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The Five-Paragraph Essay
A Framework for Expository Writing
Based on the ideas of Paula Barnard
The Five-Paragraph Essay
A Framework for Expository Writing
Essay and Slides: Sheri Edwards
We write for fun. We write letters,
stories, jokes, and to share
information with our family or friends.
Most school writing, however, is
expository writingexpository writing and fits into a
different category.
Different Kinds of Writing
Goals Writing Process:
– Prewriting Ideas and details– Drafting in paragraphs with topic sentences,
main ideas, details, concluding sentences– Revise (see traits below)– Edit– Strategies (prewrite, color code, re-read
several times for different reasons) Writing Traits:
– Ideas -- elaboration– Word choice -- nouns, verbs, transitions– Organization -- ideas ordered (color code,
number), transitions
Expository Writing
Gives information about a topic Explains ideas Gives directions Shows how to do something
The purpose of most expository writing is to communicate ideas
or answer questions.
Expository Writing Uses Transitions
Writer’s Express says:
“Expository writing uses transition words (such as first, second,
and most importantly). These words help guide the reader through
the explanation.” See:
Page 324 in your yellow Ginn English text.
Page 106 in WS 2000
Pages 472-473 in blue WSWriter’s Express - A Handbook for Young Writers, Thinkers, and Learners ©1995
Transitions
Page 324 in your yellow Ginn English text.
Page 106 in WS 2000
Pages 472-473 in blue WS
Links:– http://www.writinghelp-central.com/article-transition-
words.html
– http://www.bookrags.com/articles/11.html
– http://www.union.k12.sc.us/ems/Teachers--ELA--Writing%20Transition%20Words.htm
So, your teacher gives you a prompt and tells you to write an
expository essay:
What do you do???
Don’t panic.
Follow this plan… (Watch for the color-coding, it will help
you organize your ideas.)
“Write about your friend.What makes your friend special?”
It’s Easy!
You ONLY Need Three Ideas...
Start with your main idea or topic.(use key words from the prompt)
Three reasons that show your topic sentence is true
And three examples for each of your reasons (Remember to show, not tell.)
That’s all you need for the start of a great essay!!!
Use Correct Paragraph Form
Topic Sentence Three Examples
– A detail or reason for each example
Conclusion or use transitions
No paragraph should be lessthan eight sentences.
Each paragraph must include:
Start with a topic sentence that uses the key words from the prompt. Then write three reasons that prove the topic sentence is true.
My friend, Raz, makes life fun. He is funny and easy to share with. Loyalty is important to him. He always keeps his word.
The Beginning -Your First Sentences
Now end with a conclusion:
Remember, each paragraph may have a
concluding sentence, such as “My best friend is Raz.” using different words
than the topic sentence (My friend, Raz, makes life fun.)
“My best friend is Raz.”
Raz and I chill together.
You already have your
first paragraph done!
Pretty easy, huh?
To make it even easier look at
this organizational plan using
color-coding.
Paragraph 1: The Introduction
Introduction or Topic Sentence (Use key words from the prompt)
First Subtopic (A “Showing” Example)
Second Subtopic (A “Showing” Example)
Third Subtopic (A “Showing” Example)
Conclusion (Restates Introduction)
Paragraph 1: Example
My friend, Raz, makes
life fun. He is funny and easy to share with. Loyalty is important to him. He always keeps his word. Raz and I hang out together.
Restate each subtopic as the topic sentence for each of the next three paragraphs. First Subtopic (Example #1)
“He is funny and easy share with.” is the topic sentence you will restate for your next
paragraph.
Paragraph 2: Example #1
Topic Sentence (Restates Example #1 from the Introduction “He is beautiful and easy to care for.” )
3 Example Sentences (Prove your Topic Sentence) And a detail for each example.
Concluding Sentence (Restates Topic Sentence from Example #1)
Paragraph 2: First Subtopic
Topic Sentence (Subtopic from paragraph 1)
Main Idea 1 (A “Showing” Example)
A detail for main idea (a “Showing” Example)
Main Idea 2 (A “Showing” Example)
A detail for main idea (a “Showing” Example)
Main Idea 3 (A “Showing” Example)
A detail for main idea (a “Showing” Example)
Conclusion (Restates topic statement)
ColorCode
Paragraph 2: Example #1
He is funny and easy share with. Every day he says, “What’s up?” and tells something funny. For example, once he locked his little brother outside in his underwear. He’s always teasing. Last week he moved all my books to the next locker, but he brought my first period book to class so I wouldn’t miss anything. Even though he’s funny, he always knows what’s too far, and he always knows if I’m not in the mood for silliness. If he sees sadness, he checks in with, “What’s really up, Dude?” I can share about my idiot sister wasting all the time shopping for a dress so Mom couldn’t have time for my new shoes. Funny and concerned; that’s Raz.
