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STANDARDSSTANDARDSSTANDARDSSTANDARDSWRITING STRATEGIESWRITING STRATEGIES

1.2 Use 1.2 Use precise precise language, language, action action verbsverbs, , sensory detailssensory details, , appropriate appropriate modifiersmodifiers, , and the and the active active rather rather than the passive than the passive voice.voice.

WRITING STRATEGIESWRITING STRATEGIES

1.2 Use 1.2 Use precise precise language, language, action action verbsverbs, , sensory detailssensory details, , appropriate appropriate modifiersmodifiers, , and the and the active active rather rather than the passive than the passive voice.voice.

STANDARDSSTANDARDSSTANDARDSSTANDARDSWRITTEN AND ORAL ENGLISH LANGUAGE CONVENTIONS

1.11.1 Identify and correctly Identify and correctly use use clausesclauses (e.g., main and (e.g., main and subordinate), subordinate), phrasesphrases (e.g., (e.g., gerund, infinitive, and gerund, infinitive, and participial), and participial), and mechanics of mechanics of punctuationpunctuation (e.g., semicolons, (e.g., semicolons, colons, ellipses, hyphens). colons, ellipses, hyphens).

WRITTEN AND ORAL ENGLISH LANGUAGE CONVENTIONS

1.11.1 Identify and correctly Identify and correctly use use clausesclauses (e.g., main and (e.g., main and subordinate), subordinate), phrasesphrases (e.g., (e.g., gerund, infinitive, and gerund, infinitive, and participial), and participial), and mechanics of mechanics of punctuationpunctuation (e.g., semicolons, (e.g., semicolons, colons, ellipses, hyphens). colons, ellipses, hyphens).

STANDARDSSTANDARDSSTANDARDSSTANDARDSWRITTEN AND ORAL ENGLISH LANGUAGE CONVENTIONS

1.21.2 Understand Understand sentence sentence constructionconstruction (e.g., parallel (e.g., parallel structure, subordination, structure, subordination, proper placement of proper placement of modifiers) and proper modifiers) and proper English English usageusage (e.g., (e.g., consistency of verb tenses).consistency of verb tenses).

WRITTEN AND ORAL ENGLISH LANGUAGE CONVENTIONS

1.21.2 Understand Understand sentence sentence constructionconstruction (e.g., parallel (e.g., parallel structure, subordination, structure, subordination, proper placement of proper placement of modifiers) and proper modifiers) and proper English English usageusage (e.g., (e.g., consistency of verb tenses).consistency of verb tenses).

OBJECTIVEOBJECTIVEOBJECTIVEOBJECTIVE

Using Using ________________________________, , students will identify students will identify and apply five basic and apply five basic Brushstrokes and Brushstrokes and practice composing practice composing and and revisingrevising sentences.sentences.

Using Using ________________________________, , students will identify students will identify and apply five basic and apply five basic Brushstrokes and Brushstrokes and practice composing practice composing and and revisingrevising sentences.sentences.

THE BRUSHSTROKESTHE BRUSHSTROKES

•ParticiplesParticiples•VIVID VERBSVIVID VERBS• Inverted AdjectivesInverted Adjectives•AbsolutesAbsolutes•AppositivesAppositives

PAINTING WITH VIVID VERBSPAINTING WITH VIVID VERBS

•verbs that show verbs that show action – not action – not passive voice passive voice

• The result was The result was spectacular. The voltage spectacular. The voltage hit his wet mouth like a hit his wet mouth like a sledge and stiffened him sledge and stiffened him like a poker. He snarled, like a poker. He snarled, growling deeper, and tried growling deeper, and tried to hang on, but the jolt to hang on, but the jolt was too powerful and was too powerful and slammed him back and slammed him back and down on his rump.down on his rump.

VIVID VERBS PAINTED BY VIVID VERBS PAINTED BY GARY PAULSEN IN GARY PAULSEN IN MY LIFE IN DOG YEARSMY LIFE IN DOG YEARS::

VIVID VERBS PAINTED BY GLORIAVIVID VERBS PAINTED BY GLORIA• The UFO shot The UFO shot

across the sky across the sky leaving a trail of leaving a trail of light.light.

• The UFO hurtled The UFO hurtled across the sky across the sky splitting the sky splitting the sky with a trail of light.with a trail of light.

GUIDED PRACTICEGUIDED PRACTICE: : TRY THIS BRUSH STROKE WITH THE TRY THIS BRUSH STROKE WITH THE

FOLLOWING…FOLLOWING…

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THE BRUSHSTROKESTHE BRUSHSTROKES

•ParticiplesParticiples•Vivid VerbsVivid Verbs

•INVERTED INVERTED ADJECTIVESADJECTIVES•AbsolutesAbsolutes•AppositivesAppositives

PAINTING WITH INVERTED ADJECTIVESPAINTING WITH INVERTED ADJECTIVES

•Adjectives Adjectives shifted out of shifted out of order amplify order amplify the details of the details of the image.the image.

ADJECTIVE OUT OF ORDER PAINTED BY ADJECTIVE OUT OF ORDER PAINTED BY NEWTON PECK IN NEWTON PECK IN A DAY NO PIGS WOULD DIEA DAY NO PIGS WOULD DIE::

• I could smell Mama, crisp I could smell Mama, crisp and starched, plumping and starched, plumping my pillow, and the cool my pillow, and the cool muslin muslin pillowcase touched both pillowcase touched both my ears as the back of my ears as the back of my head sank into all my head sank into all those feathers.those feathers.

INVERTED ADJECTIVES PAINTED BY INVERTED ADJECTIVES PAINTED BY ANNAANNA• The kitten yawned The kitten yawned

after a hard day of after a hard day of chasing birds.chasing birds.

