couldn’t stand to look at Teresa. He was sweaty with shame. Yeah, well, I picked up a few things from movies and books and stuff like that. They left the class together. Teresa asked him if he would help her with her French.

Sure, anytime Victor said.

I won’t be bothering you, will I?

Oh no, I like being bothered.

Bonjour, Teresa said, leaving him outside her next class. She smiled and pushed wisps of hair from her face.


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