Restate the second subtopic
as the topic sentence for the
next paragraph.
Second Subtopic (Example #2)
“Loyalty is important to him.” is the topic sentence you will
restate for your next paragraph.
Paragraph 3: Example #2 Topic Sentence (Restate
Example #2 from the Introduction “Playing with him is lots of fun.”)
3 Example Sentences (Prove your Topic Sentence)
And a detail for each example
Concluding Sentence (Restates Topic Sentence from Example #2 -- transition in next paragraph)
Paragraph 3: Second Subtopic
Topic Sentence (Subtopic from paragraph 1)
Main Idea 1 (A “Showing” Example)
A detail for main idea (a “Showing” Example)
Main Idea 2 (A “Showing” Example)
A detail for main idea (a “Showing” Example)
Main Idea 3 (A “Showing” Example)
•A detail for main idea (a “Showing” Example)
• Conclusion (Restates topic statement)
ColorCode
Paragraph 3: Example #2
Loyalty is important to him. If he
sees his friends need help, he’s there for them. For example, I left my bus pass at home and he loaned me the money so I didn’t need walk all the way home. If someone talks trash to his friends, he’s there to back us up. Once a kid called out, “#$(@” and Raz popped up from behind his locker, and grinned back, “Say it again, Sam” as the teacher walked by. Heh, heh. The kid got detention--that’s Raz. He finds a fun way to to step up. He and I were to see the Mariners play, but I got the flu; he stayed home and we wrecked bad on Ghost Rider. He’ll be there for you, I guarantee it.
Use the third subtopic (example)
as the topic sentence for the
next paragraph.
Third Subtopic (Example #3)
“He always keeps his word.”
is the topic sentence for your next
paragraph.
Paragraph 4: Example #3
Topic Sentence (Restates Example #3
from the Introduction “Romeo takes care of me.”)
3 Example Sentences (That prove
your Topic Sentence)
And a detail for each example
Concluding Sentence (Restates
Topic Sentence from Example #3)
Paragraph 4: Third Subtopic
Topic Sentence (Subtopic from paragraph 1)
Main Idea 1 (A “Showing” Example)
A detail for main idea (a “Showing” Example)
Main Idea 2 (A “Showing” Example)
A detail for main idea (a “Showing” Example)
Main Idea 3 (A “Showing” Example)
A detail for main idea (a “Showing” Example)
Conclusion (Restates topic statement)
ColorCode
Paragraph 4: Example #3 He always keeps his word. Once Raz had
the opportunity to watch the Seahawks in Seattle, but he had promised me and our other friends to drive to the beach for a last blast before winter. He kept that promise. He even keeps his promise to the teachers; if he says, “Can’t I do it for homework,” he will. Once he offered to pick me up from basketball practice. After 15 minutes, I started to the bus stop. Just then he pulled up with our buddy Sam; he’d promised him we’d all trip to the mall so he was a little late. Late, but always on his word. That’s Raz.
Paragraph 5: Conclusion(Restates Paragraph 1: Introduction)
Introduction First Subtopic (Example)
Second Subtopic (Example)
Third Sentence (Example)
Conclusion
Paragraph 5: Conclusion(Restates Paragraph 1: Introduction)
As you can see, Raz is a great friend. It’s fun to laugh and joke with him. He’ll always stick with his friends. We can all count on him to make his word true. Raz is a wonderful friend.
There you have it!
Expository writing isn’t that difficult
when you have a plana plan.. To make it
even easier you may want to use a
graphic organizer like the following
ones to organize your thoughts.
Draft
Use your plan to write your first draft.