• The kitten, rotten The kitten, rotten but irresistible, but irresistible, yawned after a yawned after a hard day of hard day of chasing birds.chasing birds.

GUIDED PRACTICEGUIDED PRACTICE: : TRY THIS BRUSH STROKE WITH THE FOLLOWING…TRY THIS BRUSH STROKE WITH THE FOLLOWING…

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THE BRUSHSTROKES•ParticiplesParticiples•Vivid VerbsVivid Verbs• Inverted AdjectivesInverted Adjectives

•ABSOLUTESABSOLUTES•AppositivesAppositives

PAINTING WITH ABSOLUTESPAINTING WITH ABSOLUTES

•Noun + Participial Noun + Participial (-ing, -ed) (-ing, -ed)

ABSOLUTES PAINTED BY ANNE RICE INABSOLUTES PAINTED BY ANNE RICE IN THE VAMPIRE LESTATTHE VAMPIRE LESTAT::

• The mummy was moving. The The mummy was moving. The mummy’s right arm was mummy’s right arm was outstretched,outstretched, the torn wrappings hanging from it, the torn wrappings hanging from it, as the being stepped out of its gilded as the being stepped out of its gilded box! The scream froze in her throat. box! The scream froze in her throat. The thing was coming towards her – The thing was coming towards her – towards Henry, who stood with his towards Henry, who stood with his back to it – moving with a weak, back to it – moving with a weak, shuffling gait, that arm outstretched shuffling gait, that arm outstretched before it, the dust rising from the before it, the dust rising from the rotting linen covering it, a great smell rotting linen covering it, a great smell of dust and decay filling the room.of dust and decay filling the room.

ABSOLUTES PAINTED BY DARRINABSOLUTES PAINTED BY DARRIN• Andrew smiled as he Andrew smiled as he

stared at the wrinkly stared at the wrinkly figure that was to be figure that was to be his baby brother.his baby brother.

• Andrew sat, heart Andrew sat, heart pounding and smile pounding and smile beaming, as he beaming, as he stared at the wrinkly stared at the wrinkly figure that was to be figure that was to be his baby brother.his baby brother.

GUIDED PRACTICEGUIDED PRACTICE: : TRY THIS BRUSH STROKE WITH THE FOLLOWING…TRY THIS BRUSH STROKE WITH THE FOLLOWING…

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THE BRUSHSTROKESTHE BRUSHSTROKES

•ParticiplesParticiples•Vivid VerbsVivid Verbs• Inverted AdjectivesInverted Adjectives•AbsolutesAbsolutes

•APPOSITIVESAPPOSITIVES

PAINTING WITH PAINTING WITH APPOSITIVESAPPOSITIVES

•a noun a noun that adds that adds a second a second imageimage

APPOSITIVES PAINTED BY CORNELIUS RYAN IN APPOSITIVES PAINTED BY CORNELIUS RYAN IN THE LONGEST DAYTHE LONGEST DAY::

Plowing through the choppy Plowing through the choppy gray waters, a phalanx of gray waters, a phalanx of ships bore down on Hitler’s ships bore down on Hitler’s Europe, fast new attack Europe, fast new attack transports, slow rust-transports, slow rust-scarred freighters, small scarred freighters, small ocean liners, channel ocean liners, channel steamers, hospital ships, steamers, hospital ships, weather-beaten tankers, weather-beaten tankers, and swarms of fussing and swarms of fussing tugs. tugs.

APPOSITIVES PAINTED BY EDUARDOAPPOSITIVES PAINTED BY EDUARDO• The woman stared at The woman stared at

the smooth waters and the smooth waters and dreamt of days gone by.dreamt of days gone by.

• The woman, a devoted The woman, a devoted wife and mother, stared wife and mother, stared at the smooth water, at the smooth water, the water that mystified the water that mystified her as a child, and her as a child, and dreamt of those dreamt of those whimsical days gone by.whimsical days gone by.

GUIDED PRACTICEGUIDED PRACTICE: : TRY THIS BRUSH STROKE WITH THE FOLLOWING…TRY THIS BRUSH STROKE WITH THE FOLLOWING…

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THE BRUSHSTROKESTHE BRUSHSTROKES

•PARTICIPLESPARTICIPLES•VIVID VERBSVIVID VERBS• INVERTED ADJECTIVESINVERTED ADJECTIVES•ABSOLUTESABSOLUTES•APPOSITIVESAPPOSITIVES

PRACTICE PRACTICE PAINTINGPAINTING SCENES SCENES• Find & cut out a Find & cut out a

scene, image, or scene, image, or photograph from a photograph from a magazine.magazine.

• Write out [describe] Write out [describe] the what is going on the what is going on in the image on your in the image on your own sheet of paper.own sheet of paper.

• Magazines or Magazines or Newspapers:Newspapers:–Sports IllustratedSports Illustrated–TimeTime

CLOSURECLOSURE

Any Questions?Any Questions?

Note 1 or 2 Brush Strokes Note 1 or 2 Brush Strokes you need MORE work on for you need MORE work on for tomorrow.tomorrow.

HOMEWORKHOMEWORKHOMEWORKHOMEWORK

1.1.Person, Place, Person, Place, ObjectObject

2.2.Describe it (simple Describe it (simple sentence)sentence)

3.3.Describe/Revise it Describe/Revise it with with 2 or 3 brushstrokes2 or 3 brushstrokes

1.1.Person, Place, Person, Place, ObjectObject

2.2.Describe it (simple Describe it (simple sentence)sentence)

3.3.Describe/Revise it Describe/Revise it with with 2 or 3 brushstrokes2 or 3 brushstrokes