Revise
Check for: Ideas: interesting details? Organization: logical with transitions? Word Choice: vivid verbs, nifty nouns,
alliteration, simile, imagery, etc. Sentence Fluency: short and long;
different beginnings Voice: details and words that create mind
movies
RAZ: Roaring Attitude Zapper
“This must be Thursday; I could never get a hang of Thursday,” my friend Raz beamed at me as he meets me at the bus. Douglas Adams actually said that, but Raz thinks its funny. He grins at me with that crooked, silly grin that makes the sun shine brighter. He pops his hat over his long, black hair which he purposely lets fly any old way, just so his mom says, “Can’t you at least brush it back?” Nope. He’s got his own way and his own say, but Rainsford Alexander Zilothe is my best friend. My friend, Raz, makes life fun. He is funny and easy share with. You’ll see him in the halls, smiling and greeting everyone with his loud, “What’s up?” as he winds through the crowd to his next class. He never misses any one. Loyalty is important to him. He always keeps his word. Raz and I chill together with several friends every day. He’s a roaring attitude zapper.
Remember those mornings when everyone fusses because everyone’s late? The day just starts out wrong? My friend Raz zaps that bad attitude right away. He is funny and easy share with. Every day he says, “What’s up?” and tells something funny. For example, once he locked his little brother outside in his underwear. Of course, he let him in right away, but Raz couldn’t resist the opportunity. He’s always teasing. Last week he rammed all my books into the next locker, but he brought my first period book to class so I wouldn’t miss anything. Even though he’s funny, he always knows what’s too far, and he always knows if his friends are not in the mood for silliness. If he sees sadness, he checks in with, “What’s really up, Dude?” I can share about my idiot sister wasting all the time shopping for a dress so Mom couldn’t have time for my new shoes. Funny and concerned; that’s Raz.
Even though Raz stretches the funny bones, loyalty is important to him. If he sees his friends need help, he’s there for them. For example, I left my bus pass at home and he loaned me the change so I didn’t need hoof-it all the way home. If someone talks trash to his friends, he’s there to back us up. Once a new kid yelled, “#$(@” and Raz popped up from behind his locker, and grinned back, “Say it again, Sam” as the teacher walked by monitoring the halls. Heh, heh. The kid spent after school in detention--that’s Raz. He finds a fun way to to step up. He and I once received tickets to watch the Mariners play, but I flopped out with the flu; he stayed home and we wrecked totally all day on Internet Ghost Rider. Once again, he zapped the attitude, making the bad good. He’ll be there for you, I guarantee it.
Finally, Raz always keeps his word. Once Raz had the opportunity to watch the Seahawks in Seattle, but he had promised his friends, including me, to drive to the beach for a last blast before winter. The sun still beat down at a blazing eighty degrees; we really dreamed of a dive in the cool water. He kept that promise, and we enjoyed a great late September beach day. He even keeps his promise to the teachers; if he says, “Can’t I do it for homework?” He will. Once he offered to pick me up from basketball practice. After 15 minutes of waiting, I tromped off to the bus stop. Just then Raz, the zapper, pulled up with our buddy Sam; he’d promised him we’d all trip to the mall, making it to me a little late. Late, but always on his word. That’s Raz.
Even if it is Thursday, count on Raz to jazz up the day. It’s fun to laugh and joke with him. “Zip up that frown,” he’ll jab at you and knock off your hat. But then, he’ll check out what’s wrong, and always, always, stick with his friends. We can all count on him to make his word true. C. S. Lewis once said, “Friendship is born at that moment when one person says to another: "What! You, too? Thought I was the only one." That’s something Raz might say on your bad day, just so you don’t feel all alone. Raz is a fantastic friend that way. Don’t you wish you had a friend like that?
Edit
Finally: edit your work for: Capitals Spelling Punctuation Grammar Missing words/letters
Goals: How well did you: Writing Process:
– 4 3 2 1 Prewrite for Ideas and details?– 4 3 2 1 Draft in paragraphs with topic sentences, main
ideas, details, concluding sentences– 4 3 2 1 Revise (see traits below)?– 4 3 2 1 Edit?– 4 3 2 1 Use Strategies (prewrite, color code, re-read
several times for different reasons) Writing Traits:
– 4 3 2 1 Ideas -- elaborate with more detail, examples?– 4 3 2 1 Word choice -- add/substitute nouns, verbs,
transitions?– 4 3 2 1 Organization -- ideas ordered (color code,
number), transitions (move, remove)
Have fun with your writing & remember, you only need
THREE IDEASTHREE IDEAS for a great expository essay!